The Bounty Hunter's Lament
Etheree contest entry9 total reviews
Comment from LyndaS
Wow! This is sublime stuff. Very seductive. Well crafted. Good job with the syllable count. Killer presentation with great art, spot on structure and solid content. Plus it's sexy as hell. Love the story of the seduction of a man. You are all weenies, you know.
Well done poet!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Wow! This is sublime stuff. Very seductive. Well crafted. Good job with the syllable count. Killer presentation with great art, spot on structure and solid content. Plus it's sexy as hell. Love the story of the seduction of a man. You are all weenies, you know.
Well done poet!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Lynda. Good to hear from you again. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece.
Ron
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Welcome dude
Comment from LynnetteOK
This is a creative and interesting topic. The Etheree format was followed perfectly. Finally, the photo you chose to use is a great fit.
Overall, very well written!
Best of luck in the contest.
LynnetteOK
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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This is a creative and interesting topic. The Etheree format was followed perfectly. Finally, the photo you chose to use is a great fit.
Overall, very well written!
Best of luck in the contest.
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Lynnette. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh, woe are we--we poor men--for we are fools for a pretty face.
I think we all know women who can kill you with just a wink and a smile. And if they don't kill your right away they make you wish you were dead by the time they're through with you.
Your etheree entry appears to be in good syllabic form. It's also very well presented.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Oh, woe are we--we poor men--for we are fools for a pretty face.
I think we all know women who can kill you with just a wink and a smile. And if they don't kill your right away they make you wish you were dead by the time they're through with you.
Your etheree entry appears to be in good syllabic form. It's also very well presented.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Dean. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a great entry for the etheree competition. I enjoyed reading your poem very much and wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is a great entry for the etheree competition. I enjoyed reading your poem very much and wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Jen.
Comment from meeshu
this is like a fifties mystery novel in ten lines. very nicely done. when the hunted becomes the hunter. I should think you will do very well in the contest with this..
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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this is like a fifties mystery novel in ten lines. very nicely done. when the hunted becomes the hunter. I should think you will do very well in the contest with this..
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Meeshu.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The seduction of a female in play here in your 'etheree' contest entry, beware the charms of a female, they can suck you in and bleed you dry, he he he, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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The seduction of a female in play here in your 'etheree' contest entry, beware the charms of a female, they can suck you in and bleed you dry, he he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Debbie Pope
That is just plain awesome. You managed to tell an interesting story under strict syllable constraints. My favorite line is "Seduction's ruse binds no rules." It's my favorite, but I am not sure that I understand the use of the word "binds." Don't change it, because I clearly understand what you are saying, and I love the flow of your line. Picking it apart though, that word confuses me.
I think that this etheree should do very well in the contest. It's a very appealing read.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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That is just plain awesome. You managed to tell an interesting story under strict syllable constraints. My favorite line is "Seduction's ruse binds no rules." It's my favorite, but I am not sure that I understand the use of the word "binds." Don't change it, because I clearly understand what you are saying, and I love the flow of your line. Picking it apart though, that word confuses me.
I think that this etheree should do very well in the contest. It's a very appealing read.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Debbie. It means 'holds' no rules. Seduction's ruse holds no rules of truth or loyalty. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from rspoet
This is quite a seductive etheree both in words and art work
Very well written with excellent use of alliteration.
When the bounty's high, the danger is even higher
Excellent shape for the poem, too
Well done
This should do well in the contest
Best wishes to you
RS
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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This is quite a seductive etheree both in words and art work
Very well written with excellent use of alliteration.
When the bounty's high, the danger is even higher
Excellent shape for the poem, too
Well done
This should do well in the contest
Best wishes to you
RS
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, RS. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from lyenochka
Great job in luring the reader in wondering if the narrator was falling victim to the seductive criminall. And at the very end with so few syllables left, you totally changed the story!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Great job in luring the reader in wondering if the narrator was falling victim to the seductive criminall. And at the very end with so few syllables left, you totally changed the story!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the great review, lyenochka.
