True Love
Looking For Love In All The Wrong Places16 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett,I know I'm far too late with this review. I've been very busy of late and have fallen hopelessly behind. This is a fun little flash. The ending was totally unexpected. I liked it. Good luck in the contest. All best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Hi Brett,I know I'm far too late with this review. I've been very busy of late and have fallen hopelessly behind. This is a fun little flash. The ending was totally unexpected. I liked it. Good luck in the contest. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate it very much.
Comment from Ricky1024
"True Love is 'A Dribble Flash Fiction Contest Entree rich in Theme and Imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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"True Love is 'A Dribble Flash Fiction Contest Entree rich in Theme and Imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this little story.
Comment from LynnetteOK
I can relate completely. There's nothing as good as that first swallow of coffee in the morning.
It seems so serious, the search for love, and then comes the punch line. It's very creative and shows a great sense of humor.
Very well done!
LynnetteOK
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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I can relate completely. There's nothing as good as that first swallow of coffee in the morning.
It seems so serious, the search for love, and then comes the punch line. It's very creative and shows a great sense of humor.
Very well done!
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Appreciate the comments and support, as well as the review.
Comment from judiverse
Clever idea for your Dribble Flash Fiction entry. How could we start the day without that caffeine jolt? I must have a cup in the morning, but that's really the only one I absolutely need. Great description of the feeling of getting that first cuppa. That's true love, indeed. Great job of building up to that last sentence. judi
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Clever idea for your Dribble Flash Fiction entry. How could we start the day without that caffeine jolt? I must have a cup in the morning, but that's really the only one I absolutely need. Great description of the feeling of getting that first cuppa. That's true love, indeed. Great job of building up to that last sentence. judi
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Much appreciated. Sure coffee drinkers appreciate these one. I myself am a tea totaler.
Comment from country ranch writer
Coffee is the one thing people would die for in the morning. They get the jitters like a drug addict needing their fix. So much for caffeine.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Coffee is the one thing people would die for in the morning. They get the jitters like a drug addict needing their fix. So much for caffeine.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Much appreciate the comments and review.
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Smiles
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles to you Brett Matthew West
Oh I knew what you were referring to when I read when you said in your authors note made me think of how I myself don't love coffee only Ice Tea. Gert
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Smiles to you Brett Matthew West
Oh I knew what you were referring to when I read when you said in your authors note made me think of how I myself don't love coffee only Ice Tea. Gert
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Appreciate the in depth comments and the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
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You are welcome Brett Matthew West
Gert
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Brett, you know what most think when they read your entry. Good job on the twist at the end. That was a surprise. Your little story reads well. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Well, Brett, you know what most think when they read your entry. Good job on the twist at the end. That was a surprise. Your little story reads well. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Appreciate your comments about this posting. Several coffee drinkers seemed to enjoy it.
Comment from rama devi
Ah yes, coffee fits best here. I am a tea drinker too. This is excellent flash fiction with a humorous twist in the closing. Good flow. Good concept. Good word economy. Exceelnt double meaning.
Spag suggestions:
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Though he searched high and low(,) he would not find love in the afternoon.
*But,(NO COMMA) his fortunes changed with the dawn's early light.
Fun picture too...well done.
Good luck...this is a fun entry.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Ah yes, coffee fits best here. I am a tea drinker too. This is excellent flash fiction with a humorous twist in the closing. Good flow. Good concept. Good word economy. Exceelnt double meaning.
Spag suggestions:
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Though he searched high and low(,) he would not find love in the afternoon.
*But,(NO COMMA) his fortunes changed with the dawn's early light.
Fun picture too...well done.
Good luck...this is a fun entry.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the comma nits. Appreciate you taking the time to read this little ditty and pen a helpful review. Glad you enjoyed what I wrote.
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Comment from phill doran
Hello Brett!
Very good writing - very clever twist to it and some double-entendre thrown in to throw me off the scent until the final dismount. I am also a tea person and you are right - tea has no underlying eroticism: coffee is seductive, tea's what the vicar drinks.
50-words on the nose too (just in case you needed affirmation)
I wish you well in the contest with this and with your further writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Hello Brett!
Very good writing - very clever twist to it and some double-entendre thrown in to throw me off the scent until the final dismount. I am also a tea person and you are right - tea has no underlying eroticism: coffee is seductive, tea's what the vicar drinks.
50-words on the nose too (just in case you needed affirmation)
I wish you well in the contest with this and with your further writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Appreciate the in depth comments and the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It would have had the same effect for me but I am a tea drinker as well.
That is a picture I posted as my muse a few years ago.
Good luck in the contest Brett. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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It would have had the same effect for me but I am a tea drinker as well.
That is a picture I posted as my muse a few years ago.
Good luck in the contest Brett. :) Nancy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the comments and support.
