Wise Bards
A 26 Word Poem in 8 Lines Read Author Notes Bards on wisdom73 total reviews
Comment from meeshu
this piece speaks of revealing a bard's wisdom, yet holds some back. brilliant. I like the rhyming big finish. I wish you tidings from the contest..
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this piece speaks of revealing a bard's wisdom, yet holds some back. brilliant. I like the rhyming big finish. I wish you tidings from the contest..
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
Comment from Bump3
This is very well written. The first two lines especially speak to me. The art you chose fits the piece perfectly. Good luck in the contest! I'm sure you will do well.
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This is very well written. The first two lines especially speak to me. The art you chose fits the piece perfectly. Good luck in the contest! I'm sure you will do well.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
Comment from WildWithWords
Very much like the first two lines. Hard to disagree with the sentiment.
You've followed the required word number script however I think the triple use of the word "wisdom" doesn't help the appeal of the poem. I suggest possibly one of sagacity, intellect, profundity or maybe even discernment for at least one of the three might improve the look. Just a thought.
Best of luck with the competition.
Bill (WildWithWords)
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Very much like the first two lines. Hard to disagree with the sentiment.
You've followed the required word number script however I think the triple use of the word "wisdom" doesn't help the appeal of the poem. I suggest possibly one of sagacity, intellect, profundity or maybe even discernment for at least one of the three might improve the look. Just a thought.
Best of luck with the competition.
Bill (WildWithWords)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
