Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, whoever you are. This is the second time today I read a poem about unrequited love involving a mermaid. I liked this poem a lot, and good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018

Thanks much for your read and your comments.

Comment from Henry King

Excellent

This is an excellent near rhyming fantasy poem for the writing prompt contest. The contest rules have been met. Mermaids have been a favored fantasy since man has sailed beyond the horizon. Today, probably due to the amount of Irish heritage in the Americas, Australia and New Zealand, selkies are popular denizens of our supernatural world. Our hero beguiled, not by the siren's song, but an elixir presented in a gold goblet. Where's the jealous mermen when needed? Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018

Thank you so much for your inspiring comments. I like the idea of merman battling to keep her from the invasion of an outsider, similar to the town and grown conflicts of university locations.

reply by Henry King on 09-Aug-2018

You are very welcome.

Comment from fm wright

Excellent

I really liked the poem. Fantasy is one of my favorite genres. I do think it ran together a bit as I would have put in commas at the end of natural sentences. Other than that it was a wonderful read.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018

Thanks much for your read and your comments. I thought about commas, then reconsidered and just let the line breaks suffice.

Comment from Hayley Zemontas

Excellent

A great way to incorporate the prompt words by taking us on an underwater journey into a fantasy world full of adventure and love. I like the use of rhyme and the colours you used that merge with the underwater theme. Great poem. Good luck for the contest x

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018

Thanks much for your read and your comments. Much appreciated.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A fantasy write filled with mystic ocean colour and magical adventures, I wish you luck with the contest, your words are in a dreamy wonderland, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018

Thanks much for the read and review.

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

You create a world of water that is both original and entirely familiar. There is something very personal in this piece of writing which allows the reader to fully go on the journey with you.

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018

Thank you so much for your review and your encouraging words.