Caught
Soulmates want to be together6 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
This is so sweet and funny! It sounds like something my mom would have done if I had tried to elope. You did an excellent job conveying your story within 100 words. I know you will do well in the contest!
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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This is so sweet and funny! It sounds like something my mom would have done if I had tried to elope. You did an excellent job conveying your story within 100 words. I know you will do well in the contest!
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the read and the kind words.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent a Mother always knows, just towards the end of this wonderful story it reads, "Susie phone rang" should this be Susie's" very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Excellent a Mother always knows, just towards the end of this wonderful story it reads, "Susie phone rang" should this be Susie's" very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Yes, thank you for the catch. Much appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, this is a sweet and uplifting write! I loved the warm sentiments and kind thoughts contained within these words, a joy to read, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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He he he, this is a sweet and uplifting write! I loved the warm sentiments and kind thoughts contained within these words, a joy to read, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the read and your kind comments.
Comment from meeshu
a good story, it is fun and I like the 'mother sees all' ending. Susie needs to be possessive in the second to last line. Por Nada..
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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a good story, it is fun and I like the 'mother sees all' ending. Susie needs to be possessive in the second to last line. Por Nada..
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Yes, thanks for the catch. No matter how many times I read my work I sometimes miss something. Much appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. You used the required words well. I wasn't expecting that ending--but it works. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Susie stepped onto the ladder. . .
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Good job, Mystery Author, with your contest entry. You used the required words well. I wasn't expecting that ending--but it works. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan
Susie stepped onto the ladder. . .
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks for your read and comment.
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Very cute story. Nice theme, well paced. I found myself easily drawn in, trying to figure out where you were going to end. Good ending. One grammar issue: Jason began to back down the ladder as Susie step on the top rung. Step needs to be stepped. Hugh
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Very cute story. Nice theme, well paced. I found myself easily drawn in, trying to figure out where you were going to end. Good ending. One grammar issue: Jason began to back down the ladder as Susie step on the top rung. Step needs to be stepped. Hugh
Comment Written 25-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2018
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Thanks for the read and the catch. I will edit.
