Preserve Our Future
A Vers Beaucoup Potlatch Challenge11 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, June,
Thank you for sharing this lovely Vers Beaucoup with the great picture of the white tiger. Whenever I think of all the animals that we will no longer be able to see due to the stupidity of man, I shudder. How long until we cause our own extinction?
Great poem, and a wonderful example of the poetic form,
~patty~
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Hi, June,
Thank you for sharing this lovely Vers Beaucoup with the great picture of the white tiger. Whenever I think of all the animals that we will no longer be able to see due to the stupidity of man, I shudder. How long until we cause our own extinction?
Great poem, and a wonderful example of the poetic form,
~patty~
Comment Written 14-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Patty. It was a real challenge for me to try out the vers beaucoup. But the picture did inspire the words. Appreciate your positive feedback.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles June Sargent
I love you poem using The Vers Beaucoup format telling us Let's conserve and preserve. Cats deserve a reserve. To be fair, we must care
when they're rare. Stop and think - in a blink
they're extinct
Love the picture of the white tiger, which are rare to see,
Gert
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Smiles June Sargent
I love you poem using The Vers Beaucoup format telling us Let's conserve and preserve. Cats deserve a reserve. To be fair, we must care
when they're rare. Stop and think - in a blink
they're extinct
Love the picture of the white tiger, which are rare to see,
Gert
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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I had never even heard of the vers beaucoup format before, but decided to give it a try. Appreciate very much your encouraging comments!
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You are welcome June Sargent
So nice meeting you here on Fanstory.
Gert
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows your love of nature and the horrible side of hunting. This shows how greed can cause the extinction of a breed of animals.
Good entry for the potlatch club.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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This shows your love of nature and the horrible side of hunting. This shows how greed can cause the extinction of a breed of animals.
Good entry for the potlatch club.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review my vers beaucoup!
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Any time.
Joan
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your interpretation of the Vers Beaucoup form as a call to save endangered creatures. The echoing sounds of the rhyme scheme adds to the intensity of the message. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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I admired your interpretation of the Vers Beaucoup form as a call to save endangered creatures. The echoing sounds of the rhyme scheme adds to the intensity of the message. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Appreciate your insightful review and positive thoughts.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such magnificent animals should be saved and preserved and not hunted to extinction, we should protect our wildlife and your poem is a great tribute June, enjoyed every word, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Such magnificent animals should be saved and preserved and not hunted to extinction, we should protect our wildlife and your poem is a great tribute June, enjoyed every word, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your supportive and encouraging review.
Comment from simonbagh
Let's conserve and preserve. Cats deserve
a reserve. To be fair, we must care
when they're rare. Stop and think - in a blink
they're extinct. Keep our eyes on the prize.
A humanitarian emotion Awakening so nicely written a poem and full of amazing words used in it which made me to enjoy reading and reviewing it thank you very much for sharing such a nice piece
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Let's conserve and preserve. Cats deserve
a reserve. To be fair, we must care
when they're rare. Stop and think - in a blink
they're extinct. Keep our eyes on the prize.
A humanitarian emotion Awakening so nicely written a poem and full of amazing words used in it which made me to enjoy reading and reviewing it thank you very much for sharing such a nice piece
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your supportive and encouraging review.
Comment from Lady Jane
You've done so well with this format, june. It is flawless and an easy read. You'd think with so much conformity it might read choppy or disjointed, yours did not. It's message is clear, preserve the rare, protect them. The structure was well penned, the chosen rhyme is smooth and solid, the presentation was fun and engaging. I love the message. Well done, June. Thanks for introducing me to a new format. I've penned many a unique styles, this one, will now be on my poetic 'bucket list'
Janelle
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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You've done so well with this format, june. It is flawless and an easy read. You'd think with so much conformity it might read choppy or disjointed, yours did not. It's message is clear, preserve the rare, protect them. The structure was well penned, the chosen rhyme is smooth and solid, the presentation was fun and engaging. I love the message. Well done, June. Thanks for introducing me to a new format. I've penned many a unique styles, this one, will now be on my poetic 'bucket list'
Janelle
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Appreciate very much your insightful and encouraging review!
Comment from damommy
You did a good job with this. Great choice of rhyming words.
Great stanza. It fits so smoothly. I told you it was easier than it looks. 8-)
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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You did a good job with this. Great choice of rhyming words.
Great stanza. It fits so smoothly. I told you it was easier than it looks. 8-)
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Ok. Let?s see if I can revise and lengthen it. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
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Just revised it. Hopefully this is an authentic vers beaucoup now!
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I see that, and it fits perfectly. Great job!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great potlatch challenge poem, June. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture sets a great tone of what's to come. You did well with the complicated rhyme scheme. Your poem sound great read aloud. It is awful what is happening to those magnificent animals by poachers. Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This is a great potlatch challenge poem, June. I enjoyed reading it. Your picture sets a great tone of what's to come. You did well with the complicated rhyme scheme. Your poem sound great read aloud. It is awful what is happening to those magnificent animals by poachers. Thanks for sharing & caring. Jan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Appreciate very much your sharing your insights.
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent representative poem of a verse form with which I'm not familiar. The rhyme pattern is excellent. Your vision is perfectly clear because you state it very well with words that are easily comprehended. The rhino's horn, the elephant's tusk and the tiger's pelt look better on the animal than on a floor or wall in some dark clandestine game room. Well done.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This is an excellent representative poem of a verse form with which I'm not familiar. The rhyme pattern is excellent. Your vision is perfectly clear because you state it very well with words that are easily comprehended. The rhino's horn, the elephant's tusk and the tiger's pelt look better on the animal than on a floor or wall in some dark clandestine game room. Well done.
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Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your positive and insightful feedback.
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You are welcome.
