Sit and wait
A 15 word poem23 total reviews
Comment from Kelly Hanna
I love this one. How relatable, here on FanStory. You have a good sense of humor. I appreciate how hard it must be to only write 15 words. You've done a good job! Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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I love this one. How relatable, here on FanStory. You have a good sense of humor. I appreciate how hard it must be to only write 15 words. You've done a good job! Well done!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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hi KellyI have fun doing these ones make my grey matter work LOL Many CheersFor a lovely review Much appreciated Cheers
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It's just a suggestion but for the sake of meter I think the last line should read:
(For your good reviews). But then you need to lose a word somewhere else,
So the second line could read (express my views).
It's just a thought Christine, I love your sentiments, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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It's just a suggestion but for the sake of meter I think the last line should read:
(For your good reviews). But then you need to lose a word somewhere else,
So the second line could read (express my views).
It's just a thought Christine, I love your sentiments, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Hi Dolly, Thanks for your review and I have made changes already as the original one ( the one you just read and reviewed didnt have 71 characters so I have changed the wording a titch. so I didnt write this with any meter in mind I am very grateful for ypur sugestions though. I may not use good review That may be too presumptious LOL Many Cheers Christine
Comment from rama devi
A charming FanStory-based poem with a target audience sure to smile at your clever rhyme. Fine response to the word prompt. Good flow and fine presentation. I like how consonance of S laces all lines.
Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
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reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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A charming FanStory-based poem with a target audience sure to smile at your clever rhyme. Fine response to the word prompt. Good flow and fine presentation. I like how consonance of S laces all lines.
Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
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Comment Written 26-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Hi Rama devi Thanks so much for your review. I have had to tweek it a bot as it did not have 71 characters so changed and added a little. The sintiment is still the same I enjoy these challenges win or lose Many Cheers and thanks for the good luck
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Oh - I'd only noticed it needed 15 words and did not realize there was a limit to characters. I enjoy the prompts too, sometimes.
Good luck
Warmly, rd
