Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like the innocence of these boys. It's clear that Daniel is pushing Eu El faster into the world of dating. I like physical humor of the lunch eating problems. I'm still curious as to what the message said!
Comments:
"almost clueless to the awkwardness reactions " ('awkward reactions' -or- 'the awkwardness of the reactions')

"you know what you're problem is?" (your)

" "I mentioned them how shy you are," ('I mentioned to them' or 'I told them')

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018

Hi, lyenochka. I?ll make a note to reveal the message in my next chapter. All I get time for fanstory nowadays is when I?m in my breakroom at work. :-/ wish I could spend more time reviewing let alone writing. Whatever time I have, I find writing therapeutic. It?s difficult writing with just an iPhone. Thank you for your kind review.

-Euell

reply by lyenochka on 21-Sep-2018

I'm glad you're writing and making the effort, Euell! Good for you to use your breakroom time. Stephen King did that.
I also agree with Daniel about the showering at night. Being an Asian mom, I prefer that to keep the sheets clean. :))

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018

Ah! I didn?t realize that! Keeping the sheets clean. Very understandable. My wife had not informed me of that. She told me it?s just common practice. Thank you :)

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there,

This is very interesting. I find the shyness and naivety of Eu El to be quite charming. I can see how this is developing nicely, and I hope you will share the final version with us, too.

~Mustang Patty~

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018

Thank you, Patty. Writing is a great escape. Unfortunately, most of my writing is done in my breakroom at work. Thank you again for the five stars.

-Euell

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

"First Date Ever Part Ii" was well written and exceptional.
It read Well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional, while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018

Thank you. Much appreciated and well-noted review.