Falling in love#2
a 3 line poem-5-7-530 total reviews
Comment from Rickie1
Very well done 5-7-5 .Nice thoughts. I like that there is no picture but I think it makes a different in reviews and rankings. I'm experimenting with that now. I write to please me but am openminded. I think the words should make a picture in the readers mind making the poem personal
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Very well done 5-7-5 .Nice thoughts. I like that there is no picture but I think it makes a different in reviews and rankings. I'm experimenting with that now. I write to please me but am openminded. I think the words should make a picture in the readers mind making the poem personal
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much, what a very encouraging review, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
A wonderful little poem that expresses a depth of meaning in just three short lines. It's rare to find that special someone whose heart beats exactly in tune with ours. Treasure the relationship. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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A wonderful little poem that expresses a depth of meaning in just three short lines. It's rare to find that special someone whose heart beats exactly in tune with ours. Treasure the relationship. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much, and I believe the relationship is in the vault****kahpot
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Kahpot, this is a good entry to the contest. Written as a 5/7/5 and in this case it is true to form. I like your words - regarding your line three poem, we usually say two hearts beating as one. But you have said 'beating just one sound, which is so true and I prefer that. Well written and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Hello Kahpot, this is a good entry to the contest. Written as a 5/7/5 and in this case it is true to form. I like your words - regarding your line three poem, we usually say two hearts beating as one. But you have said 'beating just one sound, which is so true and I prefer that. Well written and good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much, this review is so encouraging for me, from you****kahpot
Comment from Boogienights
This is truly beautiful, and exactly how I feel about my husband. In only three lines you presented a lovely thought full of emotion. Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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This is truly beautiful, and exactly how I feel about my husband. In only three lines you presented a lovely thought full of emotion. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from WildWithWords
Effective use of the short structure of the poem, completing the idea and correct syllable count. The topic is age old "Two heart beat as one" but the structure and method are different enough to work just fine.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Effective use of the short structure of the poem, completing the idea and correct syllable count. The topic is age old "Two heart beat as one" but the structure and method are different enough to work just fine.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Pamusart
Hi kahpot. Your third line is six syllables. Here
"beating only one sound". You can change to
"beating just one sound"
Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Hi kahpot. Your third line is six syllables. Here
"beating only one sound". You can change to
"beating just one sound"
Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much!! Again, I have corrected, much appreciate your support and help****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is so true and finding that one true love is the hardest part isn't it? Luckily for me I found mine, a warm and romantic one liner, good luck with it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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This is so true and finding that one true love is the hardest part isn't it? Luckily for me I found mine, a warm and romantic one liner, good luck with it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much, yes love is the hardest part, though I have been blessed****kahpot
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The Bible says for this cause shall a man leave his mother and father and they two shall be one. The first thing that God ordained was marriage. There are lots of joke about marriage, but it is ordained by God.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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The Bible says for this cause shall a man leave his mother and father and they two shall be one. The first thing that God ordained was marriage. There are lots of joke about marriage, but it is ordained by God.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much and yes I have heard many a joke about marriage, but I pay no heed****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting way to say, it. Usually, I think of the two lives becoming one as both partners so identify with the other, becoming a new creation. But you show us that each life remains unique but divide into allowing to share with the other, making room for the other. Nice!
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Interesting way to say, it. Usually, I think of the two lives becoming one as both partners so identify with the other, becoming a new creation. But you show us that each life remains unique but divide into allowing to share with the other, making room for the other. Nice!
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from meeshu
two lives divided, interesting spin. I've compared love to a lot of mathematical equations, but never division. it works, kahpot...................meeshu
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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two lives divided, interesting spin. I've compared love to a lot of mathematical equations, but never division. it works, kahpot...................meeshu
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
