Deadly Confession
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Evading Justice"Family secrets can be your worst nightmare.
6 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Mistydawn
I read some of the reviews that you received about you book and I see that many like the same things I do, with the comedy between the deceives and how you describe you chacters, and the way you leave us wondering what is going to happen next
Gert
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Hi Mistydawn
I read some of the reviews that you received about you book and I see that many like the same things I do, with the comedy between the deceives and how you describe you chacters, and the way you leave us wondering what is going to happen next
Gert
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your fantastic review I'm so glad you continue to enjoy this story. When you ask when the next chapter is coming out always puts a smile on my face.
Thank you again for all your help,support your friendship, take care.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is the first time I have had the opportunity to read your book. I am a poet first but I can tell a good story when I see one and this one is well written with suspense, danger, and a bit of humor to release the tension. Well done Dawn. I will be reading more. Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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This is the first time I have had the opportunity to read your book. I am a poet first but I can tell a good story when I see one and this one is well written with suspense, danger, and a bit of humor to release the tension. Well done Dawn. I will be reading more. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your kind review I'm so glad you enjoyed it and want to read more. You write some beautiful poetry, something I couldn't do.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, take care.
Comment from heart of Lou
Great buildup of suspense in this piece. That was a nice touch, to have the bull come charging out! The banter between the characters is amusing, giving relief between the darker parts.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Great buildup of suspense in this piece. That was a nice touch, to have the bull come charging out! The banter between the characters is amusing, giving relief between the darker parts.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review I am so glad you enjoyed it and that bit of humor.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, take care.
Comment from Jacqueline O.
Loved the line-by-line work and the characters! They all seemed very well written, easily distinguished and with distinct personality traits. The teasing they offered each other was also fun. However, putting character's thoughts into italics is a must to differentiate them from the rest of the text. There are two or three instances where this should be done, like in the second line where he says "I know he...", etc. Looks good otherwise! Keep writing and it's going to be magnificent!
Hey sure! I would love to give some specifics. :)
Ok, the second sentence that starts with â??I know he has to be around here somewhereâ?? is a characterâ??s thought, so this should be italicized.
You did this correctly in the second paragraph of Luigiâ??s narration. You put his thoughts in italics when heâ??s thinking about how heâ??s going to have to kill the extra witnesses.
Everything else looks good- I thought there was one more spot but didnâ??t find it on my re-read. Hope this doesnâ??t confuse or discourage you- you have an excellent chapter full of all the right things, and I canâ??t wait to read more!
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Loved the line-by-line work and the characters! They all seemed very well written, easily distinguished and with distinct personality traits. The teasing they offered each other was also fun. However, putting character's thoughts into italics is a must to differentiate them from the rest of the text. There are two or three instances where this should be done, like in the second line where he says "I know he...", etc. Looks good otherwise! Keep writing and it's going to be magnificent!
Hey sure! I would love to give some specifics. :)
Ok, the second sentence that starts with â??I know he has to be around here somewhereâ?? is a characterâ??s thought, so this should be italicized.
You did this correctly in the second paragraph of Luigiâ??s narration. You put his thoughts in italics when heâ??s thinking about how heâ??s going to have to kill the extra witnesses.
Everything else looks good- I thought there was one more spot but didnâ??t find it on my re-read. Hope this doesnâ??t confuse or discourage you- you have an excellent chapter full of all the right things, and I canâ??t wait to read more!
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review, and your encouraging words. If he/ she thinks follows should a thought still be in italics? I ask because I didn't find what you're talking about. Can you please be more specific so I can fix the error, figure out why I keep skipping over it.
Thank you again for your kind review, take care.
Comment from royowen
Boy things can get extremely mixed can't. One thing I admire, is a writer can't forget how he arranges his plot, nor the characters that are related in it, and their movements, I was getting a headache trying to figure the Greco's family and connections relationary. Well done, I'll try to avoid roads with bulls on them. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Boy things can get extremely mixed can't. One thing I admire, is a writer can't forget how he arranges his plot, nor the characters that are related in it, and their movements, I was getting a headache trying to figure the Greco's family and connections relationary. Well done, I'll try to avoid roads with bulls on them. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review I'm sorry it caused you a headache. Maybe this explanation will help. Mr. Maroni had an affair with his made which produced Luigi and Tito (Luigi's twin) When they were born he had the doctor switch them for the Greco's dead twins. So the Grecos' have been raising the boys as their own. Luigi recently found out about what happened, confronted Mr. Maroni and was turned away. This is why he's getting revenge. I hope this helps. If not please let me know. If you want to reread this part it's in chapter 1.
Thank you again for all your help your support and friendship. It always means so much to me, take care.
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That's right, I forgot, so many stories. Heh heh
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The stories to tend to jumble together. Does it make sense to you now?
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Yes it does
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
The details, as well as the exceptional writing and characterisation, make this. It is engaging, thrilling and very very cleverly written. You have fleshed out the story so that it seems entirely real and I enjoyed every bit of it hope to read more from you soon very kind regards and warmest wishes Meia :)
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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The details, as well as the exceptional writing and characterisation, make this. It is engaging, thrilling and very very cleverly written. You have fleshed out the story so that it seems entirely real and I enjoyed every bit of it hope to read more from you soon very kind regards and warmest wishes Meia :)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for such a wonderful review and for such encouraging words. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully, I'll hear from you again.
Thank you again for such a kind review, take care.
