Baker's Dozen
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Encampment"Ben Baker has to hunt down and kill twelve people
23 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Bill, this is not what I would pick out to read, however, you captured my interest in a very tense and engaging story. This is so well-written and I can feel the adrenaline and fear in the words.
Great job!
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Bill, this is not what I would pick out to read, however, you captured my interest in a very tense and engaging story. This is so well-written and I can feel the adrenaline and fear in the words.
Great job!
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Mary, for taking a look.
Comment from BethShelby
He got to the encampment first which would give him an advantage. He is naked except for the poncho. He has socks but no shoes. I'm wondering how this will play out.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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He got to the encampment first which would give him an advantage. He is naked except for the poncho. He has socks but no shoes. I'm wondering how this will play out.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Not a trip I could recommend.
Comment from JSD
Yay! An exciting bunch of finds! I'm so glad he has some clothes. That's just my British reserve working. An excellent instalment, although I was expecting someone to come in at any moment. Just one favourite gripe of mine is that 'disinterested' used to mean 'impartial'. The proper word should be 'uninterested' although I expect times are a changing!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Yay! An exciting bunch of finds! I'm so glad he has some clothes. That's just my British reserve working. An excellent instalment, although I was expecting someone to come in at any moment. Just one favourite gripe of mine is that 'disinterested' used to mean 'impartial'. The proper word should be 'uninterested' although I expect times are a changing!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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You are, of course, correct. John. I find that one rolls off the tongue easier than the other, but that certainly isn*t the point here.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm glad the wolves had another target aside from Ben. He now has something to cover his body and additional ammunition. I don't care for TV shows where people are fighting for their lives in the jungle, but I enjoy reading about people in such environments, so I can use my imagination. This story has a lot of imagery, and I am enjoying it.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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I'm glad the wolves had another target aside from Ben. He now has something to cover his body and additional ammunition. I don't care for TV shows where people are fighting for their lives in the jungle, but I enjoy reading about people in such environments, so I can use my imagination. This story has a lot of imagery, and I am enjoying it.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you, LJ, for following this story.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Goody Goody, this getting really good. You have got some good imagination. I can't write this kind of story, but I sure am glad to read them, thank you very much. A gift sir, you have a gift. Keep on writing for all of us please. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Goody Goody, this getting really good. You have got some good imagination. I can't write this kind of story, but I sure am glad to read them, thank you very much. A gift sir, you have a gift. Keep on writing for all of us please. Karen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thanks, Karen
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My wifi has been up and down since saturday I will post me rules and see if I can do any reviewing Karen
Comment from damommy
Sorry I have no six but sent a virtual one. I'm so glad he has a way of covering himself. That's got to make him feel more secure. Regarding the grenades, my first thought was to throw one and see if it was live. No wise. If it went off, it would give his position and we don't want that just yet.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Sorry I have no six but sent a virtual one. I'm so glad he has a way of covering himself. That's got to make him feel more secure. Regarding the grenades, my first thought was to throw one and see if it was live. No wise. If it went off, it would give his position and we don't want that just yet.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Yvonne. I skipped a chapter that is a flashback. It could easily lift out, but if you want see it it?s chapter 3.
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ok
Comment from Paul Manton
The question is, Bill, have we read his/your mind accurately: will some or all of those grenades ignite sufficiently to blow the next set to kingdom come? Well, will they? This is a bit too like the Hunger Games scenario at present, so I hope you have something different for us soon.
But well told, and has an exciting pace to it.
I liked the anger shown toward Connors - but also the various choices in the boxes. Are the unopened ones even more useful? a cliffhanger for next time.
Paul
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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The question is, Bill, have we read his/your mind accurately: will some or all of those grenades ignite sufficiently to blow the next set to kingdom come? Well, will they? This is a bit too like the Hunger Games scenario at present, so I hope you have something different for us soon.
But well told, and has an exciting pace to it.
I liked the anger shown toward Connors - but also the various choices in the boxes. Are the unopened ones even more useful? a cliffhanger for next time.
Paul
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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I skipped chapter four so as not to lose anyone too soon, but it might help you differentiate this story line from others.
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Good luck with it.
Paul
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow, this sounds like war for sure. I mean. Wow, hes exhausted, but hes got a lot of adrenalin. That's gotta be a disconcerting feeling when you mix it with fear and nervousness.
Very engaging and I could feel the tension and the urgency while I was reading it so if you can evoke that feeling, that makes you a fine writer in my book!
Although war is not my favorite thing to read about. It does not take away from the absolute perfection of your writing. I had no trouble understanding what you're saying from beginning to end. I was engaged for sure so I think it's a great entry and I wish you the best of luck and a great day!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Wow, this sounds like war for sure. I mean. Wow, hes exhausted, but hes got a lot of adrenalin. That's gotta be a disconcerting feeling when you mix it with fear and nervousness.
Very engaging and I could feel the tension and the urgency while I was reading it so if you can evoke that feeling, that makes you a fine writer in my book!
Although war is not my favorite thing to read about. It does not take away from the absolute perfection of your writing. I had no trouble understanding what you're saying from beginning to end. I was engaged for sure so I think it's a great entry and I wish you the best of luck and a great day!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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There is a link to the previous chapters at the top of the page.
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Thank you Bill!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Great, now Ben has some ammo, and clothes on. I wonder what his plan was, and what he's done. I enjoyed this part. Mind you, those wild wolves ripping Angle's apart, wasn't nice!! I'm glad I wasn't eating. Happy New Year, Bill! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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Great, now Ben has some ammo, and clothes on. I wonder what his plan was, and what he's done. I enjoyed this part. Mind you, those wild wolves ripping Angle's apart, wasn't nice!! I'm glad I wasn't eating. Happy New Year, Bill! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2021
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I'm not sure if I had a warning on that. Warning! Thank you for following Baker, Sandra.
Comment from Sally Law
Somehow, I missed this installment, Bill. I had to read quickly through the wolf scene. I survived a horrific dog attack when I was seven years old. The article about the attack will be forthcoming in the days ahead. My family says it is my best writing ever. I think you might like it too.
This is very well done as you are a great writer. I think this catches me up so far in the drama of Ben Baker. I made it!
All my best to you and yours,
Sally
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Somehow, I missed this installment, Bill. I had to read quickly through the wolf scene. I survived a horrific dog attack when I was seven years old. The article about the attack will be forthcoming in the days ahead. My family says it is my best writing ever. I think you might like it too.
This is very well done as you are a great writer. I think this catches me up so far in the drama of Ben Baker. I made it!
All my best to you and yours,
Sally
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Look forward to the article.
