Clean and Sober
A man who got clean and sober from drugs19 total reviews
Comment from pbomar1115
The story of how addiction starts is classic. Giving a person expensive drugs to get them hooked is always the way. But the journey does not always end happily as this one does. Good luck in the contest.
Phillip
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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The story of how addiction starts is classic. Giving a person expensive drugs to get them hooked is always the way. But the journey does not always end happily as this one does. Good luck in the contest.
Phillip
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a really important message you are sending out here. There are some grammatical errors, though, and I see other reviewers have picked them up. If you do your corrections, you'll have an excellent contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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This is a really important message you are sending out here. There are some grammatical errors, though, and I see other reviewers have picked them up. If you do your corrections, you'll have an excellent contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from apky
He was 32 years old and did rehab, because of the help of his parents made him stopped resisting.
~ suggestion: He was 32 years old and did rehab, with the help of his parents, which made him stop resisting.
A Flash Story with a deserving happy end. Your advice to never use drugs can never be said too often.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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He was 32 years old and did rehab, because of the help of his parents made him stopped resisting.
~ suggestion: He was 32 years old and did rehab, with the help of his parents, which made him stop resisting.
A Flash Story with a deserving happy end. Your advice to never use drugs can never be said too often.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from tfawcus
A rare success story about one who manages to turn himself around, with help, and kick the drug habit.
There are a few grammatical errors to fix up. I've put some suggestions in brackets:
Patrick has taken drugs since he was eight years old. He [has] [delete has] remembered the time when his older bullies introduced him to cocaine. At first, he didn't want to try it, but then he used it, so they [won't] [wouldn't] bother him anymore. He used drugs most of his life. He was 32 years old and did rehab, because [of] [delete of] the help of his parents made him [stopped] [stop] resisting. As the years passed, he never listened to his family's advice, which in a time of need he did almost too late. He went to drug therapy, shared his story with his psychiatrist, and the other mate addicts. He [got] [delete got] recuperated. Years later, he got clean and sober. He wished that he [never took] [had never taken] the drug. One thing he regretted was taking the drug [use of] [delete use of] cocaine. The doctors got it out of his system. He finally felt happy, sober, and rehabilitated.
This Flash Fiction piece of yours contains an vital message for drug users. An important piece of writing. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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A rare success story about one who manages to turn himself around, with help, and kick the drug habit.
There are a few grammatical errors to fix up. I've put some suggestions in brackets:
Patrick has taken drugs since he was eight years old. He [has] [delete has] remembered the time when his older bullies introduced him to cocaine. At first, he didn't want to try it, but then he used it, so they [won't] [wouldn't] bother him anymore. He used drugs most of his life. He was 32 years old and did rehab, because [of] [delete of] the help of his parents made him [stopped] [stop] resisting. As the years passed, he never listened to his family's advice, which in a time of need he did almost too late. He went to drug therapy, shared his story with his psychiatrist, and the other mate addicts. He [got] [delete got] recuperated. Years later, he got clean and sober. He wished that he [never took] [had never taken] the drug. One thing he regretted was taking the drug [use of] [delete use of] cocaine. The doctors got it out of his system. He finally felt happy, sober, and rehabilitated.
This Flash Fiction piece of yours contains an vital message for drug users. An important piece of writing. Congratulations.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing this success story about drug rehabilitation. I was surprised this victim started his drug habit at the tender age of eight, but was relieved to learn that he finally became sober. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Thank you for sharing this success story about drug rehabilitation. I was surprised this victim started his drug habit at the tender age of eight, but was relieved to learn that he finally became sober. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from Zue65
I agree, drugs is a menace that will kill your chances of ever becoming a real human again. My warm congratulations for getting drugs out of your system and I hope you keep on writing to serve as an encouragement for drug users to follow your example. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I agree, drugs is a menace that will kill your chances of ever becoming a real human again. My warm congratulations for getting drugs out of your system and I hope you keep on writing to serve as an encouragement for drug users to follow your example. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Sorry, but I was never on drugs. I always was and am clean and sober. This is a fiction story and never happened in reality. I am happy though that you like my fiction story. Thank you for reviewing, my friend! :)
Comment from A Fractal Heart
Thank you for sharing this story. I know many people who are in recovery and the road is long and very difficult. Keep up the good work with writing.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you for sharing this story. I know many people who are in recovery and the road is long and very difficult. Keep up the good work with writing.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a very good contest entry. However, I did have a problem with one sentence.
He was 32 years old and did rehab, because of the help of his parents made him stopped resisting.
This seems a little awkward.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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This is a very good contest entry. However, I did have a problem with one sentence.
He was 32 years old and did rehab, because of the help of his parents made him stopped resisting.
This seems a little awkward.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from jenintorre
I like the fact that this story has a happy ending but I wouldn't exactly call it a flash fiction. It is more like an account of someone's life. It really needs to have a little drama in it and a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest. Jen.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I like the fact that this story has a happy ending but I wouldn't exactly call it a flash fiction. It is more like an account of someone's life. It really needs to have a little drama in it and a surprise ending. Good luck in the contest. Jen.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
Comment from RGstar
I see where you are going with this. Sometimes we have to forget the grammar, even the narrative, and look for the heart. I found it here.
I have a soft spot for triumph, and this is of such.
Even if fiction, there is always truth attached.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I see where you are going with this. Sometimes we have to forget the grammar, even the narrative, and look for the heart. I found it here.
I have a soft spot for triumph, and this is of such.
Even if fiction, there is always truth attached.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you!
