Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Hold Death's Hand"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
The question isn't whether or not you will dance with Death. The question is, when the dance begins, who will lead? Or will you dance as equals? The poem is written very well. It is enigmatic and yet there is a sentiment within that tugs at the soul.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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The question isn't whether or not you will dance with Death. The question is, when the dance begins, who will lead? Or will you dance as equals? The poem is written very well. It is enigmatic and yet there is a sentiment within that tugs at the soul.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2020
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Love this review give me something to consider about this write. Thanking you for your generous rate and awakening views.
Comment from AGNA
This poem is full of beautiful melancholic melody but it shouldn't be in horror or thriller because it reaches height of emotions although darkness is there in this poem but that too doesn't drown you in it but highlight the emotions. Reading it was a mesmerizing experience for me.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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This poem is full of beautiful melancholic melody but it shouldn't be in horror or thriller because it reaches height of emotions although darkness is there in this poem but that too doesn't drown you in it but highlight the emotions. Reading it was a mesmerizing experience for me.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2020
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Glad certain aspects in this write were found appealing to your interests: perhaps further revisions can clear more of the path. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from May 1
I love the image you chose for this one. I think I can see what your general idea was and I really like it. Once again I can feel the power hidden behind your words. However, I am having trouble understanding some parts, some of the wording has me confused. Overall, I think it's a great idea that needs a bit more polishing.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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I love the image you chose for this one. I think I can see what your general idea was and I really like it. Once again I can feel the power hidden behind your words. However, I am having trouble understanding some parts, some of the wording has me confused. Overall, I think it's a great idea that needs a bit more polishing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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I will consider your opinion and will try to apply its view to enhance its read. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comment.
Comment from Sandra Ludwick
Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I enjoyed reading it. You have painted a vivid picture with your words. Very, very nicely done.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts through your poem. I enjoyed reading it. You have painted a vivid picture with your words. Very, very nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Some reader are having problems with the read. I see at least the attempted concepts are well received by you. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thoughts.
Comment from Cybertron1986
That word play "sorrow with no tomorrow" goes well with the morbid tone of this piece. As the reader, it makes me feel almost close to the darker side of a world that has yet to be understood, and frightened of at the same time. Great picture. Truly a piece to be reckoned with!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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That word play "sorrow with no tomorrow" goes well with the morbid tone of this piece. As the reader, it makes me feel almost close to the darker side of a world that has yet to be understood, and frightened of at the same time. Great picture. Truly a piece to be reckoned with!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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We're all home among family dispute beliefs opinionated, pleased aspects in this particular write were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Fred Fitzsimmons
Hi TPAC,
You have a potent message stated here that is expressed with a deep passion that resonates. The transitions and wording felt a bit forced in an effort to make strong points. With a little work to smooth things out, this could be a powerful piece. Best to you.
F.J.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Hi TPAC,
You have a potent message stated here that is expressed with a deep passion that resonates. The transitions and wording felt a bit forced in an effort to make strong points. With a little work to smooth things out, this could be a powerful piece. Best to you.
F.J.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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Appreciate your point made already structured a revision to this write learning proper conveyances. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute given flaws.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
The picture you chose is scary as hell, but I'm sorry I couldn't understand any part of your post. Too much jumping around and word placement has
me confused. Some writers may understand it, but not me. Please understand, I am not saying it isn't good, just that I find it hard to give a good review to something I don't understand.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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The picture you chose is scary as hell, but I'm sorry I couldn't understand any part of your post. Too much jumping around and word placement has
me confused. Some writers may understand it, but not me. Please understand, I am not saying it isn't good, just that I find it hard to give a good review to something I don't understand.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2019
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I get that a lot working on improving flawed aspects in my writes pleased aspects were captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute given flaws.
Comment from kahpot
Wow! this one took some reading (for me) several times, it does speak and tell me of the torment, and that death may claim us at any time, and will not or cannot chose between the good and the evil (abusers), I enjoyed this very much it made me and will continue to make me think****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Wow! this one took some reading (for me) several times, it does speak and tell me of the torment, and that death may claim us at any time, and will not or cannot chose between the good and the evil (abusers), I enjoyed this very much it made me and will continue to make me think****kahpot
Comment Written 25-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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I'm doing revisions on all my writes, attempts hopeful of enhancing my thoughts to the readers better, pleased aspects in this write were appealing to your interests, thanking you dispute for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from WryWriter
Tormented soul from abuse walks as if in hell throughout life. Coors to try to relax the mind. Confusion the only relief...or so the king of death makes the suffering believe. Good artwork choice for theme.
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One suggestion for your consideration although it works as is:
The first line:
When it fallen to you sorrow plagues life,
When it (befalls) to you sorrow plagues life,
----Great work!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Tormented soul from abuse walks as if in hell throughout life. Coors to try to relax the mind. Confusion the only relief...or so the king of death makes the suffering believe. Good artwork choice for theme.
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One suggestion for your consideration although it works as is:
The first line:
When it fallen to you sorrow plagues life,
When it (befalls) to you sorrow plagues life,
----Great work!
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Great suggestion having made further revision since your read, trying to untwist my tongue, correcting my grammar flaws. Good shout! Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- to feel so down and isolated that even Heaven's door seems locked... this is such a sad thought... but your overall suggestion of instead of fighting the darkness we should embrace it... how intriguing! ;) ;) I would suggest changing your title to "Hold Death's Hand" just for grammatical clarity. :) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Wow -- to feel so down and isolated that even Heaven's door seems locked... this is such a sad thought... but your overall suggestion of instead of fighting the darkness we should embrace it... how intriguing! ;) ;) I would suggest changing your title to "Hold Death's Hand" just for grammatical clarity. :) ;) Thanx for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 24-May-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2019
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Super tip will do, having my problem with grammar, making revisions throughout my writes, learning through input such as yours. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
