God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You certainly put the words into a meaningful contest entry, Alcreator, it words so well too. I love how you have ended it, so you won the prize! Well done, now lets see if you can win the human prize, lol, I sometimes think we are far harsher than God. Good luck, my friend. :) Sandra x
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You certainly put the words into a meaningful contest entry, Alcreator, it words so well too. I love how you have ended it, so you won the prize! Well done, now lets see if you can win the human prize, lol, I sometimes think we are far harsher than God. Good luck, my friend. :) Sandra x
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from TKField
Hear that sound? It's the English language being tortured to death. I am not a big fan of your weird syntax, although I think I get the gist here. But who knows? Like they say, when you talk to God it's prayer, when God talks back, it's schizophrenia. Might I recommend the "Elements of Style" by Struck and White? I think you could use a bit more coherence to convey your message more clearly and cogently. Good luck.
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Hear that sound? It's the English language being tortured to death. I am not a big fan of your weird syntax, although I think I get the gist here. But who knows? Like they say, when you talk to God it's prayer, when God talks back, it's schizophrenia. Might I recommend the "Elements of Style" by Struck and White? I think you could use a bit more coherence to convey your message more clearly and cogently. Good luck.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Badger_29
You're writing inspires me, your ability to follow the format, add your own twist on it and those little extra things like the diagonal God. You Hook tide this together in a wonderful fashion using English and British.
Great riding I appreciate your inspiration.
Blessings.
Brother Badger
Darren
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You're writing inspires me, your ability to follow the format, add your own twist on it and those little extra things like the diagonal God. You Hook tide this together in a wonderful fashion using English and British.
Great riding I appreciate your inspiration.
Blessings.
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from karenina
I like your own style! I've often found when I allow my faith to waiver and question why God is not guiding me I need only quiet my chatter of prayers, as if I would know what is best! When I become silent and meditate on His message it is a comfort to hear His "whisper" is there--has always been there--I just need to surrender my will and expectations to HIS.
Karenina
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I like your own style! I've often found when I allow my faith to waiver and question why God is not guiding me I need only quiet my chatter of prayers, as if I would know what is best! When I become silent and meditate on His message it is a comfort to hear His "whisper" is there--has always been there--I just need to surrender my will and expectations to HIS.
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from hari anand
Hi i am a big fan of word, ' Dream'.. its my favourite words. Your poetry is so inpirational defining a dream that comes true, written in your own unique style. Great work.
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Hi i am a big fan of word, ' Dream'.. its my favourite words. Your poetry is so inpirational defining a dream that comes true, written in your own unique style. Great work.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Urial
Hi there Alcreator,
An awesome theme and sentences of God. You are a litt�©rateur of God's gift. The verbs used in this appears a Carpe Diem poetry style. Excellent done!
Peace be with you,
Urial
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Hi there Alcreator,
An awesome theme and sentences of God. You are a litt�©rateur of God's gift. The verbs used in this appears a Carpe Diem poetry style. Excellent done!
Peace be with you,
Urial
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Jacqueline O.
I enjoyed this poem quite a lot- I loved how you took your own twist on the prompt, for after all, that's what creative writing is all about! I admire the work you invested into this piece and think it flows well. Congrats on a strong contest contender!
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I enjoyed this poem quite a lot- I loved how you took your own twist on the prompt, for after all, that's what creative writing is all about! I admire the work you invested into this piece and think it flows well. Congrats on a strong contest contender!
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
This is the second time I have reviewed something like this. the first was a day or two ago in a similar contest that reqired four set words ove I think it was twenty lines. It was probably you who wrote an acrostic entry spelling God to that one too. First time rounds was clever and i will give you the benefit of the doubt on this second occasion, but don't push your luck a third time. Lol.
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This is the second time I have reviewed something like this. the first was a day or two ago in a similar contest that reqired four set words ove I think it was twenty lines. It was probably you who wrote an acrostic entry spelling God to that one too. First time rounds was clever and i will give you the benefit of the doubt on this second occasion, but don't push your luck a third time. Lol.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from Mike J
Nice poem and great message in the poem, very true words and inspirational as well. I love the quote that accompanies the poem, thanks for sharing both.
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Nice poem and great message in the poem, very true words and inspirational as well. I love the quote that accompanies the poem, thanks for sharing both.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
Comment from cajunjoe
What language is the last line in? Very confusing. So god tells you to dream your dream and see it come true. I believe that. The last line ruins it, but good luck with your whispers.
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What language is the last line in? Very confusing. So god tells you to dream your dream and see it come true. I believe that. The last line ruins it, but good luck with your whispers.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2018
