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haiku (icicles melt)

haiku contest entry

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Comment from Kelly Hanna
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The photo grabbed me. The color blue was a good choice for the theme here. You did well in relaxing me with the mesmerizing drip of the icicle. Good job!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2018
    Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Aries Poet
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How I miss watching Icicles melt. I remember winter in Colorado growing up and watching the icicles melt off the edge of our roof, always a slow steady melt. Your poem reads nice and the photo you used has a calmness about it. Nice haiku poem and nice to know it doesn't always have to be 5-7-5. I am just learning about certain types of poems.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
    Thank you so much for this lovely review, and there is just something about icicles!!!
Comment from meeshu
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a very fine haiku, celebrating nature's drama. perfect 5-7-5 form. it is reassuring to know someone else can just sit and watch ice melt. good job, Val...............meeshu

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
    Thank you, but as I stated in my comments, this is not a 5/7/5 haiku nor does it need to be. So glad you got the "cash" but sadly did not get the point
reply by meeshu on 24-Sep-2018
    whatever it is I liked it.
Comment from Rickie1
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Val

Well done. Clean and simple. Reminds me when I was a kid, playing outside on a cold day, watching in fascination as icicles melt, as the sun hit them, the way you describe. Have you ever been to our mountains in the Adirondacks?

Rickie

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
    I lived in lived in those mountains, and remember Hunter Mountain very well. thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Gert sherwood
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I like your haiku Val Crisson
of how when one watches an icicle slowly drip if you watch it won't be long before you are in a hypnotic state.
Gert

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Gert. I love to write haiku. Just so you know, I am on and off this site a lot.
reply by Gert sherwood on 03-Sep-2018
    Hello Val
    Will be watching for you the next time you post.
    Gert
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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This is a good haiku, Val. Your topic is most interesting. Your words capture that moment in time with a great satori. Good job with the syllable count. I know about the number of syllables that is acceptable. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Thank you
Comment from donette1914
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very nice and I can see this in my mind in the winter time

I really like the artwork and how creative you are
very well penned and I truly enjoyed your work
thank you for sharing
donette1914 Aug 23, 2018

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Thank you
Comment from l.raven
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Hi Val, so good to see you my sweet friend...and you are so right about the syllable count...won't be long...and these ice icicles will be hanging off the roof tops...love your poem sweet girl...and love your picture...very nicely written...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Hugs , and thank you
reply by l.raven on 24-Aug-2018
    your so welcome Val...big hugs back at you...love you...xxoo
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
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This is a great haiku. Nature at one of its fine "hypnotic" moments! At first, I was counting for the 5-7-5 but then realized that the contest was not calling for that. This is a wonderful entry. I hope you do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Thank you
Comment from Susanjohn
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Dew drops balanced on a blade of grass do the same thing!..nice little Haiku! Though the picture is kinda small here..I enjoyed reading! Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2018

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2018
    Thank you, I am having a hard time getting the presentation right on this one.