Baker's Dozen
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Reunion"Ben Baker has to hunt down and kill twelve people
15 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent character, and I'd have to catch up on the whole story. The ending here took me by surprise and I usually don't like scary writing but it was good, not graphic. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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This is excellent character, and I'd have to catch up on the whole story. The ending here took me by surprise and I usually don't like scary writing but it was good, not graphic. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Alexandra. I try to keep it scary and not gory. There will be some of that though.
Comment from BethShelby
I thought Pipe was already dead. Now it looks like he about to be consumed by some animal. He probably needs to be put out of his misery. Your story is corrupting my brain.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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I thought Pipe was already dead. Now it looks like he about to be consumed by some animal. He probably needs to be put out of his misery. Your story is corrupting my brain.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Pipes got what he deserved.
Comment from JSD
Oh dear. The torment does not end, does it. Very exciting and dramatic. Once again you prove how adept you are at writing fast and furious action. Great stuff.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Oh dear. The torment does not end, does it. Very exciting and dramatic. Once again you prove how adept you are at writing fast and furious action. Great stuff.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Thanks, John
Comment from damommy
How many deaths now? I've lost count, but they seem to be dwindling. it's a brutal situation where one can't afford to be sensitive. I can't imagine being in such a situation, but you make it so real. Good job, Bill.l
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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How many deaths now? I've lost count, but they seem to be dwindling. it's a brutal situation where one can't afford to be sensitive. I can't imagine being in such a situation, but you make it so real. Good job, Bill.l
Comment Written 22-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Yvonne.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is truly dark stuff and people are dropping like flies with horrendous injuries. The main thing is to get out of there as soon as possible. Pipes isn't quite dead but is naked and will be dead soon; Breefs has gone. But Feather and Bobby are reunited. Am I right so far? This is going to get a whole lot worse isn't it? Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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This is truly dark stuff and people are dropping like flies with horrendous injuries. The main thing is to get out of there as soon as possible. Pipes isn't quite dead but is naked and will be dead soon; Breefs has gone. But Feather and Bobby are reunited. Am I right so far? This is going to get a whole lot worse isn't it? Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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Pipes is wolf food now. The rest will have a fighting chance.
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Will you be describing Pipes' demise? Just wanting to prepare myself:))
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Serves him right! He was insane, and Conners is even worse! I'm hoping he'll get his later in the story. Painfully!! At least Feather has her man, but Ivan's hubby is dead. The numbers are going down! :)) Well done again, Bill. On to the next. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Serves him right! He was insane, and Conners is even worse! I'm hoping he'll get his later in the story. Painfully!! At least Feather has her man, but Ivan's hubby is dead. The numbers are going down! :)) Well done again, Bill. On to the next. Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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I loved this chapter too. I forgot how much.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Bill.there's a lot of action and some of it will end in tears. I'm sure you're drawing on your own experience to write this action packed story. I like it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2018
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Hi Bill.there's a lot of action and some of it will end in tears. I'm sure you're drawing on your own experience to write this action packed story. I like it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 02-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2018
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Thanks, Ulla. There can only be one.
Comment from Cass Carlton
I've just caught up with the story, having missed an episode. Never mind all filled in now. So Rusty is about to meet Mr Wolf.Growl, snarl, licking of chops.Alas for Rusty!!
So now B.B.Bauxer has his Missus with him for support. And they have clothes on as well. Two factors to increase their morale considerably.There is one sentence which seems incorrect."They will - - -here" take these five words and place them behind "Once the - - -to return". Read it through and see what I mean. The story is as gory as it promised to be, but the development is still interesting and moving forward. cheers Cass
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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I've just caught up with the story, having missed an episode. Never mind all filled in now. So Rusty is about to meet Mr Wolf.Growl, snarl, licking of chops.Alas for Rusty!!
So now B.B.Bauxer has his Missus with him for support. And they have clothes on as well. Two factors to increase their morale considerably.There is one sentence which seems incorrect."They will - - -here" take these five words and place them behind "Once the - - -to return". Read it through and see what I mean. The story is as gory as it promised to be, but the development is still interesting and moving forward. cheers Cass
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Cass, for the great review. That is a bad sentence which I'll rewrite.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
And the action continues...good dialogue (descriptive and appropriate for the write) that certainly keeps the scene moving along smoothly. Another good addition to the chapters before it. :) Yvette
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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And the action continues...good dialogue (descriptive and appropriate for the write) that certainly keeps the scene moving along smoothly. Another good addition to the chapters before it. :) Yvette
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You make the dialogue so realistic and I felt I was there hearing those words and you are recalling some of your own experiences here to make this story work, I was taken to another time and place within your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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You make the dialogue so realistic and I felt I was there hearing those words and you are recalling some of your own experiences here to make this story work, I was taken to another time and place within your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Dolly
