Be Wee With Bea
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Caring About Others"An allegory in the Winnie the Pooh genre
10 total reviews
Comment from trailblazer101
I have a 'raccoon cat. Well, actually a Maine Coon breed and I thought your write described her in some ways.
I didn't feel this was as well thought out for a novel but maybe that's what you weren't aiming at. However, it did cover what goes on in the animal world so I gave it a five anyway.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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I have a 'raccoon cat. Well, actually a Maine Coon breed and I thought your write described her in some ways.
I didn't feel this was as well thought out for a novel but maybe that's what you weren't aiming at. However, it did cover what goes on in the animal world so I gave it a five anyway.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your considerate review. If you read the previous chapters, this will feel more connected. This actually is quite autobiographic with Bea representing me in this allegory. My Maine Coon of 18 years passed about 13 years ago. I still miss him every day. I'm glad you could relate.
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I can relate. Mine is 8. Yes I know when one breaks into the middle of something they are truly limited in their ability to see the whole picture, As an author of ten novels and/or how-to books I can well relate. Al the best with your effort. Will stop by again if I can.
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I can relate. Mine is 8. Yes I know when one breaks into the middle of something they are truly limited in their ability to see the whole picture, As an author of ten novels and/or how-to books I can well relate. Al the best with your effort. Will stop by again if I can.
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I can relate. Mine is 8. Yes I know when one breaks into the middle of something they are truly limited in their ability to see the whole picture, As an author of ten novels and/or how-to books I can well relate. Al the best with your effort. Will stop by again if I can.
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I can relate. Mine is 8. Yes I know when one breaks into the middle of something they are truly limited in their ability to see the whole picture, As an author of ten novels and/or how-to books I can well relate. Al the best with your effort. Will stop by again if I can.
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I know all about needing to read previous chapters. I often get hit with -- you never told us who the people are or where they come from ....
Major smiles
Comment from heart of Lou
You have written an interesting story about a cat's life, and his fears. Funny how cats might have the same fears as people. Who wouldn't be scared of a bully with sharp teeth?
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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You have written an interesting story about a cat's life, and his fears. Funny how cats might have the same fears as people. Who wouldn't be scared of a bully with sharp teeth?
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your amusing review. It gets worse for him in the next chapter. Soon to come.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Scruffy finally dared to tell Bea that he would much rather have fish than honey or some old hard piece of pizza crust like he was forced to eat in his last home. He began to look a lot better too. And as time went on he began to feel a lot better about himself. During one of her BRAIN exercises, Bea thought about how the name Scruffy made her feel. It reminded her of that scruffy, scrawny cat she had met on one of her rigorous STROLLING exercises. He was nowhere to be found. In his place was a handsome racoon cat who had the most beautiful fur and a flowing tail which looked like the mane of some of her horse friends. It was time for him to change his name. She thought of a name that would be much more dignified -- Scruffles the Raccoon Cat. It was set; from now on, he would be known as Scruffles the Raccoon Cat. ' I had a beautiful Maine Coone cat just like this I named him Beauty as I was only 12 but he certainly was a beauty loved this story so sweet and touching great write well done Meia xx
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Scruffy finally dared to tell Bea that he would much rather have fish than honey or some old hard piece of pizza crust like he was forced to eat in his last home. He began to look a lot better too. And as time went on he began to feel a lot better about himself. During one of her BRAIN exercises, Bea thought about how the name Scruffy made her feel. It reminded her of that scruffy, scrawny cat she had met on one of her rigorous STROLLING exercises. He was nowhere to be found. In his place was a handsome racoon cat who had the most beautiful fur and a flowing tail which looked like the mane of some of her horse friends. It was time for him to change his name. She thought of a name that would be much more dignified -- Scruffles the Raccoon Cat. It was set; from now on, he would be known as Scruffles the Raccoon Cat. ' I had a beautiful Maine Coone cat just like this I named him Beauty as I was only 12 but he certainly was a beauty loved this story so sweet and touching great write well done Meia xx
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much for your engaging review. I was a little teary when I found the accompanying picture. It looks so much like him. He has been at the Rainbow Bridge for about 13 years. He was 18 years old. There is something special about Maine Coons. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. He really tangles with the neighboring feral cats in the next Chapter.
Comment from Nanny 6
Poor Scruffles has PTSD... and those two bad cats that wanted to fight him... the poor cat still needs some tender loving care... another great chapter in your story.
Judy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Poor Scruffles has PTSD... and those two bad cats that wanted to fight him... the poor cat still needs some tender loving care... another great chapter in your story.
Judy
Comment Written 12-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your great review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. The bad cats are featured in the next chapter.
Comment from robyn corum
Liz,
In the Bible, chosen, important people are often given new names when they become workers for God -- and/or they are given new jobs to perform.
I think it's totally appropriate that, as Scruffy reaches a new stage in his life, that he should get a new name to announce that. What better way to start fresh?
So, it's very sad, then, that he has so much bleeding over from his past.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Liz,
In the Bible, chosen, important people are often given new names when they become workers for God -- and/or they are given new jobs to perform.
I think it's totally appropriate that, as Scruffy reaches a new stage in his life, that he should get a new name to announce that. What better way to start fresh?
