Comment from cupa tea

Excellent

First off Your story was easy to follow. I got the idea of who did what when you spoke of the devils ears. I only saw one thing you might consider correction and I've listed it below...

she('d) answered every question while battling a raging hang over.
Suddenly, she remembered the last picture taken outside the club. She had used her old

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018

Thanks for the review and helpful advice. Cheers, j

Comment from mackenzietastan

Good

This is an interesting premise, but the ending confused me. Is the man the friend left with giving the bunny ears, or the man Jesse left with? Is the bunny ear bandit the killer?

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018

Thanks for the review. The picture is of her friend and the possible killer. I thought something as serious as murder, paired with something whimsical as bunny ears, would be neat. Okay, not my best, ha ha. Cheers, j

Comment from A Fractal Heart

Excellent

Well done! I like the suspense that you build, you draw the reader in and set the scene, leaving them wanting more. My only feedback:

instead of "She fumbled in her purse and her hand shook as she scrolled down"

She fumbled in her purse, hands shaking, as she scrolled down... or something of that nature flows a bit better. The overuse of "her" makes it a little choppy.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018

Thanks for the review and helpful advice, I agree. Not my best work, ha ha. Cheers, j

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well, maybe not so playfully with the devil ears above your friend's head. Good job, Mystery Author, with your flash fiction story. I enjoyed reading it. Everything fits.

hang over is one word hangover

Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018

Thanks for your review and helpful advice, yes hangover...Cheers, j