Deadly Confession
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Collateral Damage "Family secrets can be your worst nightmare.
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Tito's or Luigi's DNA? Aren't they identical twins? I don't recall if you said which kind they are.
I'm having a hard time with children being killed. I admit to being a wimp when it comes to hurting kids. It's hard to read, but that's just me. Such things happen; I just can't bear to hear about it.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Tito's or Luigi's DNA? Aren't they identical twins? I don't recall if you said which kind they are.
I'm having a hard time with children being killed. I admit to being a wimp when it comes to hurting kids. It's hard to read, but that's just me. Such things happen; I just can't bear to hear about it.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm sorry it was so painful for you. No more children die in this story, I promise. Yes Tito and Luigi are identical twins but the birth records show that Luigi died at birth along with the Maroni's twins. I don't believe I said because Luigi is supposedly dead.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, taking time to go back and read the chapters. I truly appreciate it, take care.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mistysawn, there was certainly a lot of action in this chapter and four people dead. The police now know that it the same perpetraitor who's shot them all and he is now on the run from both crimescenes. I liked the dialogue, and I'm looking forward toreading on. All the best.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Hi Mistysawn, there was certainly a lot of action in this chapter and four people dead. The police now know that it the same perpetraitor who's shot them all and he is now on the run from both crimescenes. I liked the dialogue, and I'm looking forward toreading on. All the best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your nice review I'm so glad you continue to enjoy this story. The murders are far from over. Luigi is forced to kill more than he planned because of his mistakes.
Thank you again for your kind review, take care.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Mistydawn
I found plenty of action in this chapter then the the scene when the homeless man wakes up
Luigi and how he reached for the gearshift and shot the homeless man while his wife and the two children being present, was very described and made me quite upset.
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Hello Mistydawn
I found plenty of action in this chapter then the the scene when the homeless man wakes up
Luigi and how he reached for the gearshift and shot the homeless man while his wife and the two children being present, was very described and made me quite upset.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your kind review, but I'm sorry it upset you. How about if I give you a heads up if I get that descriptive again. Maybe put a * before after so you can skip it?
Thank you again for all your reviews, help, support, friendship. I'm sorry it upset you so, take care.
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Don't worry about what I said about getting upset I must remember this is just all fiction and a very good mystery, crime story.
Smile Gert
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well I'm glad Rachel is okay and it was just a pigeon or was it? Now a murder is on the run but lots of description and now they know who it is. Looking forward to the next chapter. Rox
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Well I'm glad Rachel is okay and it was just a pigeon or was it? Now a murder is on the run but lots of description and now they know who it is. Looking forward to the next chapter. Rox
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review, I'm so glad you're enjoying this story. Rachel is fine, at least for now. The killer will try to come after her again soon.
Thank you again for all your support, your encouragement, take care.
Comment from apky
Very enjoyable indeed. I like how you weave so many subplots which all knit together to give the detectives a lot to work with. That's brilliant - random mistakes that the perp makes that will finally be their dismantling.
Sorry I have no sixes left. I couldn't wait two days till I get my new sixes, not knowing whether your story will still be up when I come in here again.
Keep it coming!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Very enjoyable indeed. I like how you weave so many subplots which all knit together to give the detectives a lot to work with. That's brilliant - random mistakes that the perp makes that will finally be their dismantling.
Sorry I have no sixes left. I couldn't wait two days till I get my new sixes, not knowing whether your story will still be up when I come in here again.
Keep it coming!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review and for taking the time to read my story, that means so much to me, considering how limited your time is these days. Hope all is well with you. You take care and know you are greatly missed.
Comment from heart of Lou
The story is really good, and could be a lot better if you used proper punctuation, didn't jump from present to past tense, and didn't head hop. Still, the story is exciting and I'm curious to know how it will end.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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The story is really good, and could be a lot better if you used proper punctuation, didn't jump from present to past tense, and didn't head hop. Still, the story is exciting and I'm curious to know how it will end.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you liked it and would like to see it to the end.
I thought I caught all my punctuation problems, can you please elaborate so I know what I keep missing?
Thank you again for your review, take care.
Comment from country ranch writer
First Rachel,has a false alarm then has to go to a scene of a shooting and now it seems the bullets may be tied to another killing as the night progresses.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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First Rachel,has a false alarm then has to go to a scene of a shooting and now it seems the bullets may be tied to another killing as the night progresses.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your review, I'm glad you liked it. Take care.
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Comment from Laine Carson
It held my interest but I had to re-read some to try to figure out what was going on, so flow seems off. (just mho...maybe it is my brain that is off). I have one other opinion (that is just mine maybe) but I do not like to read about murdered children. Is it the only way to tell this story? It kind of turned me off right away but your writing is intriguing so I pushed through.
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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It held my interest but I had to re-read some to try to figure out what was going on, so flow seems off. (just mho...maybe it is my brain that is off). I have one other opinion (that is just mine maybe) but I do not like to read about murdered children. Is it the only way to tell this story? It kind of turned me off right away but your writing is intriguing so I pushed through.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you found my writing intriguing, but sorry you had trouble with the plot. I'm afraid that's the only way Luigi will get what he wants, to inherited the entire Maroni fortune.
Thank you again for your review, take care.
Comment from Shreya Ramanathan
An interesting chapter. Very nicely written, kept me glued. I like the name of the chapter - collateral damage, very apt for the situation. Overall, I really liked the way the chapter was penned.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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An interesting chapter. Very nicely written, kept me glued. I like the name of the chapter - collateral damage, very apt for the situation. Overall, I really liked the way the chapter was penned.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that it kept your attention to the end.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, take care.
Comment from royowen
You've got to feel for Arnold, the poor homeless man, Luigi, the heartless killer, mercilessly shot Arnold, leaving a widow and two starving children who Rachel wants to look after, when she completes her investigation, well done, excellent episode, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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You've got to feel for Arnold, the poor homeless man, Luigi, the heartless killer, mercilessly shot Arnold, leaving a widow and two starving children who Rachel wants to look after, when she completes her investigation, well done, excellent episode, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Poor Arnold down on his luck, doing his best to keep his family alive. With all that Rachel's been through, I'm sure she'll do all she can for the family. Maybe I should write a bio of the main characters, one each posting so you guys can get to know them better. What do you think?
Thank you again for all your help, support, friendship it always means so much to me, take care.
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I think the bio is an excellent thought.