So, it's very sad, then, that he has so much bleeding over from his past.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your extended thinking in your review. I have heard that about name changes. I worked with abused women for 30+ years and saw this very joyous event with so many of them. As if he didn't have enough from his past, wait til you read the next chapter. Bea really has to work hard.
Comment from Lady Jane
from bees' hives, bears are good at catching fish. - consider revising to this -
from beehives, bears are also good at catching fish
He began to look a lot better(,) too. - comma needed
scrawny cat she (had) met on one of her rigorous STROLLING exercises. - you can remove the word 'had' as the sentence can stand alone with it :)
She thought of a name that would be much more dignified -- Scruffles(,) the Raccoon Cat.
...he would be known as Scruffles(,) the Raccoon Cat. - in these two examples I think a comma would useful for both
His bad memories had come back ever since the two meanest cats you could ever meet began showing up. - consider revising to:
The bad memories kept following him ever since two of the areas meanest cats started coming around - or something similar :)
Scruffles had put on some weight by now(,) but he still weighed only twelve pounds
I took the liberty of making some revision suggestions. This is a very interesting addition to your book. I enjoyed it thoroughly. I love the shift to Scruffles, the Raccoon Cat. That does have a nice ring to it, doesn't it. Let me know if you choose to revise and I will most definitely come back and upgrade this piece :) Keep writing. It suits you :)
Janelle
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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from bees' hives, bears are good at catching fish. - consider revising to this -
from beehives, bears are also good at catching fish
He began to look a lot better(,) too. - comma needed
scrawny cat she (had) met on one of her rigorous STROLLING exercises. - you can remove the word 'had' as the sentence can stand alone with it :)
She thought of a name that would be much more dignified -- Scruffles(,) the Raccoon Cat.
...he would be known as Scruffles(,) the Raccoon Cat. - in these two examples I think a comma would useful for both
His bad memories had come back ever since the two meanest cats you could ever meet began showing up. - consider revising to:
The bad memories kept following him ever since two of the areas meanest cats started coming around - or something similar :)
Scruffles had put on some weight by now(,) but he still weighed only twelve pounds
I took the liberty of making some revision suggestions. This is a very interesting addition to your book. I enjoyed it thoroughly. I love the shift to Scruffles, the Raccoon Cat. That does have a nice ring to it, doesn't it. Let me know if you choose to revise and I will most definitely come back and upgrade this piece :) Keep writing. It suits you :)
Janelle
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your detailed review. I will look at the possibilities and let you know. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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I have taken your revisions into consideration if you would like to check it out. Grammarly lists the comma problem constantly. I remember teachers correcting me for too many commas. I'm over correcting now. I also broke up the paragraphs a bit. Thank you for your guidance.
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You bet. I?ve upgraded the stars ;-)
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thank you for your consideration, much appreciated
Comment from kiwijenny
This is so cute. The caring of one animal for another is something kids can really relate to.
Good job. I love the name change...I had a raccoon tailed cat called Silver. I loved him so much.
This love for each other is perfect
God bless
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This is so cute. The caring of one animal for another is something kids can really relate to.
Good job. I love the name change...I had a raccoon tailed cat called Silver. I loved him so much.
This love for each other is perfect
God bless
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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You got the point the name. One of the reviewers said they'd never hear of a raccoon cat. That must mean they'd also never experienced the joy of one. I was a little teary when I saw this picture I chose. It looks a lot like my babykitty Scruffles who passed at around 18 years old. Thank you for your enjoyable review.
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My cat died at 18 too. It's a long time to love isn't it
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It certainly is. He's been at the Rainbow Bridge waiting for about 14 years. I still talk to him. We saved each other.
Comment from Beck Fenton
As usual, your story of Bea and her friends teaches us to stop and use our brains to figure out a logical solution. I liked the change from Scruffy to Scruffles... a name means a lot in one's persona.
I like your stories, Liz.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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As usual, your story of Bea and her friends teaches us to stop and use our brains to figure out a logical solution. I liked the change from Scruffy to Scruffles... a name means a lot in one's persona.
I like your stories, Liz.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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As usual, your review is so uplifting. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun little read about some nature friends...Great imagination of the interactions and thoughts! :) Just a thought, you might consider breaking it up into smaller paragraphs to help the reader transition with different pouts you are trying to emphasize...otherwise, it just seems to be one long thought without highlights. :) I truly enjoyed Scruffles and look forward to more of his enlightenment! :)
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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A fun little read about some nature friends...Great imagination of the interactions and thoughts! :) Just a thought, you might consider breaking it up into smaller paragraphs to help the reader transition with different pouts you are trying to emphasize...otherwise, it just seems to be one long thought without highlights. :) I truly enjoyed Scruffles and look forward to more of his enlightenment! :)
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your detailed review. I hadn't thought of smaller paragraphs. I will take a look at the possibilities. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from tfawcus
An engaging story that uses the personification of animals to good effect in suggesting their individual characters and the story details are sufficiently true to what might imagine life in the wild to be, that they catch the reader up in the tale.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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An engaging story that uses the personification of animals to good effect in suggesting their individual characters and the story details are sufficiently true to what might imagine life in the wild to be, that they catch the reader up in the tale.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thank you for your uplifting review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
