Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Roxanna,
This is a well written chapter with an interesting mix of emotions and tensions.
Hamish is in a fix and this draws the story even further onward.
Thoughtful planning and fresh interest are a fine hook into the next chapter.
See, I knew you could finish this story-keep going.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018

Thank you so much Shirley. Rox

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

So who is he? Someone from the Clan, no doubt. Well, this has been a wonderful half an hour catching up with you fabulous story, Rox. I hope you won't stay away too long now. I think this is a brilliant story. Well done, can't wait for the next part. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018

I do think I have my groove back as far as my book goes. I was struggling for a while, but am now enjoying it again and have the next chapter about ready to post. Need to review some to get money to promote. =} I am behind, it doesn't take long to get behind in reviewing. Thanks so much for sticking with my story and your encouraging words. I'll get that next chapter up as soon as I get a few more member bucks. =} Thanks my friend. Rox

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is excellent and you are a great writer! You have such a gift for storytelling, it seems to flow out of you effortlessly. I only have one critique and this is just me I am sure. The font you use in this piece is hard for me to see. I have low vision and I am sight impaired. A regular person is probably okay with it.
All my best,
Sally

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018

Thank you so much Sally. Which font is best for you. I thought the font I used would make reading easier, but I guess not. Let me know what you prefer. The font doesn't matter and I am happy to help you out. Thank you again. Rox

reply by Sally Law on 07-Sep-2018

Any font that is bigger and easier to see. You are kind to adjust this for me, but, you do what pleases you. I just love your writing and want to partake as best I can. Thank you for your thoughtfulness. Sal

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018

I made it '18' so hope that will help. There are other who have said the same, the org font is very small. I am happy to adjust it. =} Thank you again. Rox

reply by Sally Law on 07-Sep-2018

You?re welcome! I am sure that will get you more readers and fans!

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Roxanne, so Hamish, a good Scottish name by the way, LOL, has been abducted by the big dragon. But as he's not been delivered for a feast for the Dragon's family. I wonder what is to happen to him. Good writing. All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018

Thank you Ulla. I haven't totally decided who his captor is yet. Guess i should figure it out. He is a relative I know, but have to figure out who. =}

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You did a great job crafting this story with Hamish caught up in real trouble. The descriptive writing carried the reader along seamlessly through your tale. I admire your handling of this theme with your imagination and creativity. Good job on this.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018

Thank you so much. I haven't felt I've been doing a very good job on the last few chapter, so thanks so much for your encouraging words. Rox

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Interesting. I have no idea who has kidnapped Hamish. Is it friend or foe. Who's friend and who's foe?
"Looking up he saw a blue face peering down at him"
Could that be Joshua's dragon? Good stopping point. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018

I have to figure that out myself. It 's a relative, but I'm trying to decide which one. Guess I should figure it out soon. =} Thanks so much Nancy. Rox

Comment from royowen

Excellent

So Hamish has been "spirited" away, and though he struggles, the huge dragon, hasn't eaten him or fed it's young, but delivers him to some strangely garbed and somebody who he apparently knows confronts, him...who? Well done Rox, great series, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018

Thank you Roy. Rox

reply by royowen on 03-Sep-2018

Welcome Rox

Comment from WildWithWords

Excellent

What looked to me like a pretty good story just seemed to stop in mid-thought.

Perhaps incorrectly posted? Or half-posted? In any case there's a long space after the end of the post which might be best being shrunk via edit. I've not marked you down because of any of the above, but still have a look at it.

I found myself quite interested in Hamish's fate. Pity.

Edit quality was good with the sole exception of what looks to me like a missing word....

".... like the coward he is, he would (HAVE) stayed back and let many die."

Best of luck with the rest of the story, Roxanna. Looks good so far.

Bill (WildWithWords)

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018

Thank you Bill. I'm not sure what made it have the long blank space at the end. Sorry about that. I fixed it and the missing word. Thanks for the kind review and helps. Rox