Two in Tents
Free verse: on Intensity3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Wow, very very powerful. I love the phrase: "and mind gritty" People's minds are gritty and when mixed with the kool-ade it becomes concrete, stuck. O do my best to exercise it every day and to stay alert to changes. The imagery here is great. I would hope the reader would take this message into their hearts and see things as they are happening. You have very powerful metaphors. The two tents represent the microcosm of the macrocosm of the disjointed country and world we live in. Thank you. I would love to copy and paste this onto my fb page for my friends to appreciate.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Wow, very very powerful. I love the phrase: "and mind gritty" People's minds are gritty and when mixed with the kool-ade it becomes concrete, stuck. O do my best to exercise it every day and to stay alert to changes. The imagery here is great. I would hope the reader would take this message into their hearts and see things as they are happening. You have very powerful metaphors. The two tents represent the microcosm of the macrocosm of the disjointed country and world we live in. Thank you. I would love to copy and paste this onto my fb page for my friends to appreciate.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much, I really appreciate your perspecive. Love the micro-macro, you really notice a lot of specific details, and this helps me understand my writing even more pointing out things that I didn't even realize we're there. I must be doing it subconsciously.
I recently wrote a poem about our dividedness, it is called " Duly Deeply Dually Divided "
Thanks again, I really appreciate your comments and friendship here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh wow...is this true? Because I can see my husband and myself doing this. Tiny houses. This is full of angst about the times, and this situation. Good job!
Blessings....
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Oh wow...is this true? Because I can see my husband and myself doing this. Tiny houses. This is full of angst about the times, and this situation. Good job!
Blessings....
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I have to admit Irish rain, it's such a blessing to get a review from you. I would like to share with you that I have a very dear family member on this site, Irish author me, and I really appreciate your review and your stars. As an explanation, no it's not true it came out of my mind. I live in a nice house but thank you for asking, The Angst is evident. I really appreciate your comments you review sincerely,
Brother Badger,
Darren
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You're most welcome...I'm glad it's not true for you!!
Comment from lyenochka
Great word play in this one, Darren. I saw the pun in "too intense" and "two in tents. " Throughout the poem you have great internal rhymes while telling the story of misplaced priorities causing a couple to live in a sad way.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Great word play in this one, Darren. I saw the pun in "too intense" and "two in tents. " Throughout the poem you have great internal rhymes while telling the story of misplaced priorities causing a couple to live in a sad way.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Hello and thanks for the wonderful review on this contemporary writing about the sign of the times
I really appreciate your comments , your friendship here means a great deal to me. You have been very consistent, and I appreciate your views and comments.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Darren
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You're welcome, Darren! So glad to see your post! Bless you!
