Haunted Even At Deathbed!
67-Word General Fiction. Said! Haunted at deathbed!54 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Johnson1
What an incredibly interesting poem! You have a uniqueness like I have never seen!
Very well done.
Thank you for sharing and good luck to you with your writing!
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What an incredibly interesting poem! You have a uniqueness like I have never seen!
Very well done.
Thank you for sharing and good luck to you with your writing!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Jackson77
I really hope that events on this earth dont haunt me once I leave this mortal coil. It all depends on what you believe as no one knows the final truth. You might pay for your mistakes here on this earth they may haunt you then again they may not and your spirit will, at last, be free. Enjoyed your poem, it asks the real questions.
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I really hope that events on this earth dont haunt me once I leave this mortal coil. It all depends on what you believe as no one knows the final truth. You might pay for your mistakes here on this earth they may haunt you then again they may not and your spirit will, at last, be free. Enjoyed your poem, it asks the real questions.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
Comment from Cindy Warren
Poor guy. I wonder what he did that haunts him so much. Call it karma or reaping what you've sown, things work out in the end. I don't think he'll get a big punishment for a small mistake.
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Poor guy. I wonder what he did that haunts him so much. Call it karma or reaping what you've sown, things work out in the end. I don't think he'll get a big punishment for a small mistake.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
Comment from Diana L Crawford
This is a beautiful and emotion plea to God. It would be grand to know if things haunt us after death, or can we truly be forgiven. No matter how much faith one has, these questions do linger deep inside us because truly no one really knows for sure. Great job! :)
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This is a beautiful and emotion plea to God. It would be grand to know if things haunt us after death, or can we truly be forgiven. No matter how much faith one has, these questions do linger deep inside us because truly no one really knows for sure. Great job! :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from the13thpoet
Another good offering from you. I found it to be deep and thought provoking. As beautiful as this earth is, it is sometimes easy to forget that this is the Devil's playground. I can only hope and pray that when my soul leaves this flesh that only goodness and love follows and none of the nonsense of this world follows.
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Another good offering from you. I found it to be deep and thought provoking. As beautiful as this earth is, it is sometimes easy to forget that this is the Devil's playground. I can only hope and pray that when my soul leaves this flesh that only goodness and love follows and none of the nonsense of this world follows.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Alex Rosel
This is an intriguing piece of introspection. It makes for good flash fiction.
Personally, I would revise O man, how right you're! to O man, how right you are! I know you're is a contraction for you are, but using it in this context doesn't work for me.
Apart from that, there's nothing else I would change :)
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This is an intriguing piece of introspection. It makes for good flash fiction.
Personally, I would revise O man, how right you're! to O man, how right you are! I know you're is a contraction for you are, but using it in this context doesn't work for me.
Apart from that, there's nothing else I would change :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Joan E.
I hope you are not really feeling punished for a lifetime for small mistakes--we all make them and that would not be fair! Your title spelling out the word "head" is very creative, and the picture you selected depicts anguish well. Sighs- Joan
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I hope you are not really feeling punished for a lifetime for small mistakes--we all make them and that would not be fair! Your title spelling out the word "head" is very creative, and the picture you selected depicts anguish well. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
Comment from Insider98
Very thought provoking! I hope less and less people go through the same thing just before their passing. But it's hard. Even little mistakes can haunts us, as you say. Great job! I love the way you express yourself.
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Very thought provoking! I hope less and less people go through the same thing just before their passing. But it's hard. Even little mistakes can haunts us, as you say. Great job! I love the way you express yourself.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
Comment from Zue65
Even in writing prose this author speaks his mind and his devotion to God in his own style, in his own rules. This has made his posts interesting and worth looking forward to. Thanks for sharing.
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Even in writing prose this author speaks his mind and his devotion to God in his own style, in his own rules. This has made his posts interesting and worth looking forward to. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
Comment from RubyAutumn
You said much with few words. There was a poetic feel to the short piece. After having to deal with various health issues over the last few years, I have been thinking about my own mortality and wasted time. I could relate to this work. I felt like I was reading something from medieval times.
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You said much with few words. There was a poetic feel to the short piece. After having to deal with various health issues over the last few years, I have been thinking about my own mortality and wasted time. I could relate to this work. I felt like I was reading something from medieval times.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
