Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from flylikeaneagle
Mystery writer: I like how the butterfly is more delicate than the
wind. You endure the seasons of life, hiding in the cellar cocoon.
I can see how the wait and transformation connect. I plant flowers
to attract the butterflies. They are so beautiful and free. Great
thoughts and a winner for sure. flylikeaneagle -- keep flying high --
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Mystery writer: I like how the butterfly is more delicate than the
wind. You endure the seasons of life, hiding in the cellar cocoon.
I can see how the wait and transformation connect. I plant flowers
to attract the butterflies. They are so beautiful and free. Great
thoughts and a winner for sure. flylikeaneagle -- keep flying high --
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
Comment from LynnetteOK
This poem tells such a wonderful story! The lesson it teaches is priceless. Yes, we can outlast the storm - rebuild, be powerful- yet the delicate butterfly can do the same. It remains as beautiful as ever. So how powerful are we actually?
The picture (GIF?) you chose for this is perfect.
Best of luck to you in the contest,
LynnetteOK
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This poem tells such a wonderful story! The lesson it teaches is priceless. Yes, we can outlast the storm - rebuild, be powerful- yet the delicate butterfly can do the same. It remains as beautiful as ever. So how powerful are we actually?
The picture (GIF?) you chose for this is perfect.
Best of luck to you in the contest,
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a powerful poem. That is the first word that comes to mind and I don't mean powerful in terms of the tornado. Your poem moved my soul kind of powerful. I adore the contrast between the butterfly and the tornado. The gentle has power over the torrential.
Your poem could be construed many ways. I love that in poetry. I must ask, is this child perceptive enough to be waiting on something to save her from bad things in life. I know that I thought about that as a child. I was fearful of many things and worried about what life would bring. That is perceptive on your part to bring such a child into this poem. We all need a savior.
I love all your images. This is a well-written piece.
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What a powerful poem. That is the first word that comes to mind and I don't mean powerful in terms of the tornado. Your poem moved my soul kind of powerful. I adore the contrast between the butterfly and the tornado. The gentle has power over the torrential.
Your poem could be construed many ways. I love that in poetry. I must ask, is this child perceptive enough to be waiting on something to save her from bad things in life. I know that I thought about that as a child. I was fearful of many things and worried about what life would bring. That is perceptive on your part to bring such a child into this poem. We all need a savior.
I love all your images. This is a well-written piece.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2018
Comment from AnnieDawn
This is well written and the picture enhances it. I enjoyed the emotion that you incorporated into this piece. Well done and good job. I wish you luck in the contest. Have a good day.
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This is well written and the picture enhances it. I enjoyed the emotion that you incorporated into this piece. Well done and good job. I wish you luck in the contest. Have a good day.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from Kathleen S.
Beautiful. Perceptive. Wise... Going through a lot through growth, and realizing there is still much to learn even in old age. Your poem takes all those things I mentioned and encompasses them well. I love the graphic picture that goes with it. K.
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Beautiful. Perceptive. Wise... Going through a lot through growth, and realizing there is still much to learn even in old age. Your poem takes all those things I mentioned and encompasses them well. I love the graphic picture that goes with it. K.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how transformation brings in growth and prosperity, everything in the beginning is in a child form, problems, dangers, hurdles on way make everything grown completely; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks how transformation brings in growth and prosperity, everything in the beginning is in a child form, problems, dangers, hurdles on way make everything grown completely; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
There was a terrible tornado 30 miles from here a couple of weeks ago. It pretty much destroyed the downtown as well as a meat-packing plant and many homes. This is well written, my friend. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
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There was a terrible tornado 30 miles from here a couple of weeks ago. It pretty much destroyed the downtown as well as a meat-packing plant and many homes. This is well written, my friend. Best wishes in the contest~Debbie
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from kahpot
This is absolutely wonderful before I continue praising this work I must ask ( I am Australian) To me where you have used the word fowl means chicken, hen or rooster, I thought it should have been spelled "foul", I loved this poem meaning and message it is very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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This is absolutely wonderful before I continue praising this work I must ask ( I am Australian) To me where you have used the word fowl means chicken, hen or rooster, I thought it should have been spelled "foul", I loved this poem meaning and message it is very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
Ok, first off I LOVE the image. I collect butterflies and dragonflies. This one is gorgeous. On to the review ;-)
Tornadoes are fearless and wicked. You've penned a powerful poem here full of imagery and fierceness. Giving in to mother nature's rage was not part of the plan. I see you are a survivor just by what you've written here within the walls of this stellar write. I found no errors. Like emerging from the cocoon to find a world ravaged and beaten, the spirit finds an inner strength and will to put the demon down hard on paper- or should I say screen? One takes control and might even win a contest to boot. Philosophically, of course. I enjoyed this well written piece. Good luck in the contest. You've got a good contender here. Janelle
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Ok, first off I LOVE the image. I collect butterflies and dragonflies. This one is gorgeous. On to the review ;-)
Tornadoes are fearless and wicked. You've penned a powerful poem here full of imagery and fierceness. Giving in to mother nature's rage was not part of the plan. I see you are a survivor just by what you've written here within the walls of this stellar write. I found no errors. Like emerging from the cocoon to find a world ravaged and beaten, the spirit finds an inner strength and will to put the demon down hard on paper- or should I say screen? One takes control and might even win a contest to boot. Philosophically, of course. I enjoyed this well written piece. Good luck in the contest. You've got a good contender here. Janelle
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Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from meeshu
that is a wonderful thought, "more delicate than the wind, yet its master". excellent. I tend to reference a feather on a raging river--it is no match but stays afloat. this is extraordinary for its change in form AND tenor.. 6six6..
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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that is a wonderful thought, "more delicate than the wind, yet its master". excellent. I tend to reference a feather on a raging river--it is no match but stays afloat. this is extraordinary for its change in form AND tenor.. 6six6..
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Oh, wow. This is a review that will keep me smiling all week. Thanks a million! :))
