There to the End
They walked together until then27 total reviews
Comment from Urial
Hi Y.M. Roger,
This is a beautiful poem for mothers that are passing away. This poem definitely reminds me of saying 'adieu' to my mom too. This is classic and the form and the rhythm and tone - This should win the nonet contest. Well done!
Peace be with you,
Urial
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Hi Y.M. Roger,
This is a beautiful poem for mothers that are passing away. This poem definitely reminds me of saying 'adieu' to my mom too. This is classic and the form and the rhythm and tone - This should win the nonet contest. Well done!
Peace be with you,
Urial
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Urial - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope you carry good memories of your mom as well - they always will own a very special part of our heart! ;) :) Again, thank you for your comments ? they mean alot! And thanx for those wonderful stars!! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Hitcher
A path we all have to take unfortunately : ) but to be there for them when it is their time... as difficult as it can be, it is a priceless gift to not only them but to oneself.
I enjoyed your nonet friend, good Luck!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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A path we all have to take unfortunately : ) but to be there for them when it is their time... as difficult as it can be, it is a priceless gift to not only them but to oneself.
I enjoyed your nonet friend, good Luck!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Hitcher - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and, again, thank you for your heart-felt comments! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from meeshu
I love what you have done with the form here, not the average Nonet. and it works beautifully, a 6six6 in my book, Y.M..............meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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I love what you have done with the form here, not the average Nonet. and it works beautifully, a 6six6 in my book, Y.M..............meeshu
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, meeshu - always very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and, again, thank you for your heart-felt comments! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A great farewell. This is an excellent entry in the contest. According to my personal psychic advisor, who by the way, is the smartest chimp on earth, you will win and send me half the funny money. Thanks in advance.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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A great farewell. This is an excellent entry in the contest. According to my personal psychic advisor, who by the way, is the smartest chimp on earth, you will win and send me half the funny money. Thanks in advance.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Thomas - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope your chimp did too (tell him I'm not promising anything on the money, funny or otherwise)! :) :) Here's wishing you and the psychic advisor of your choice (you seem to have a number of them!) a wonderful remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Roger, this is a very well written, sympathetic nonet poem, in perfect form. A nonet about a painful farewell by a caring protagonist. A good entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Hi Roger, this is a very well written, sympathetic nonet poem, in perfect form. A nonet about a painful farewell by a caring protagonist. A good entry to the contest - good luck. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Dorothy - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and, again, thank you for your heart-felt comments! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Pantygynt
Rhyme is not an issue in a nonet. The only requirement that is laid down is the syllabic total and, although not mentioned in the rules of this contest, the shape, either and isosceles or right angled triangle dependent on the presentation. The shape here may have been assisted by clever use of the space bar and the effect is one of a monorhyming piece. I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Rhyme is not an issue in a nonet. The only requirement that is laid down is the syllabic total and, although not mentioned in the rules of this contest, the shape, either and isosceles or right angled triangle dependent on the presentation. The shape here may have been assisted by clever use of the space bar and the effect is one of a monorhyming piece. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the review - I appreciate your taking the time to analyze my work. I assure you that I wasn't trying to cheat or anything ... simply left the spaces because of the change in the mood/condition at those points - something I think it needed because of the 'speed' with which many tend to read through a nonet. :) :) Thank you for your well wishes and may you have a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hi Y.M.,
Watching a parent die is heart-wrenching, but being there to hold their hand and to try and make it easier for them may bring a slight sense of comfort to both parent and child (whether grown-up or not).
Nonets are my favorite form of poetry, and you've done it justice here with this gem of an entry. Your poem is touching. Perfect pairing of picture and poem! Starting each line with 'A' and ending each line with 'mom' creates impact. Well done! Excellent choice of adjectives to create the tone of this piece. Perhaps capitalize the 'm' in 'Mom' to give more emphasis on the importance of her? ... just a suggestion.
Good luck in the contest with this great entry!
Connie
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Hi Y.M.,
Watching a parent die is heart-wrenching, but being there to hold their hand and to try and make it easier for them may bring a slight sense of comfort to both parent and child (whether grown-up or not).
Nonets are my favorite form of poetry, and you've done it justice here with this gem of an entry. Your poem is touching. Perfect pairing of picture and poem! Starting each line with 'A' and ending each line with 'mom' creates impact. Well done! Excellent choice of adjectives to create the tone of this piece. Perhaps capitalize the 'm' in 'Mom' to give more emphasis on the importance of her? ... just a suggestion.
Good luck in the contest with this great entry!
Connie
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, bichonfrisegirl - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it, and, again, thank you for your comments ? they mean alot! :) :) Oh, and the M's are now capitalized! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Hugh McDowell
This is such a touching poem. Mothers play such an important role in our life. Reminded me of when my mom was cared for by the hospice staff. Just excellent work. Thanks for sharing. Hugh
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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This is such a touching poem. Mothers play such an important role in our life. Reminded me of when my mom was cared for by the hospice staff. Just excellent work. Thanks for sharing. Hugh
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your review, Hugh - very much appreciate your taking the time to read my writing! :) :) I knew it wasn't the traditional nonet, but I just got the visual "right there" and went with the inspiration...'cuz you know what they say about a woman getting something in her head...?! LOL! I am glad you enjoyed it and I hope you carry good memories of your mom as well - they always will own a very special part of our heart! ;) :) Again, thank you for your comments ? they mean alot! :) :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Wow. A very well-written, and yet very sad poem. I can relate to the sentiment and raw and real emotions you are conveying though! Nicely constructed Nonet. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Wow. A very well-written, and yet very sad poem. I can relate to the sentiment and raw and real emotions you are conveying though! Nicely constructed Nonet. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2018
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Thanx for your review, Cindy -- always much appreciated! :) :) And, not to sound morose, I am grateful that you feel it conveyed some real and raw emotions as that was what I was aiming for....thank you for those comments! :) Here's wishing you a remainder of the week filled with moonlit nights and firefly aerobatics!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Nonet Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures were both excellent and Exceptional.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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This is a Nonet Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures were both excellent and Exceptional.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Thank you for the review, Ricky - appreciate your taking the time to do so. :) :)
