Wally Weasel's Stories
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Comment from Dean Kuch
It's been quite awhile since the antics of Wally Weasel have graced the poetry pages of FanStory, Yvonne.
It's good to know that he's doing fine and still the ornery, adventurous guy he's always been.
Good aabb rhyme scheme featured in all six of your rhyming quatrains and the rhymed couplet as well.
Great work, as usual!
~Dean :)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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It's been quite awhile since the antics of Wally Weasel have graced the poetry pages of FanStory, Yvonne.
It's good to know that he's doing fine and still the ornery, adventurous guy he's always been.
Good aabb rhyme scheme featured in all six of your rhyming quatrains and the rhymed couplet as well.
Great work, as usual!
~Dean :)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Dean. I'm so glad you like it. I was afraid Wally was getting to be a little old to folks.
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Wally could never grow old, Yvonne.
He's a great character for kids. :)
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Thank you. I feel better now.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Oh goodness. What a sweet children's poem. I love that it is based on a dream/imagination. Kids need to explore that more these days. I loved Wally Weazel's "adventures." :) Great write and a joy to read.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Oh goodness. What a sweet children's poem. I love that it is based on a dream/imagination. Kids need to explore that more these days. I loved Wally Weazel's "adventures." :) Great write and a joy to read.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this delightful review. I hope you know a child who will enjoy it. I appreciate your comments very much.
Comment from jack silver
I have to say this was a very well written poem for children! Didn't see anything about it which needed fixing up. Well worth the read and five stars. If I could of I would have given it six stars. Wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Jack
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I have to say this was a very well written poem for children! Didn't see anything about it which needed fixing up. Well worth the read and five stars. If I could of I would have given it six stars. Wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Jack
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate the stars very much, especially since you like the poem.
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No probs
Comment from meeshu
a very good children's poem with happy rhymes and a bouncy cadence. wait until they find out what weasels are really like, but that will come later..
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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a very good children's poem with happy rhymes and a bouncy cadence. wait until they find out what weasels are really like, but that will come later..
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Nah! Wally's going to teach them that weasels have their own place in the world. lol. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from barkingdog
I was right there with Wally on his entire adventure. It sounded real enough, but a dream by a waterfall is much safer. haha
Wonderful imagery. I still see the bumble bees, bobble float and him parachuting in a orange jumpsuit.
Perfect rhyme.
Best of luck in the contest.
:) E
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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I was right there with Wally on his entire adventure. It sounded real enough, but a dream by a waterfall is much safer. haha
Wonderful imagery. I still see the bumble bees, bobble float and him parachuting in a orange jumpsuit.
Perfect rhyme.
Best of luck in the contest.
:) E
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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I'm so glad you were there on the trip. That means a lot to me Thank you for this great review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful poem, I love the fact that this young one, even though he went nowhere he dreamt of things outside, not playing video games, I think this is an excellent, inspirational, and a 0learning read for the children, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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What a wonderful poem, I love the fact that this young one, even though he went nowhere he dreamt of things outside, not playing video games, I think this is an excellent, inspirational, and a 0learning read for the children, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. It's part of a book of his stories. I appreciate your lovely comments.
Comment from country ranch writer
Oh this is so cute I love it and the children will to of his adventure and they too will love it as much as I do. This is a great poem keep up the good work it's great!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Oh this is so cute I love it and the children will to of his adventure and they too will love it as much as I do. This is a great poem keep up the good work it's great!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. I'm so happy you like it that much.
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Comment from Lady Jane
Haha, so very cute. This should totally be made into a picture book for children. Imagination is key to anything. What an inventive and rhythmic piece you've penned here. The rhyme is perfection, the image choice, and the entire piece felt cohesive and lighthearted...children will be able to relate to dreaming and imagining a life to live beyond their front door, LOL. Great job with this entry. It's presented flawlessly and straightforward. I found no errors. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Haha, so very cute. This should totally be made into a picture book for children. Imagination is key to anything. What an inventive and rhythmic piece you've penned here. The rhyme is perfection, the image choice, and the entire piece felt cohesive and lighthearted...children will be able to relate to dreaming and imagining a life to live beyond their front door, LOL. Great job with this entry. It's presented flawlessly and straightforward. I found no errors. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. There are more Wally stories in my portfolio. Once the contest is over, you can look at them. What lovely things you've said, and I appreciate them.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A child's imagination is a wonderful thing. I gave my five-year-old daughter and three-year-old son some colored pencils and paper and told them to use their imaginations and draw a picture. My daughter asked, "What's imagination?"
Her brother said, "That's when you're dreaming, but you're awake."
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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A child's imagination is a wonderful thing. I gave my five-year-old daughter and three-year-old son some colored pencils and paper and told them to use their imaginations and draw a picture. My daughter asked, "What's imagination?"
Her brother said, "That's when you're dreaming, but you're awake."
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Isn't that cute! So true. I worry about children these days. They don't seem to have any imagination. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Raul1
Looks like Wally the weasel was having a good vacation. I like this poem, but I think you might make it interesting to enlighten the character more. Otherwise, it is a good poem.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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Looks like Wally the weasel was having a good vacation. I like this poem, but I think you might make it interesting to enlighten the character more. Otherwise, it is a good poem.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018
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I'm sorry you think that. Actually, this is a chapter added to a book of Wally stories. He's pretty well known here on FS. I guess I expected everyone to know him. Thanks for reviewing.
