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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Aww... over so soon? I wanted to see Lisa interacting with Andy. I think a rock would be a better salesperson than I would. I hate to bother people, so my sales pitch would be, "I see you're busy, so I'll just leave. Nice almost talking with you."
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Aww... over so soon? I wanted to see Lisa interacting with Andy. I think a rock would be a better salesperson than I would. I hate to bother people, so my sales pitch would be, "I see you're busy, so I'll just leave. Nice almost talking with you."
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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I used to do cold calls to people?s homes for the Marines. I was like Death coming for parent?s kids.
Comment from Boogienights
This is a great entry. Very slick of that salesman, its unbelievable how often that ploy works. I used to be a telemarketer and while it's not easy, you can make sales. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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This is a great entry. Very slick of that salesman, its unbelievable how often that ploy works. I used to be a telemarketer and while it's not easy, you can make sales. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, BN
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These cold callers try every trick in the book and they are getting so good at it these days! I am often called by cold callers and I am not quite so gullible! I enjoyed your dialogue, something you are always good at Bill, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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These cold callers try every trick in the book and they are getting so good at it these days! I am often called by cold callers and I am not quite so gullible! I enjoyed your dialogue, something you are always good at Bill, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from damommy
We can imagine our own progress of this meeting. I hate those cold calls. I get them all the time, no matter how many I block. However, if I was promised a 50% rebate, I'd answer every one. lol
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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We can imagine our own progress of this meeting. I hate those cold calls. I get them all the time, no matter how many I block. However, if I was promised a 50% rebate, I'd answer every one. lol
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, da
Comment from judiverse
Clever contest entry. Sounds like this relationship might be off to a rocky start. An interesting sales gimmick--a 50% reward for buying a pair of shoes. If that happened to me, I'd have many more rebates coming. The in-person meeting is one to be shied away from, I'd think. You never know who might show up. In this case it looks like things may turn out well. Best of luck in the contest for this creative entry. judi
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Clever contest entry. Sounds like this relationship might be off to a rocky start. An interesting sales gimmick--a 50% reward for buying a pair of shoes. If that happened to me, I'd have many more rebates coming. The in-person meeting is one to be shied away from, I'd think. You never know who might show up. In this case it looks like things may turn out well. Best of luck in the contest for this creative entry. judi
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Judi. Most readers find a benign meeting between a quirky young man and a girl who likes shoes. One reader saw a bludgeoning.
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Maybe it's the gal who do the bludgeoning, if they're stiletto heels. I don't know how the pet rock figures in the meeting, though. judi
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Readers; am I right?
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Right about what? There's got to be something off about a guy who has a pet rock. judi
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very written 150 Words Flash Fiction story you have penned. You used very good words and basically told a good story in so few words. Very nice imagery with the picture. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Bill, This is a very written 150 Words Flash Fiction story you have penned. You used very good words and basically told a good story in so few words. Very nice imagery with the picture. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent! None of my cold callers offer me money back! lol. I like the nerve of this salesman, and he gets to meet Lisa, and that could lead to much more than another sale! Well done, that was clever. Good luck in the contest, Bill. :)) Sandra x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Excellent! None of my cold callers offer me money back! lol. I like the nerve of this salesman, and he gets to meet Lisa, and that could lead to much more than another sale! Well done, that was clever. Good luck in the contest, Bill. :)) Sandra x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Sandra
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun write and great idea for the Flash150...there's no real 'punch line' like so many seem to make the point, but, here, there is instead emphasis...emphasis in the way you treat your ending that there is so much more that will come of their meeting. And, who wouldn't enjoy speculating about such since you've done an excellent job introducing Allen and a bit of his personality here ... in only 150 words! :) :) Just a grammatical suggestion that 'Andy' should be set off in commas there in the beginning. :) A great entry, sir -- thanx for sharing today! Good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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A fun write and great idea for the Flash150...there's no real 'punch line' like so many seem to make the point, but, here, there is instead emphasis...emphasis in the way you treat your ending that there is so much more that will come of their meeting. And, who wouldn't enjoy speculating about such since you've done an excellent job introducing Allen and a bit of his personality here ... in only 150 words! :) :) Just a grammatical suggestion that 'Andy' should be set off in commas there in the beginning. :) A great entry, sir -- thanx for sharing today! Good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Yvette, for the great review. I consider the use of Andy in that sentence as an unrestricted apositive not requiring to be set off with commas, It woulf be confusing. Happy day.
Comment from Nanny 6
Well, this is just too cute. Allen should get a raise for his brilliant scheme to make a sale ... good way to use all the required words!
Good luck in the contest
Judy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Well, this is just too cute. Allen should get a raise for his brilliant scheme to make a sale ... good way to use all the required words!
Good luck in the contest
Judy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Judy
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
I like the honesty of the salesman. He admits that he needs to see her in person in order to make another sale. I guess that's one way for a couple to meet. :)
Best wishes for the contest, Bill!
Cheers,
Connie
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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I like the honesty of the salesman. He admits that he needs to see her in person in order to make another sale. I guess that's one way for a couple to meet. :)
Best wishes for the contest, Bill!
Cheers,
Connie
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Connie
