Chasing of the Wind.
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Grandpa Frank Mendez and Children."Conflict between the Human Needs and the Divinity
3 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
This piece was both interesting while being touching.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Theme and Imagery were both excellent and exceptional.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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This piece was both interesting while being touching.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Theme and Imagery were both excellent and exceptional.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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I am happy to read your comments and feel like I have improved my skills. I will remember the attributes you have mentioned and praised and will try to keep my eye on them when I finish this novel Best regards and many thanks.
Arun
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I am happy to read your comments and feel like I have improved my skills. I will remember the attributes you have mentioned and praised and will try to keep my eye on them when I finish this novel Best regards and many thanks.
Arun
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Niyuta, I enjoyed the goings on in your story, which is well written with good dialogue and characters. You certainly leave your reader wondering what is to come. I think your grammar looks great and your style is easy to read.
Thanks for sharing your story, which was a pleasure to read and review, cheers, Ana.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Hello Niyuta, I enjoyed the goings on in your story, which is well written with good dialogue and characters. You certainly leave your reader wondering what is to come. I think your grammar looks great and your style is easy to read.
Thanks for sharing your story, which was a pleasure to read and review, cheers, Ana.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Thanks Anastasia. I am taking time to review and rewrite the chapters since I published my first novel(Wheel of Samsara-A Complete Circle on Lulu.com publishers) in July. After receiving the printed copy, I realized how sloppy I had been in few chapters. Now I am concentrating on improving the work. I appreciate your encouragement. Best regards and wishes, -Arun
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Thanks for letting me know. My journey with editing says, it never really ends, works are abandoned, not finished, lol.
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Indeed Ana. Many unfinished works are languishing on my own Hard Drive. I wonder if it will see the light of the day. Do you edit for fun or have a business?
Comment from Sugarray77
You did a good job of building the tension and the reasons for the abrasiveness between the parents and the grandfather. I must say I'm rooting for the affectionate interaction to win over strict legalism. It will be fun to see how you continue to develop this.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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You did a good job of building the tension and the reasons for the abrasiveness between the parents and the grandfather. I must say I'm rooting for the affectionate interaction to win over strict legalism. It will be fun to see how you continue to develop this.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Dear Sugar Ray: I am glad you enjoyed the drama that happens in our life. I hope you will read the chapters before this one to get full picture. Your comment of ' the affectionate interaction to win over strict legalism' gave me an ending for this story of Frank the sailor and his stepchildren. Thanks for the direction you have given me. I sure will take the story in the happy direction. My best regards and wishes.-Arun .
