Innocence Lost
Young life cut short by rape17 total reviews
Comment from Lance Polin
For a single line poem you said quite a bit here. Even though your description is actually longer than the poem, the explanation is unnecessary. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
For a single line poem you said quite a bit here. Even though your description is actually longer than the poem, the explanation is unnecessary. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Thank you Lance.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This one line poem speaks so meaningfully how the innocence in the person is cut short by the act of social crime rape; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
This one line poem speaks so meaningfully how the innocence in the person is cut short by the act of social crime rape; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading my friend. Blessings, Kay
Comment from Lady Jane
Ugh, I hate that this is a reality, but sadly it is. Your one line poem is so short, yet so succinct and realistically sound. I am so sorry to say this is a real life tragedy. Excellent photo and content is very profound. Good luck in the contest.
janelle
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
Ugh, I hate that this is a reality, but sadly it is. Your one line poem is so short, yet so succinct and realistically sound. I am so sorry to say this is a real life tragedy. Excellent photo and content is very profound. Good luck in the contest.
janelle
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2018
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Hello Janelle, Yes it is true and worldwide. Always the innocent suffer. Thanks for reading my friend. XXK.
Comment from mermaids
Your words give a voice to those who are violated. Your poem shows how their futures are changed by an act of violence. Excellent one word poem and I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
Your words give a voice to those who are violated. Your poem shows how their futures are changed by an act of violence. Excellent one word poem and I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much for reading; not a happy subject. One that needs to be aired! Love, Kay.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Kace, it's soooo sad to think anyone would rape a child....or anyone as far as that goes....Aboriginal or not...it's night a one night thought...it goes with you for life...those poor children...my heart goes out to them...and they are in my prayers...as I pray for the children in the world in my night prayers...so sad Sweetie Pie...very well expressed...and your picture says it all...love you much...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
Hi Kace, it's soooo sad to think anyone would rape a child....or anyone as far as that goes....Aboriginal or not...it's night a one night thought...it goes with you for life...those poor children...my heart goes out to them...and they are in my prayers...as I pray for the children in the world in my night prayers...so sad Sweetie Pie...very well expressed...and your picture says it all...love you much...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
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Hello Lindy Louie, Yes a sad state of affairs; played out across the world behind closed doors. Lots of love to you sweetie pie.
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I know you are right...it is so sad someone could even think that way...sigh...love you chicky...Linda xxoo
Comment from PoemsOfDD
K, this is a one line poem that has a strong statement. It sickens me that depravity still continues the world over and always the innocent child suffers.
A sweet picture for an ultra sour subject. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
K, this is a one line poem that has a strong statement. It sickens me that depravity still continues the world over and always the innocent child suffers.
A sweet picture for an ultra sour subject. Best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I needed to get it out there. Some Americans didn't know our aboriginal children were being abused. Head under bed? It's a world wide disgusting mess. XXK.
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Unfortunately, some Americans do not know we have aboriginal people as our indigenous race.
~D🌸x
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I am astounded that they think kangaroos jump down the main street in Brisbane!!
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This is why they wield a gun in their own country perhaps....
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Pity their brain wasn't as quick as their trigger finger!
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Lol... very good 😊
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a gorgeous one line poem, K. Sadly in power structures the anger is what trickles down and the most vulnerable in our society pay the price. I very much enjoy the artwork you've found to accompany this most important social commentary.
I wish you much luck in the contest with this gem. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
This is a gorgeous one line poem, K. Sadly in power structures the anger is what trickles down and the most vulnerable in our society pay the price. I very much enjoy the artwork you've found to accompany this most important social commentary.
I wish you much luck in the contest with this gem. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I needed to get our message out there. Aboriginal children are used and abused. A world wide disgrace isn't it? XXK.
Comment from Kelly Grim
Your poem captures the devastation of this child's life (really these childrens' lives) and says it so simply in this one line poem. I really really liked this! The turn in tone midway through the line is terrific. The rhythm and flow of it is terrific! I like the internal rhyme of "ahead" and "instead" - I'm a fan of non-traditional rhyming and the sound of things. The picture is terrific! Very well done! Excellent entry into this contest!
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
Your poem captures the devastation of this child's life (really these childrens' lives) and says it so simply in this one line poem. I really really liked this! The turn in tone midway through the line is terrific. The rhythm and flow of it is terrific! I like the internal rhyme of "ahead" and "instead" - I'm a fan of non-traditional rhyming and the sound of things. The picture is terrific! Very well done! Excellent entry into this contest!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Me too! I don't follow convention, I write from my heart. Thanks so much. Blessings Kay.
Comment from kiwijenny
Aussie this is so sick. Poor kid his innocence lost. But he has a choice ...when he's a man he can choose to be better than the tribune whosarred him. Oh I hope so
Your one line made me pray and think. Good luck with this contestGod bless
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
Aussie this is so sick. Poor kid his innocence lost. But he has a choice ...when he's a man he can choose to be better than the tribune whosarred him. Oh I hope so
Your one line made me pray and think. Good luck with this contestGod bless
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Kia Ora Jenny, The one liner was about the rape of a young GIRL. They are so vunerable. Thanks my friend XXK.
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Oh I am so sorry. The picture looked like a little boy to me..oh this is sadder
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written One Line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words with very good imagery from the art work. That is so very sad, but true. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
This is a very well written One Line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good words with very good imagery from the art work. That is so very sad, but true. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Hi Teri, Thanks so much for reading. Unfortunately we can't change lust. Blessings, Kay.