God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from pome lover
so the way I understand it, God whispered to you to dream your dream and you did, and you won a World Prize for Literature, and you stood on a dais with your gold metal. Is that right?
I like the saying in the picture you chose. very good.
pome lover
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so the way I understand it, God whispered to you to dream your dream and you did, and you won a World Prize for Literature, and you stood on a dais with your gold metal. Is that right?
I like the saying in the picture you chose. very good.
pome lover
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Dreams from God are heard by man for a purpose-- God's purpose. The author acknowledges his role in writing, the prize is unimportant, the participation is.
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Dreams from God are heard by man for a purpose-- God's purpose. The author acknowledges his role in writing, the prize is unimportant, the participation is.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from poetwatch
This is good, Al. When first I read your portfolio I said to myself this man just reviews. Then later I thought that you were the artificial intelligence of the machine FanStory, but now I have formed a totality different concept of you. You're the Angel of the machine. :) This is a good entry for the God Whispers Man Appears contest.
God whispers to me also.
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This is good, Al. When first I read your portfolio I said to myself this man just reviews. Then later I thought that you were the artificial intelligence of the machine FanStory, but now I have formed a totality different concept of you. You're the Angel of the machine. :) This is a good entry for the God Whispers Man Appears contest.
God whispers to me also.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
A little mystery to solve, Alcreator but to win the prize for a dream envisioned is a wonderful goal.
Fine job with your entry into the contest, and I wish you all good luck in the booth.
Gloria
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A little mystery to solve, Alcreator but to win the prize for a dream envisioned is a wonderful goal.
Fine job with your entry into the contest, and I wish you all good luck in the booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is a very creative and unique poem. It whispers loud and clear of your individuality and dream, materialized. Well written my friend.
Keep writing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
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This is a very creative and unique poem. It whispers loud and clear of your individuality and dream, materialized. Well written my friend.
Keep writing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Boogienights
I'm confused but then I usually am! I'm also fascinated by your way of imparting ideas, I am somehow drawn to your work. I won't pretend to understand the meaning but I'll take a stab at it. You want to win a prize or award and you think that with your dream and Gods help it will happen..am I close? Thanks for sharing.
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I'm confused but then I usually am! I'm also fascinated by your way of imparting ideas, I am somehow drawn to your work. I won't pretend to understand the meaning but I'll take a stab at it. You want to win a prize or award and you think that with your dream and Gods help it will happen..am I close? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Shanbreen
AlCreator, this is a wonderful written piece within the constraints of the contest.
It has a good flow and I like the alliteration -- literature with litterateur.
Dais announces, man clamours, 'and Orb Prize for literature goes to Dear Litterateur'.
A clever way of introducing the writer and his work -- claimed through their God-made dreams..
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AlCreator, this is a wonderful written piece within the constraints of the contest.
It has a good flow and I like the alliteration -- literature with litterateur.
Dais announces, man clamours, 'and Orb Prize for literature goes to Dear Litterateur'.
A clever way of introducing the writer and his work -- claimed through their God-made dreams..
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from RGstar
For forty words, a strong statement. More in the way of proverbs, yet personal to the touch.
'Clamour' could not be phrased as 'talking to.' In both forms...verb or noun would be to bray or shout: vehemently...more in the way of a group of people in complaint.
Yet, gives that meaning a little more of a protest.
Good write.
Best wishes.
RGstar
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For forty words, a strong statement. More in the way of proverbs, yet personal to the touch.
'Clamour' could not be phrased as 'talking to.' In both forms...verb or noun would be to bray or shout: vehemently...more in the way of a group of people in complaint.
Yet, gives that meaning a little more of a protest.
Good write.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I have enjoyed these spiritual challenges and gather meaning from them. I have the utmost appreciation for your unique and creative spirit on this partial poem. I hope I have the time to challenge myself with this contest.
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I have enjoyed these spiritual challenges and gather meaning from them. I have the utmost appreciation for your unique and creative spirit on this partial poem. I hope I have the time to challenge myself with this contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from artisart4u
You do have sixty words written in your poem I would call an acrostic poem.
G
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D.
Very nicely put together.
To me, the twist is in the word clamouring. I am probably wrong.
Good luck with your poem.
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You do have sixty words written in your poem I would call an acrostic poem.
G
O
D.
Very nicely put together.
To me, the twist is in the word clamouring. I am probably wrong.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
