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Ephemeral Paradox

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Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a wonderful uses of alliteration with the letters of and ABC poem. This seems to tell of the surprise of inventions or imagination.

Good luck in the contest and keep writing

dragonpoet


 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for your review, dragonpoet, always appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by dragonpoet on 09-Sep-2018
    You're welcome. You have a great week also,Yvette.

    Joan
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Yep, ya just gotta love alliteration. And if you enjoy poetry rife with paradox and alliteration, then how could you not like this poem?
Excellent entry for the ABC Poetry Contest, Yvette.
Good luck!
~Dean

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for your review, Dean -- you have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :)

    On another note and I hope you do not take offense because I am not in "the group", but I wanted to say that you have been in my thoughts and prayers since I read the post announcing to folks that you were in the hospital. I hope that doesn't cross any lines as I don't formally know you, but, if it does, please just ignore it and write it off as the rantings of some nutty online blonde lady! :) ;)

    As always, thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool, outdoor shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and are able to find smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Dean Kuch on 09-Sep-2018
    Always a pleasure. :)
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
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I love your use of alliteration, together with the subject matter and abstract photo, all adds to make it quite a trippy, surreal experience reading your poem- in a good way that is! I also like that you used your knowledge and passion for science within this poem. Good little contributor to the ABC contest.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Wow, Hayley!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Kelly Grim
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Thanks for writing this. I love what you did with this ABC poem. You went above and beyond with the alliteration. I love how you write about paradox here... and look what comes out! Last line is perfect! Well done!

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Wow, Kelly!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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I love this presentation! The artwork is amazing. Where did you find it? I do love the richness of plenty of alliteration, along with the "paradoxical mind-play." I am going to bookcase this piece for further study. You have said quite a lot, and it's hard to wrap my head around all the meaningful concepts you inspire. I love it all, but if I had to choose a favorite line, it would have to be the surprise ending. "Now, who would have predicted that?" is irony at its best. A clever way to end a marvelous piece. Thank you for the enjoyable read.
Take care, Jesse

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Wow, Jesse!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful stars and comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) I hope it's as impactful the next time you pull it off the bookshelf as it seems to have been this time -- goodness knows I actually had real fun writing it! :) ;) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Jesse James Doty on 09-Sep-2018
    Hi Yvette
    Reading your response is like a long cool drink of refreshing clean water. I needed your enthusiasm right now. I am so glad I brought a smile to start your week off right. I am smiling as I write this. You sound alive with ideas, and I admit, I'm a little jealous because I haven't been able to write anything, I'm proud of, since July 20th of this year! Just before I clicked on you, I was fussing and fretting about, not feeling creative enough to soothe myself. Your friendly banter is just what the doctor ordered for me. I will seek out those cool shady spots, ( it's rather warm in my apartment) and get out as much as I can into the open air, where I feel the wind rushing past my ears, and the sun soothing my disposition. I wish this, and more, for you this coming week.
    Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Hey! Glad to offer some enthusiasm while I got it...sometimes when it comes to my students' parents during the week? We-e-e-ell, not so much, my friend! :) :) And I know what happened on July 20th -- you simply forgot to celebrate the anniversary of the moon landing! I mean, come on, who doesn't want to put on some big white puffy suit and boots and dance in the moonlight?!!! :) ;) Wait, what? You mean you didn't? What were you thinking?!! No wonder you haven't been able to right much, you need to do something crazy and sit and mentally record people's (and animals'!) reactions...then you'll be ready to write volumes again! :) And if dancing in the moonlight is not your thing, simply take some time to sit in the park or at the mall (do they even have those anymore? I'm probably showing my age here!) or at a movie theater and just sit somewhere inconspicuously and watch people...especially the old people and the teenagers...inspiration will not be a problem. Okay, now you might have trouble forgetting some things about what your poor eyes just observed, but your brain will have been jostled!! :) ;) So, yeah, get out and get some fresh air...even the pigeons and the finches and sparrows can be fun...get a birdfeeder to invite them over any time they like -- now there's entertainment without going anywhere!! They can be hilarious! :) ;) So, I hope you're not drooling from boredom reading this, but I wanted you to know that I was thankful for your sharing and love to hear it any time!! :) ;) Have a wonderful week of observations!! :) ;) :) Take good care! Yvette :)
reply by Jesse James Doty on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Yvette, for your encouragement. I really appreciate your sincere interest in my writing woes. The trouble is not inspiration, I've got plenty of things which inspire me, I've just lost my creative edge as of late, and it really worries me. When I write, they just seem like words on a page, with no poetic sense to them. It feels good to be able to share this with you. My mood has lightened since I wrote to you about this before. I will keep observing, and maybe something will transpire, with my written words.
    Thanks for caring, Jesse
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written ABC poem. Good use of alliteration to make the short ABC poem more interesting and bring life to the subject that can be either bad or good at the end.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for your review, Sandra, always so good to have your input! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A clever write and I love paradoxes. On the Amazon river there is a separation of water that flow independently, yet side by side, it is a strang phenomena that your poem reminded me of. The reason is the speed and temeprature of the two waters, no one can predict these strange occurrences, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for your review, Dolly, and especially for those cool, insightful comments! :) :) You realize that now I'll have to go look that up after I get dinner finished...?! :) :) lol As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Dolly'sPoems on 09-Sep-2018
    I have seen this for myself as I have been in the Amazon river!
Comment from donette1914
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brilliant and so very talented!!!
very well chosen words to you use
this is a very well penned poem
very nice artwork and I hope for the best in the contest
it was a pleasure to read
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Sep, 8th 2018

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Okay, Donette, you have just made my evening and my night - so very much appreciated! :) :) And, just so you know, you have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thank you for stopping by for the read and review and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Hugh McDowell
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Yvette, another winner. I like this since we are all creatures of both light and dark. Many people think you need to find a balance on this spectrum. That may be true, but occasionally we all need to draw outside the lines! Have a great week end. Hugh
Ps. With the ABC format, does the fourth line also have to follow the sequence?

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    And you are talking to someone who wrote part of the instruction book for 'How to Draw Outside the Lines' -- notice the title doesn't guarantee success, but I never quit trying (and I'm too old to change now!)! :) :) And, of course, as the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :)

    Oh, and so far as your question is concerned, I'm just going by what they wrote there in that the first four lines must be 'started' in alphabetical order and then the fifth is just a random choice. Being no poetry expert, I kinda tend to just go on what they print there -- I've seen others that have put that random line first, but, with my luck, I'd get 'kicked back'! LOL! :) ;)

    Thank you for stopping by for the read and review, sir, and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from ciliverde
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This is great, Yvette - made especially good by that ending line. Who would have predicted that?!? Funny because I am a weather forecaster, and predicting (or trying to) is a daily activity. I like that 'expectations of engagement' too, which makes me think about people who are very different deciding to communicate - and just maybe find they have things in common!
Well done,
Carol

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Carol, for all of your wonderful and insightful comments -- always so good to read the ones that really got something out of my effort! :) :) And, just so you know, you have guaranteed I will start the week off with a smile on my face with our shared understanding of that fourth line - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thank you for stopping by for the read and review and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by ciliverde on 09-Sep-2018
    Crazy math lady? I loved math in college :))
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
    Yep! Loved it so much that I nearly double majored in it and Physics -- the ultimate nerd, that's me!! My students have dubbed me the Crazy Math Lady...so I just own it! :) ;) Yvette