The Divided States of America
the new Civil War2 total reviews
Comment from heart of Lou
Your concerns for the DSA shine through very well in your poem. I'm Canadian, so what is worrisome for you, is also worrisome for me, because our countries are so close. I guess the only consolation is when you've hit rock bottom, the only place to go is up.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Your concerns for the DSA shine through very well in your poem. I'm Canadian, so what is worrisome for you, is also worrisome for me, because our countries are so close. I guess the only consolation is when you've hit rock bottom, the only place to go is up.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Lou, and what I worry about is have we hit bottom yet? There's a storm coming, I think
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Well, if it could be worse, we're not at rock bottom. For myself, I have a pretty good life, but there is so much tragedy out there, not to mention downright evilness.
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I agree, but evilness as our President?
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Is he? I can't figure out for sure.
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If I believed in such things, hes the ranting definition of the Anti-Christ
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If he's so terrible then WHY did so many people vote for him? Is it terribly hard to assassinate the president of the DSA?
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Can't explain it, that's why if it was real, he's the Anti-Christ, the Pied Piper leading rat's off a cliff. He lost the popular vote by 3 million
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How long till the next election? What has he done that has affected you personally?
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November, and EVERYTHING he's done affects me personally. He's making this country a joke, he's the joke
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Well, I hope you get a better president next time. If there is anyone better running.
Comment from Dawnya
This is a very good reflection of today's political landscape. It is worrisome how divided we've become. I think we'll pull through, but we definitely are in a trouble time.
I thought the couplets were effectively used. I believe you have a typo with "angles" instead of "angels" in the 11th line. Personally, I think lines 3 and 15 would be easier read with a comma to separate thoughts and phrases. Line 8 is my favorite: "kaleidoscope of unreality" is a particularly good phrase.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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This is a very good reflection of today's political landscape. It is worrisome how divided we've become. I think we'll pull through, but we definitely are in a trouble time.
I thought the couplets were effectively used. I believe you have a typo with "angles" instead of "angels" in the 11th line. Personally, I think lines 3 and 15 would be easier read with a comma to separate thoughts and phrases. Line 8 is my favorite: "kaleidoscope of unreality" is a particularly good phrase.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Dawna, and 'doh!' I didn't know I wrote 'angles,' instead of angels'
