Comment from Lulube

Excellent

great descriptions for great imagery of the feelings of loneliness. Love the Title and the photo that you used. I'm sure we all have felt this after a breakup that was not our choice. At times we may even want to die.
good luck in the contest

lulube

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

Thank you for the review and the understanding words.

reply by Lulube on 18-Sep-2018

welcome

lulube

Comment from RodG

Good

We get a sense of desolation experienced even years later by the Speaker. I am not sure "shrouding cloak" works as a symbol of how he feels her loss nor the word "rebeating" unless you want to imply the Speaker was physically abused.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018

Re-beating is the constant feeling of still needing her. The cloak is meant to symbolize the dark feeling that still encompasses the subject. Thanks for the read and the comments, perhaps I should have been more concrete.

Comment from Marie Foster1

Excellent

Sad state of affairs. Love unrequited can be painful. The inability to move on ensures a long time of suffering. This poem aptly describes what that feels like. The "waiting, hoping, wishing" can be debilitating. Good job!

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018

Thanks for the read and the comments.Much appreciated.