Comment from Anne B Francis

Excellent

Tragic as the violent storms of water waiting for the calm - oh for silence, peace normal life that we think belongs to others and not us, how wrong can we be when behind all doors lies cruelty, rows and shame. very well written

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018

Thank you for taking the time to read and review this poem. I appreciate the encouraging word and high rating.

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Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Joan. I guess this post was hiding in my messages. Sorry I got to it so late. We all want peace and I at least also want quiet. But did not when younger. Thank you for sharing

Was just wondering if you meant again rather than gain here

"For peace and to sink
No more in the crumbs
Of violence and serenity gain. "

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2018

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Pam. I'll have to check out that line.

Joan

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Exceptional

I really like this irregular ode, Joan. Too bad you didn't get this written in time for the Use These Words contest. I think you would have won.

I especially love "while chaos becomes the cement of our lives" ... brilliant and so very true.

Great job on this Potlatch challenge. I enjoyed reading it!

Connie

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2018

Glad you think so highly of it. I appreciate your time and comments.

Joan

Comment from Alexander E Poet

Excellent

I like this poem it's about today;s world situation with a touch of now is the time, with a feeling of urgency keep writing . love these lines....

None of us are strangers
To seeing innocents drink
Fear and pain
While chaos becomes
The cement of our lives.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Glad you liked it , Alex. Thanks for the positive words and all the stars.

Joan

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Hey Joan this is most interesting. I must admit seeing the words drink and cement side by side created a dissonance within me.

I'm not sure what an irregular ode is, so I'm going to trust you and say this thrust of images creates quite a collage of sensations.

Well done my friend.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thanks for your encouraging comments, Gloria.

Joan

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

I'm not sure I understand the form, but I am intrigued by it. yours is a very powerful write and yet it is vague at the same time.. fascinating, Dragon.........meeshu

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018

Thank you, meesha, for you positive review and high rating.

Joan