Running For The Prize
Philosophy, Syncopation19 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
No sixer's left, good, long story about passages through life with a multitude of advice for the ignorant or uninformed, or misinformed.
Looked up mandalic, usually a round form, used to gain the worshipful state of mind by some religions, and your reference to the double helix is the DNA that, while common to all humans is slightly different in each one, neat!
And, there is a certain responsibility in offering advice on life to others, and that is that we have to do our absolute best to live by our own advice, 'n'est ce pas?'
Good work,
irish
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
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No sixer's left, good, long story about passages through life with a multitude of advice for the ignorant or uninformed, or misinformed.
Looked up mandalic, usually a round form, used to gain the worshipful state of mind by some religions, and your reference to the double helix is the DNA that, while common to all humans is slightly different in each one, neat!
And, there is a certain responsibility in offering advice on life to others, and that is that we have to do our absolute best to live by our own advice, 'n'est ce pas?'
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 26-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2021
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Thanks irish, you are ever illuminating my writing~
Blessings
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from Cindy Decker
An exceptionally uplifting poem. I loved the coined word, "runshine." I found joy in reading your poem. The surrounds...abounds...passage was a nice touch. Excellent poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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An exceptionally uplifting poem. I loved the coined word, "runshine." I found joy in reading your poem. The surrounds...abounds...passage was a nice touch. Excellent poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2020
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Thanks Cindy I appreciate your warm comments and connection here. Blessings ,
Brother Badger
Darren
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You?re welcome! Blessings.
Comment from samandlancelot
Badger,
I like so many aspects of your poem: the internal rhymes, your solitary activity of running and playing a song in your mind. . . and remembering, makes you feel free. But did you know? we are all connected through our DNA.
We are given so much in life, but our time and how we use it is limited. Invest in this propensity.
Listen more, talk less, live in the present, never forget the past, and plan for and expect a bright future. I love it all.
when there will be an (change 'an' to 'a') reckoning
Patricia
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Badger,
I like so many aspects of your poem: the internal rhymes, your solitary activity of running and playing a song in your mind. . . and remembering, makes you feel free. But did you know? we are all connected through our DNA.
We are given so much in life, but our time and how we use it is limited. Invest in this propensity.
Listen more, talk less, live in the present, never forget the past, and plan for and expect a bright future. I love it all.
when there will be an (change 'an' to 'a') reckoning
Patricia
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thanks so much since I really appreciate your details review. Always a pleasure to meet somebody new here. And thanks so much for pointing out my typos and its correction I really appreciate that. Have a blessed day!
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from R. Vincent
I really like the cadence of this poem.
It has a smooth way of speeding up and slowing down, almost "syncopating" with the narrator's description of the world as they are running!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I really like the cadence of this poem.
It has a smooth way of speeding up and slowing down, almost "syncopating" with the narrator's description of the world as they are running!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thanks so much R Vincent, I'm glad I made you along with the poem and the cadence
. Thank-you so much for pointing that out. Have a blessed day!
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is nothing like a good run to clear the cobwebs in our mind and make a fresh start, I am unable to go out jogging now because of the lock down, we are not even allowed to go for a walk! So enjoyed your journey here and your thoughts, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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There is nothing like a good run to clear the cobwebs in our mind and make a fresh start, I am unable to go out jogging now because of the lock down, we are not even allowed to go for a walk! So enjoyed your journey here and your thoughts, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Thanks Dolly, I really really appreciate you coming will be able to throw you out and walk again soon!
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Badger,
.WOW! This is a truly exceptional write, my friend. So much wisdom.you have conveyed in your verse. Quite thought provoking.
One question: is runshine a play on words? If so, I really like it!
Thanks for a wonderful read.
Jan :-)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Hi Badger,
.WOW! This is a truly exceptional write, my friend. So much wisdom.you have conveyed in your verse. Quite thought provoking.
One question: is runshine a play on words? If so, I really like it!
Thanks for a wonderful read.
Jan :-)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Getting some you I appreciate your comments. Yes, if you read the authers notes at the bottom, run shine is running plus sunshine, runshine.
Thanks again,
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment from royowen
This is a most enthusiastic post Darren, the words are very precious, good syncopation, good use of rhyme, poetic expression, lyrical use is similar to songs like "Mackathur park" or "Bohemian rhapsody" Herews 12:1-2 is also nicely woven in also. Good job, and thanks for the author notes, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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This is a most enthusiastic post Darren, the words are very precious, good syncopation, good use of rhyme, poetic expression, lyrical use is similar to songs like "Mackathur park" or "Bohemian rhapsody" Herews 12:1-2 is also nicely woven in also. Good job, and thanks for the author notes, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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I truly appreciate your thorough and complete review of my work and it is a pleasure and an honor to write car and fellowship with you here. Thank you so much for your input.
Blessings,
Brother Badger cull
Darren
Comment from tfawcus
How refreshing to read this sustained rhythmic treat. Upbeat content perfectly in tune with the syncopation. Liked your runshine coinage.
One typo:
an reckoning
This is a poem to get the feet tapping, if ever there was one!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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How refreshing to read this sustained rhythmic treat. Upbeat content perfectly in tune with the syncopation. Liked your runshine coinage.
One typo:
an reckoning
This is a poem to get the feet tapping, if ever there was one!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Hello sir so nice to hear from you again. I truly appreciate your throat review kind words and DeGeneres Stars. A pleasure and an honor to ride with you here, may you be blessed.
Brother Badger cull
Darren
Comment from mancub
I find this poem interesting, it has a unique quality but some of the verses are challenging to follow as the rhyme comes and goes intermittently and this take away the flow, this is fun and creative and with this style of stanzas you really do not need to brackets or commas as again this can at times be a bit distractive and the reader will find it harder to feel the proper flow and have to re read lines which takes away from your delivery and impact al in all I did enjoy this, I found it a bit hard to follow , there were some areas that your flow and rhyme were spot on and others where perhaps the word choice was a slight bit distracting, Good job all in all, Thanks foe sharing, Mancub
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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I find this poem interesting, it has a unique quality but some of the verses are challenging to follow as the rhyme comes and goes intermittently and this take away the flow, this is fun and creative and with this style of stanzas you really do not need to brackets or commas as again this can at times be a bit distractive and the reader will find it harder to feel the proper flow and have to re read lines which takes away from your delivery and impact al in all I did enjoy this, I found it a bit hard to follow , there were some areas that your flow and rhyme were spot on and others where perhaps the word choice was a slight bit distracting, Good job all in all, Thanks foe sharing, Mancub
Comment Written 08-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much I received at 3 reviews of bar and this one is thorough and I really appreciate your input on my structure is it these things that I'm trying to polish by writing here. I truly appreciate your thorough review and your clients thank you so much.
Blessings,
Brother Badger cull
Darren
Comment from Miss Sherry
You are one verbose fellow, Poet. Long poems often find my attention drifting, but your style is unique and I found myself wanting to know what came next.
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Listen more,
talk less
Do your chores,
and be blessed"
I found that bit very clever. Most people could take notes on that.
I am very glad to have found your work!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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You are one verbose fellow, Poet. Long poems often find my attention drifting, but your style is unique and I found myself wanting to know what came next.
"
Listen more,
talk less
Do your chores,
and be blessed"
I found that bit very clever. Most people could take notes on that.
I am very glad to have found your work!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much. And you in turn made my day with these warm comments and wonderful review. I'm so happy I could get your attention I tried to do that. If you like this, I believe you would like someone ever now and again way back in the old one in my portfolio it has very similar Vines to it very similar budget and at the end it has just a few words that go together thanks again
Blessings,
Brother Badger
aka Darren
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