New York...New York...
It's a Hell of a Town!56 total reviews
Comment from Urial
Hiya Artasylum,
Great form in the enjambment you used which we don't see used a lot of times, but like mostly remembered used in the poem "Trees" by Joyce Kilmer. The picture and the words you used remind me of my old home - where I lived for 28 years. You did a magical way the traffic and the trains sound underground and steam. A radiant New York piece of work here.
Peace be with you,
Urial
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Hiya Artasylum,
Great form in the enjambment you used which we don't see used a lot of times, but like mostly remembered used in the poem "Trees" by Joyce Kilmer. The picture and the words you used remind me of my old home - where I lived for 28 years. You did a magical way the traffic and the trains sound underground and steam. A radiant New York piece of work here.
Peace be with you,
Urial
Comment Written 09-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Hey Urial... Thanks so much for the stellar/plus-one review...
I'm honored... This is such a beautiful poem... the imagery is what I strive for... Yours, diana
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree.
A tree whose hungry mouth is prest
Against the earth?s sweet flowing breast;
A tree that looks at God all day,
And lifts her leafy arms to pray;
A tree that may in Summer wear
A nest of robins in her hair;
Upon whose bosom snow has lain;
Who intimately lives with rain.
Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Diana. A few slant rhymes. But this is a good entry for the contest. I am glad you did not catch up to the purse snatcher. Too bad someone else did not help. But people fear he might have a gun or a knife. Two men got stabbed to death in a bus for coming to the defense of a woman being harassed. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
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Hi Diana. A few slant rhymes. But this is a good entry for the contest. I am glad you did not catch up to the purse snatcher. Too bad someone else did not help. But people fear he might have a gun or a knife. Two men got stabbed to death in a bus for coming to the defense of a woman being harassed. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 09-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thanks Pam!!!! Yours, diana
Comment from gramag4
What a great story! It activates all the senses and you can imagine being right there in the midst of it all!! Very well done!! Thanks for sharing. Excellent work!
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What a great story! It activates all the senses and you can imagine being right there in the midst of it all!! Very well done!! Thanks for sharing. Excellent work!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much gramag4... What a thoughtful review. yours, diana
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My pleasure!
Comment from heart of Lou
You really write a great picture of New York. I've never been there, but it sounds like a very busy place. Too bad you didn't catch the thief after making the effort to help someone.
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You really write a great picture of New York. I've never been there, but it sounds like a very busy place. Too bad you didn't catch the thief after making the effort to help someone.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
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It is a busy place... and crazy and overwhelming at time... thanks for the thoughtful review. yours, diana
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
My brother in law moved to New York to pursue his acting. He always has stories from the subway. We want to go visit him, we're just not sure when we'll make it down. I'm sure it's a city like no other.
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My brother in law moved to New York to pursue his acting. He always has stories from the subway. We want to go visit him, we're just not sure when we'll make it down. I'm sure it's a city like no other.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
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Hey ExperieningLiphe... It isn't for everyone... but can be sooooo much fun and a great adventure if you allow it to be. Thanks kiddo. yours, diana
Comment from Janet Foor
excellent rhyming poem for the contest. My step daughter lives in NYC and a friends 22-year-old daughter just moved there. My step daughter has lived there for 25 years and knows how to survive the cacophony of noise and all the other things of the city. I guess my friends daughter will learn or come home. Not my cup-a-tea.
Well done.
Blessing
janet
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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excellent rhyming poem for the contest. My step daughter lives in NYC and a friends 22-year-old daughter just moved there. My step daughter has lived there for 25 years and knows how to survive the cacophony of noise and all the other things of the city. I guess my friends daughter will learn or come home. Not my cup-a-tea.
Well done.
