What You Express That's Your Base
A 4 Line Poem; You're sum of words, scribe and or expression133 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
I agree! As they say you are what you eat. And you are. What nutrients good or bad gives you good or poor health.
Such as you are what you speak and write good or bad sums up how you will express yourself, good or bad.
Great poem!
Patty
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I agree! As they say you are what you eat. And you are. What nutrients good or bad gives you good or poor health.
Such as you are what you speak and write good or bad sums up how you will express yourself, good or bad.
Great poem!
Patty
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from Coco Jane
This is one view of who/what we are. I believe that actions define us as well.
Maybe "whatever" could be replaced with a stronger word. Or, consider making the word stronger by putting a dash before and after it.
Makes us think about what we choose to say.
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This is one view of who/what we are. I believe that actions define us as well.
Maybe "whatever" could be replaced with a stronger word. Or, consider making the word stronger by putting a dash before and after it.
Makes us think about what we choose to say.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from Bichon
A very true poem. We truly need to make the most of our lives and time here before we depart, as well as leaving our mark as best we can. Best of luck in the contest!
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A very true poem. We truly need to make the most of our lives and time here before we depart, as well as leaving our mark as best we can. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
I agree with your premise in the poem. I'm reminded that the Bible says no man can tame the tongue and it's full of deadly poison. The tongue can betray us. Of course what we write comes from our heart and the combination of both reveals our character. Nice work. -robert-
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I agree with your premise in the poem. I'm reminded that the Bible says no man can tame the tongue and it's full of deadly poison. The tongue can betray us. Of course what we write comes from our heart and the combination of both reveals our character. Nice work. -robert-
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello friend. Good Job as always. I think you executed quite nicely within the parameters of the contest. Great word choice and I couldn't agree with them more. Good luck!
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Hello friend. Good Job as always. I think you executed quite nicely within the parameters of the contest. Great word choice and I couldn't agree with them more. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from Hitcher
I'd say your clever little poem is bang on the money as far as speaking and actions go, a con man will tell lies. a bullshit artist will stretch the truth a politician will blow smoke up your Mmmm etc.
Scribe... I would not say one is what they write however, if one writes about psychopaths, killers, evil etc, it doesn't mean they are, it just makes them creative : ))But hey, Maybe I just misunderstood your point of view there.
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I'd say your clever little poem is bang on the money as far as speaking and actions go, a con man will tell lies. a bullshit artist will stretch the truth a politician will blow smoke up your Mmmm etc.
Scribe... I would not say one is what they write however, if one writes about psychopaths, killers, evil etc, it doesn't mean they are, it just makes them creative : ))But hey, Maybe I just misunderstood your point of view there.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2019
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Yes we are, we are what we speak, write or how we express ourselves.Nicely done. Hope you do well in the contest. Your poem follows all of the rules. well done Good luck
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Yes we are, we are what we speak, write or how we express ourselves.Nicely done. Hope you do well in the contest. Your poem follows all of the rules. well done Good luck
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
Comment from l.d.lauritzen
Wonder if you couldn't have crammed more active words to cover more than speaking or writing as our additions to mankind prior to our demise. Keep writing.
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Wonder if you couldn't have crammed more active words to cover more than speaking or writing as our additions to mankind prior to our demise. Keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
Comment from Cedar
I totally agree with your assessment of we are a great deal on how we communicate with others. Hurtful words that come from our mouths can feel like daggers at times...
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I totally agree with your assessment of we are a great deal on how we communicate with others. Hurtful words that come from our mouths can feel like daggers at times...
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
Comment from Kiera Haley
It's really hard to critique this because you've done such a wonderful job considering the constraints of the prompt you were following. The only thing that sticks out to me is the word "whatever" which is usually associated with not caring. It seems like a word someone uses when they can't come up with something better, which is also how it appears here. Speaking, scribing and expressing are very particular actions so to follow them with "whatever" seems to de-value them because ultimately whatever you do matters, not just those things. I really love the rest of the poem though!
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It's really hard to critique this because you've done such a wonderful job considering the constraints of the prompt you were following. The only thing that sticks out to me is the word "whatever" which is usually associated with not caring. It seems like a word someone uses when they can't come up with something better, which is also how it appears here. Speaking, scribing and expressing are very particular actions so to follow them with "whatever" seems to de-value them because ultimately whatever you do matters, not just those things. I really love the rest of the poem though!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
