Deadly Confession
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Takedown"Family secrets can be your worst nightmare.
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Comment from Ulla
Hi misty, so now Rachel is in trouble. It certainly doesn't bode well especially considering by whom she's been kidnapped. She should never have been where she was. Oh, dear. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Hi misty, so now Rachel is in trouble. It certainly doesn't bode well especially considering by whom she's been kidnapped. She should never have been where she was. Oh, dear. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your kind review. Rachel has defiantly got herself into trouble. The question is will she be able to get out of it like she's done in the past? Only two chapters to the end.
Than you again for all your support, your friendship it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mistydawn
I like how you first put us readers in the scene where Bruno and Luigi find themselves blocked in by a clutter of idling traffic; cop cars
Then bring us back to where Bonnie, Rachel's mother finds that is not sleeping. Then the scene which, I found well described of Rachel walking in the park and realizes when she was attacked, and found she didn't have her cell phone then realizes that the person who attacked notices his long dark hair saying, That's the guy I saw running to the woods; the same one that's killed all the other people.
Mystery is it Bruno or Luigi?
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hello Mistydawn
I like how you first put us readers in the scene where Bruno and Luigi find themselves blocked in by a clutter of idling traffic; cop cars
Then bring us back to where Bonnie, Rachel's mother finds that is not sleeping. Then the scene which, I found well described of Rachel walking in the park and realizes when she was attacked, and found she didn't have her cell phone then realizes that the person who attacked notices his long dark hair saying, That's the guy I saw running to the woods; the same one that's killed all the other people.
Mystery is it Bruno or Luigi?
Gert
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for such a fantastic review, I'm truly honored. I switched back and forth hoping to keep everyone in suspense. There are just two chapters to go. I hope they'll keep you on the edge of your seat.
Thank you again for such a magnificent review, all your help, support, and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
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You are so welcome Mistydawn
Gert
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Oh dear, Rachel is in big trouble now. Bad girl, why didn't she stay home as she was told. She is a stubborn girl. Another fun chapter and looking forward to the next. Rox
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Oh dear, Rachel is in big trouble now. Bad girl, why didn't she stay home as she was told. She is a stubborn girl. Another fun chapter and looking forward to the next. Rox
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Sometimes Rachel can be to stubborn for her own good which gets her into big trouble. Then Daddy, Max comes along lays down the law lol.
Thank you again for your wonderful review all your support and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from apky
Rachel does seem to be attracted to putting herself in danger as bees to the stamen! I hope it all goes well with her. I also love the love and protection play between Bruno and Luigi. Your child is your child, no matter the circumstances.
This is another very well executed chapter, Misty. As I said in the previous chapter, you have improved remarkably. Well done.
Sorry, no sixer left!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Rachel does seem to be attracted to putting herself in danger as bees to the stamen! I hope it all goes well with her. I also love the love and protection play between Bruno and Luigi. Your child is your child, no matter the circumstances.
This is another very well executed chapter, Misty. As I said in the previous chapter, you have improved remarkably. Well done.
Sorry, no sixer left!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and for all of your encouragement. It was your help, encouragement that helped me improve. Thank you for taking me under your wing so to speak, take care.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like how you build the suspense and then there is a temporary resolve. I say temporary because with the pace of your action in this well-written novel, it is kid of foreshadowed that not all will go well for long. Your characters have follow through so they don't come off as flat characters. They are consistent with their multi-dimensional roles. Your sense of mystery is handled well. Your dialogue is well written. There is never a question of who is speaking. I like how you switch the scenarios back and forth, just like a TV show. You leave the ending so the reader will definitely want to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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I like how you build the suspense and then there is a temporary resolve. I say temporary because with the pace of your action in this well-written novel, it is kid of foreshadowed that not all will go well for long. Your characters have follow through so they don't come off as flat characters. They are consistent with their multi-dimensional roles. Your sense of mystery is handled well. Your dialogue is well written. There is never a question of who is speaking. I like how you switch the scenarios back and forth, just like a TV show. You leave the ending so the reader will definitely want to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your fantastic review, I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, my work. Reading that means a lot to a writer.
Thank you again for your review, maybe I'll see you again? Take care.
Comment from WildWithWords
Another fairly smooth chapter in the bank, MistyDawn.
Well written and the whole piece flows smoothly throughout. Intricate plot lines following a logical path. Good sympathetic section with Greco and his son in the car.... all very realistic.
You have one edit error to correct in what's an otherwise perfectly edited chapter. The old "similar sound typo" problem.... "why" instead of "while".
"That's why I want to handle it now WHILE I still have a chance".
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Another fairly smooth chapter in the bank, MistyDawn.
Well written and the whole piece flows smoothly throughout. Intricate plot lines following a logical path. Good sympathetic section with Greco and his son in the car.... all very realistic.
You have one edit error to correct in what's an otherwise perfectly edited chapter. The old "similar sound typo" problem.... "why" instead of "while".
"That's why I want to handle it now WHILE I still have a chance".
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for such a kind review and for your encouragement and your help. While would make a lot more sense, thanks for catching that.
Thank you again for all your help and support, take care.
PS. I love the name.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Rachel should have had more sense than to leave the house alone. She brought this on herself, silly woman.
Verb tenses mixed here:
If another duck trieS to take it, the little hellion would flog them, despite their size. Rachel became so attached that she decideS to name her.
Change present tense to past:
If another duck trieD to take it, the little hellion would flog them, despite their size. Rachel became so attached that she decideD to name her.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Rachel should have had more sense than to leave the house alone. She brought this on herself, silly woman.
Verb tenses mixed here:
If another duck trieS to take it, the little hellion would flog them, despite their size. Rachel became so attached that she decideS to name her.
Change present tense to past:
If another duck trieD to take it, the little hellion would flog them, despite their size. Rachel became so attached that she decideD to name her.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and for all of your support. You're right it would be past tense since it was last summer.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship, it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from royowen
So stupid Rachel has absconded, and decides to walk down to the pond to feed Speedy the duck, and the lesser ducks, and is snatched by the same guy running from the people that were killed, Bruno and Luigi mange to run the gauntlet, and a Bruno payed police connection let them pass the roadblock, what now? Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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So stupid Rachel has absconded, and decides to walk down to the pond to feed Speedy the duck, and the lesser ducks, and is snatched by the same guy running from the people that were killed, Bruno and Luigi mange to run the gauntlet, and a Bruno payed police connection let them pass the roadblock, what now? Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your kind review, I'm glad you liked it. Luigi still has a score to settle so Rachel better be careful.
Thank you again for all your help, support and friendship. It means a lot to me, take care.
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Most welcome
