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The French Letter

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Comment from lyenochka
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Oh my! She had this planned all along, booking the room ahead of time for her and her "sugar daddy!" I was hoping for the second verse, if there is one, in your notes.
I enjoyed the view of the cemetery. We had a wonderful experience in a country Belgian church cemetery and the kindly priest helped us find my husband's birth records when he found us browsing there.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
    Thanks, Helen. Yes, she does seem to be a scheming young lady - we shall see! Some of these ancient cemeteries are fascinating, and can be a fount of information. My wife traced quite a bit of her ancestry up in Scotland that way.
Comment from Pantygynt
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She seems very concerned thahe should be comfortable. What a nice girl!

The plot thickens. Liked the cameo of the disapproving RC priest. Very in character I thought.

'... as we headed back her car.' - Something missing here surely, 'in her car' or 'to her car' perhaps.

'Very few sturgeon are ever virgin,' - Is that the RAF version? We had: 'The virgin sturgeon needs no urgin'.' Apart from that it's the same fishy story. Though I have never heard of a second verse. In a plain cover please.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2018
    I'm a bit behind in responding to reviews at the moment, but better late than never! I think that I may end up giving that priest a larger role than I'd first anticipated. Thanks for reminding me of the authentic version of the 'virgin sturgeon' - I was writing late at night and couldn't recall the words, so looked it up on Google. Mistake!
Comment from giraffmang
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So no real joy at the cemetery although some interesting things there. And Helen has booked ahead...

In places for the inscriptions you use single marks and in others double. It's best to keep the presentation of these the same - eg, 'Estelle Gaudin, 1916-1975, Beloved mother of Alain and Françoise'. Under her name were the words, "Free at last".

Likewise Francoise sometimes has the accent under the 'c' and sometimes not.


 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
    Thanks for the review and suggested amendments. I appreciate your sharp eye and have made the changes. Thanks again. Tony
Comment from Sally Law
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Excellent as always. I got a tinsy bit lost in the story and had to back up, but, that was more of an attempt on my part to catch up in the events surrounding the history of Suzanne Gaudin. It looks like Helen will empty Charles' bank account along with his heart. Well done and I will be back for more.
All the best,
Sally

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
    Thanks for your review, Sally. Yes, Helen does seem to have expensive tastes, doesn't she? I hope she's worth it!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Yes, Tony, this is an interesting tune of events. You did a great job with the description of the scenes while searching the microfilm. That Father seems to be hiding something. I am glad the grave marker was found that gave more info. Thank for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
    Very many thanks for your review, Jan. Perhaps you are right about Father Lecroix. He may know more than he's saying.
Comment from kiwijenny
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Whoah this Helen is interesting....but more intriguing to me...was the epitaph...Free at Last
Well with all the delicious food I'm wishing I had a six for making me salivate. I'm reviewing this while my 4 year olds nap...some nap anyway
God bless

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
    Very many thanks, Jenny. I think that you may be right - there has to be a story behind that epitaph! Glad I was able to whet your appetite!
reply by kiwijenny on 04-Sep-2018
    I'm loving this novel
Comment from Ulla
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Uhh, Tony, what is happening here? I see naughtiness coming. Another great chapter that brings up a few questions. I wish I had a six left as it so well deserves.
Father Lecroix gave me withering look. = Father Lecroix gave me a withering look.
I love this well written story and can't wait to see what's next. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Thanks for picking up the SPAG, Ulla - now corrected. Thanks, too, for following the story - appreciated! All the best, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written chapter. Some interesting details collected and it seems the end of the day was planned and worked out while both seem to be comfortable to spend the night in the same room

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Very many thanks for your review and comments, Sandra. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Artasylum
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This is a fun, this compelling read. The story was a page turner and of course the question is... will that make you more comfortable? I'd like to find out soon... yours, diana

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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Thanks, Diana. I don't think poor Charles spent a particularly comfortable night - but it could have been worse!
Comment from Adri7enne
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Looks like your characters are ready for R&R. Neither giving much thought to the drive back, both drinking and enjoying a gourmet meal. Sounds delicious. I enjoyed the bit of tension between Charles and the tight-lipped priest. The story is developing nicely. More leads for them to follow. Check this out, maybe...

"Only joking, I wondered, as we headed back TO her car." Insert TO.

Good job, Tony.



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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Very many thanks, Adrienne, both for your positive review and for picking up the SPAG, which I've now corrected. All the best, Tony