Baker's Dozen
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Hard Landing"Ben Baker has to hunt down and kill twelve people
24 total reviews
Comment from Wendyanne
OMG this chapter of your book is extremely graphic which I wasn't expecting as I've not read any of your book before. It is very well written and I can certainly picture the scenes!!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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OMG this chapter of your book is extremely graphic which I wasn't expecting as I've not read any of your book before. It is very well written and I can certainly picture the scenes!!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Wendyanne
Comment from JSD
Yuck. You don't hold back on the gruesomeness, do you? But, like some war film, one struggles through the gore to follow the intriguing narrative. Well done and I look forward, with a little trepidation, to the next one.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Yuck. You don't hold back on the gruesomeness, do you? But, like some war film, one struggles through the gore to follow the intriguing narrative. Well done and I look forward, with a little trepidation, to the next one.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023
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Great! Thanks for following, John.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Geez, author, you're kind of hard on the characters in your story. It is a mesmerizing story, anyhow. Your descriptions are very vivid, and the dialogue is great. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Geez, author, you're kind of hard on the characters in your story. It is a mesmerizing story, anyhow. Your descriptions are very vivid, and the dialogue is great. Nice writing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you, PBB. It has flashbacks that will soon converge.
Comment from Jacob1395
Woah, this was a really intriguing and engaging chapter. I loved how visual your writing was and I could picture the horror your characters were going through as they were thrown into this challenge. It did give me Hunger Games vibes as I was reading it. I could really picture the helicopter ride to the forest and especially when Tim was thrown out of the helicopter. I can't wait to find out what happens next.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Woah, this was a really intriguing and engaging chapter. I loved how visual your writing was and I could picture the horror your characters were going through as they were thrown into this challenge. It did give me Hunger Games vibes as I was reading it. I could really picture the helicopter ride to the forest and especially when Tim was thrown out of the helicopter. I can't wait to find out what happens next.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Jacob, for giving this a look.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well this story might be a bit difficult to catch up on but I'll do my best. It's certainly not going to be holding back on the blood and gore and the reader is instantly immersed into the dark and animalistic nature of this setting and struggle for survival. I'll be back. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Well this story might be a bit difficult to catch up on but I'll do my best. It's certainly not going to be holding back on the blood and gore and the reader is instantly immersed into the dark and animalistic nature of this setting and struggle for survival. I'll be back. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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I noted it is violent, Debbie. That won't get better. Thanks for taking a peek.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Well, I'm grossed out. My vivid imagination coupled with your detailed descriptions have me weak. I love adventure, but this chapter seems like gore. Who was Greg? Where did he come from? Did I miss something? I'll continue to read until I have all of my answers.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Well, I'm grossed out. My vivid imagination coupled with your detailed descriptions have me weak. I love adventure, but this chapter seems like gore. Who was Greg? Where did he come from? Did I miss something? I'll continue to read until I have all of my answers.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Just because you asked, Greg is from the flashback. Gregory Ira Joseph from the Vietnam flashback will return.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm unsure how I'm supposed to react to this story. Most stories have a protagonist you can identify with and root for. You keep introducing us to people who are forced to kill in order to try to survive. The problem as soon as we hoping he'll succeed, He is killed off in some horrible manner while all the really evil guys are back in Washington. Is there a point to this story?
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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I'm unsure how I'm supposed to react to this story. Most stories have a protagonist you can identify with and root for. You keep introducing us to people who are forced to kill in order to try to survive. The problem as soon as we hoping he'll succeed, He is killed off in some horrible manner while all the really evil guys are back in Washington. Is there a point to this story?
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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No good killers here, Beth.
Comment from Don De Leon
I really felt grounded, in the moment, all through the chapter. Great pacing, characterization, and ability to paint a picture of the unforgiving setting the protagonist is navigating.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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I really felt grounded, in the moment, all through the chapter. Great pacing, characterization, and ability to paint a picture of the unforgiving setting the protagonist is navigating.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Don. The chapters are short and readable, so you could catch up and be in the know quickly.
Comment from damommy
Ouch! It will be a miracle if he survives this and doesn't bleed out. My first thought when he killed his friend before jumping from the plane was I couldn't do that. Then I realized when we're fighting for survival, we'll do anything to keep alive. Very detailed chapter. Good writing.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Ouch! It will be a miracle if he survives this and doesn't bleed out. My first thought when he killed his friend before jumping from the plane was I couldn't do that. Then I realized when we're fighting for survival, we'll do anything to keep alive. Very detailed chapter. Good writing.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Yvonne. There is a reason for the detailed description of Bends injuries.
Comment from royowen
Wow, this is ptretty brutal, but probably accurately portrayed when one falls into inhospitable terrain, but it's amazing what one will do to remain alive, as I've seen the honesty of the mercy bullet to prevent someone from suffering much before dying, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Wow, this is ptretty brutal, but probably accurately portrayed when one falls into inhospitable terrain, but it's amazing what one will do to remain alive, as I've seen the honesty of the mercy bullet to prevent someone from suffering much before dying, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Roy. The rasped description is from accounts I have read about.
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How people can suffer like that and yet survive
