God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from Bill Schott
This acrostic poem, GOD, follows the short, vertical theme and sends out the personal hope that you will be lauded for your work in literature. Good luck.
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This acrostic poem, GOD, follows the short, vertical theme and sends out the personal hope that you will be lauded for your work in literature. Good luck.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Only at FS would this have a six star rating. I am just glad you review your way to the first page, and don't fork out with real money, because although you say you are writing 'your way', you annhiliate the English language, lol. Not so much in this one, but in your other recent posts. I know you are well meaning, and I have paid for your subscription once, so you must know that I am well meaning too, but you need to have some English lessons if you want to go further with your writing. They probably have lessons on syntax, tense, etc, on youtube for free, and if you are serious about writing and getting your work out there, get an instagram account and get some serious followers, as you are putting all this energy into a friend club with second rate poetry, where friends come in and give sixers to friends who write poetry about their garden spade, or something eually innane. Whereas, Instagram gives the world access to your writing, and when you get a certain number of followers, people will contact you so they can advertise on your account and pay you. I don't use my real name, as I can't but you probably could do that and build a fan base. There are some lovely people here, and the cabaret that goes with the poetry is such a hoot, not the prose writers so much as they genuinely want help, but the poets are cutthroat, and a lot of nasty stuff goes flying around in private messages. But I would warn you against taking it too seriously here and putting all your effort into a vanity site. Especially if you are young. Instagram is free, also. Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing. Anastasia.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Only at FS would this have a six star rating. I am just glad you review your way to the first page, and don't fork out with real money, because although you say you are writing 'your way', you annhiliate the English language, lol. Not so much in this one, but in your other recent posts. I know you are well meaning, and I have paid for your subscription once, so you must know that I am well meaning too, but you need to have some English lessons if you want to go further with your writing. They probably have lessons on syntax, tense, etc, on youtube for free, and if you are serious about writing and getting your work out there, get an instagram account and get some serious followers, as you are putting all this energy into a friend club with second rate poetry, where friends come in and give sixers to friends who write poetry about their garden spade, or something eually innane. Whereas, Instagram gives the world access to your writing, and when you get a certain number of followers, people will contact you so they can advertise on your account and pay you. I don't use my real name, as I can't but you probably could do that and build a fan base. There are some lovely people here, and the cabaret that goes with the poetry is such a hoot, not the prose writers so much as they genuinely want help, but the poets are cutthroat, and a lot of nasty stuff goes flying around in private messages. But I would warn you against taking it too seriously here and putting all your effort into a vanity site. Especially if you are young. Instagram is free, also. Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing. Anastasia.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for offering real, true, wise and profitable suggestions, advice; I appreciate what you mean and hint for; I know my limitations, weaknesses and inabilities.
Comment from ronnie k
Amen, the spirt has a universe too see and give a blessing to His flock never forgiving and more than willing, more than able too provide joy, love and hope to all that will trust, belief and most of all share for "He so loved...."
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Amen, the spirt has a universe too see and give a blessing to His flock never forgiving and more than willing, more than able too provide joy, love and hope to all that will trust, belief and most of all share for "He so loved...."
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from robyn corum
hahahahaha!
Looks like you've already answered all the questions that came to me as I viewed your post today! I guess others have already asked these things?
This was a nice poem. I enjoyed!
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hahahahaha!
Looks like you've already answered all the questions that came to me as I viewed your post today! I guess others have already asked these things?
This was a nice poem. I enjoyed!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Excellent written acrostic on God. You certainly fulfilled the prompt well. Using all of the words God, On, Dream, Whispers, Man, and Clamours.
Great job and Good Luck
Regards
Tia
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Hi
Excellent written acrostic on God. You certainly fulfilled the prompt well. Using all of the words God, On, Dream, Whispers, Man, and Clamours.
Great job and Good Luck
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from Janet Foor
I really like the thought process in this one. Inspiring and uplifting in an unusual format for this "God whispers Man Appears" poetry contest.
Very well done.
Blessings
Janet
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I really like the thought process in this one. Inspiring and uplifting in an unusual format for this "God whispers Man Appears" poetry contest.
Very well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi it is good to dream , but not all know news f dreams. I have had some very horrible ones.whether they come from God or not ,I honestly do not know.i suffered from them.
Still I hat to dream, specially in the late morning ,just when I am about to wake up.
Again if this write speaks about the big dream of being a great person, I bless you.
Danny Jock
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Hi it is good to dream , but not all know news f dreams. I have had some very horrible ones.whether they come from God or not ,I honestly do not know.i suffered from them.
Still I hat to dream, specially in the late morning ,just when I am about to wake up.
Again if this write speaks about the big dream of being a great person, I bless you.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from TPAC
Creative expression detailing concepts of beliefs, views declaring the existence of God, His eye watching over all. Especially got captured by this well spoken ending. Great play on words in my opinion.
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Creative expression detailing concepts of beliefs, views declaring the existence of God, His eye watching over all. Especially got captured by this well spoken ending. Great play on words in my opinion.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
Comment from susand3022
Very nicely done, the accidental Acrostic notwithstanding. I was feeling totally inspired by it all. In fact, my mind was at the Olympic games until you said, "literature" instead of a sport. LOL Your "Orb Prize" was an Olympic medal. Then I had to adjust. Funny how sometimes you can see one thing so clearly in a poem while you're reading it, then there's a word or phrase you're not expecting and it slides into a whole new direction. Susan
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Very nicely done, the accidental Acrostic notwithstanding. I was feeling totally inspired by it all. In fact, my mind was at the Olympic games until you said, "literature" instead of a sport. LOL Your "Orb Prize" was an Olympic medal. Then I had to adjust. Funny how sometimes you can see one thing so clearly in a poem while you're reading it, then there's a word or phrase you're not expecting and it slides into a whole new direction. Susan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting concept of poetry. I was thinking about how a small still voice says "This is the way." Never in lightning, never in thunder, but a small still voice. You did well with this poem. Best to you in the contest.
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Interesting concept of poetry. I was thinking about how a small still voice says "This is the way." Never in lightning, never in thunder, but a small still voice. You did well with this poem. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
