The Dance on the Wall
reverse nonet8 total reviews
Comment from bard owl
Excellent content in this nonet. Wish all of mankind found truth to be without bluster. Your nonet's layout is very impressive, representing the glowing candle. Best of luck in the contest with this nonet. Blessings to you, Linda
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Excellent content in this nonet. Wish all of mankind found truth to be without bluster. Your nonet's layout is very impressive, representing the glowing candle. Best of luck in the contest with this nonet. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 13-Aug-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I so love the last line and it is so true! The truth speaks without any shouting or ceremony, it is bare, stark and real, love these words, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I so love the last line and it is so true! The truth speaks without any shouting or ceremony, it is bare, stark and real, love these words, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed and understood. Big smiles. Love, anon :))
Comment from Gloria ....
Author another fine reverse nonet. And such meaning you've managed to convey in this form that while appearing quite simple on the surface is in fact a challenge.
Excellent imagery and a perfect shape too.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Author another fine reverse nonet. And such meaning you've managed to convey in this form that while appearing quite simple on the surface is in fact a challenge.
Excellent imagery and a perfect shape too.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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So pleased you enjoyed and understood, Gloria. I'll cross my fingers. :))
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good so you
don't lose your 'poetic license'!
-Good form and poem.
-Effective imagery that creates
a good word picture of the candle,
darkness, and storm.
-The last line is very good, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good so you
don't lose your 'poetic license'!
-Good form and poem.
-Effective imagery that creates
a good word picture of the candle,
darkness, and storm.
-The last line is very good, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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My license is intact, thanks to some critical intervention. LOL Thanks so much. Pleased you enjoyed. :))
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You are very welcome and thanks for sharing!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I liked this poem quite a lot. I don't write many nonets, but I really appreciate those who do them well. *smile*
I have a couple of questions:
1.) without our shadows we are left in darkness
--> didn't really understand that
2.) lightning flashes, we're blinded hearing thunder's faked bravado
--> I don't think thunder is faked in any way. *smile* Maybe a different adjective here?
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I liked this poem quite a lot. I don't write many nonets, but I really appreciate those who do them well. *smile*
I have a couple of questions:
1.) without our shadows we are left in darkness
--> didn't really understand that
2.) lightning flashes, we're blinded hearing thunder's faked bravado
--> I don't think thunder is faked in any way. *smile* Maybe a different adjective here?
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018
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There are no shadows without light, thus darkness. It isn't the thunder being faked, it's the bravado. Although it's the thunder that disturbs and scares, it's the lightning that does the damage. Anyway, that's the idea. Hope that helps. Thanks for reading. :))
Comment from MoonWillow
Anon, you have a beautiful nonet here that needs some work. First of all, you have 10 lines, there should only be 9. Second, you have 2 lines with 7 syllables each, and 2 lines with 9 syllables ... the last 2 lines. There are 3 syllables in boisterous. I didn't give a lower rating because I think you can fix it. Good luck in the contest. :))shawn
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018
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Anon, you have a beautiful nonet here that needs some work. First of all, you have 10 lines, there should only be 9. Second, you have 2 lines with 7 syllables each, and 2 lines with 9 syllables ... the last 2 lines. There are 3 syllables in boisterous. I didn't give a lower rating because I think you can fix it. Good luck in the contest. :))shawn
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2018
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Wow. I can't even believe I wrote and posted it like that. Jeesh. I guess I was swept up in the content or something. I don't think I've ever posted a 10 line nonet before. LOL You are so kind to give me a break and it turns our, it is what I would do as well. I'm so grateful you caught all these inexplicable errors before I got drummed out of poetry!!!!!! Thanks a million. I THINK I fixed it now. I doubt I'll ever be sure of anything again. :)) Anon (and will probably remain so!)
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I thought maybe you were inventing a new style Nonet, LOL. Looks great now!
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Ahh ... uh, yeah. THAT'S what I was doing ... a new style nonet, that's the ticket. LOL!
Comment from heart of Lou
This is very good indeed. I haven't tried my hand at this type of poem, and I think it must be difficult to get the syllables all correct. You did a great Job!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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This is very good indeed. I haven't tried my hand at this type of poem, and I think it must be difficult to get the syllables all correct. You did a great Job!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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It's a bit like a puzzle, Lou. Just get the basic thing you want to say down on paper, then start playing with the words ... replace them here and there with synonyms or rephrase a little and before you know it, the shape takes form. It CAN be a pain sometimes though. Then, other times it's easy. Give it a go. Love that name, "heart of Lou". Most cool. :))
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I just tried it, and I'm entering it!
Comment from estory
I loved this. It was imaginative in construction and well crafted; I liked how it unfolded in gradually lengthening syllable counts, enveloping the reader. The images were also strong. You get this ambiguous sense of an abstract, shadowy, surreal surrounding, very dreamlike, in which the self wavers between self awareness and the sharp reality of the world around it. Without the candle light of the self, we have no reference points; in the lightning bolt of reality, we are stunned, frozen. only the truth, is soft and kind. A really nicely crafted poem with a good skeleton and depth. estory
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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I loved this. It was imaginative in construction and well crafted; I liked how it unfolded in gradually lengthening syllable counts, enveloping the reader. The images were also strong. You get this ambiguous sense of an abstract, shadowy, surreal surrounding, very dreamlike, in which the self wavers between self awareness and the sharp reality of the world around it. Without the candle light of the self, we have no reference points; in the lightning bolt of reality, we are stunned, frozen. only the truth, is soft and kind. A really nicely crafted poem with a good skeleton and depth. estory
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2018
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Wow. What a stunning and humbling review. After reading this, I could care less about the contest. Thanks so much, you made my week! :))