Blessing
janet
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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25 years Jmf4119... It isn't a lot of people's cup of teas here... It is an acquired taste... thanks so much yours, diana
Comment from royowen
I've been to New York, for extended holidays on four occasions, and it's my wife and my favourite, and we've been to a lot of the great cities in the world. Paris, London, Berlin, Rostock. Copenhagen,Dubai, Rome, Moscow, St.Persburgh, Singapore etc. (boy, am I a name dropper), it's a wonderful place. A great entry in this rhyming contest, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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I've been to New York, for extended holidays on four occasions, and it's my wife and my favourite, and we've been to a lot of the great cities in the world. Paris, London, Berlin, Rostock. Copenhagen,Dubai, Rome, Moscow, St.Persburgh, Singapore etc. (boy, am I a name dropper), it's a wonderful place. A great entry in this rhyming contest, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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This site seems to be afraid of cities... I love walking though a forest as much as the next guy, but, I love the Champs-Ellyese as well. New York, Paris, Bavaria's yummy... (my brother lived in Heidelberg for 8 years, we'd hop in his car and travel to parts all over Europe.) Barcelona, London, Firenza, Venice (the only place I've ever gone and felt like, who needs romance... I could fall in love with myself and did!) Vienna, London, Africa... I know ENOUGH, who cares. It was fun memory lane for me, Thanks.
Berlin, Rostock Copenhage, Dubai, Moscow, St. Petersburg, Singapore... Well, Well Well, my bucket list!!! Thanks for sharing!
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Istanbul, Venice, Athens, Greek Islands, Belgrade, Sarajevo, Prague, Kuala Lumpur, Phnom Penh, Sofia, Kiev, Sebastopol, Nizzinovgerod,(Home of the Babuschka dolls) Lucky brother, Bavaria is Beautiful, Oberammergau, Ludwig's Castles, There are so many places, I was feeling very nostalgically wistful, so many wonderful places, sigh. (I love God's world)I haven't been to Africa or South America yet. So many places, I started thinking of others. Wherever one goes, people are wonderful, not so different. Roy
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I agree the People... The People... It is truly an exquisite world... I've been blessed to have seen and experienced the world and need to experience more! Dublin... The beauty of the countries... Because of the way I've traveled It was petty comprehensive we drove through countries... from London... Cluffs of Dover to Cologne through France... Belgium... Holland...Switzerland... on and on... Wow your experiences have brought such a broad spectrum of life and each experience sounds just! My sister and I are talking about South America next year maybe Peru... She's been and it sounds fun... better yet it sounds like a way to enrich my life even further. Great memories... again thanks.
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Yes, it's helped mould my life, and bias. People are always kind, particularly the poor.
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Amen and Hallelujah!
Comment from cajunjoe
Hello Artasylum: wow, cacophony, haven't hear that word in a long, long time. This should be a very good entry for the rhyming poetry contest. Your poem brings to life the squeaky, rattling sounds of the city and how noisy a city can be, your apartment must be soundproof if you're going to get some shuteye. You are correct, no wonder the city never sleeps. Very well done. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Hello Artasylum: wow, cacophony, haven't hear that word in a long, long time. This should be a very good entry for the rhyming poetry contest. Your poem brings to life the squeaky, rattling sounds of the city and how noisy a city can be, your apartment must be soundproof if you're going to get some shuteye. You are correct, no wonder the city never sleeps. Very well done. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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I know cacophony... Thanks for your thoughtful review. yours, diana
Comment from Gloria ....
I love your terrific poem and the cacophony of sounds and actions in New York. I've been there a few times, but it's beyond my level of desired sound and actions now. Still a terrific place though.
One typo I think
A driver jestures (gestures)
Terrific poem and it's like being there.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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I love your terrific poem and the cacophony of sounds and actions in New York. I've been there a few times, but it's beyond my level of desired sound and actions now. Still a terrific place though.
One typo I think
A driver jestures (gestures)
Terrific poem and it's like being there.
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you, Thank you... I know that and yet... go figure. yours, diana
Comment from Air Spirit
A very vivid and descriptive poem, that I believe catches the energy and chaotic noise and movement within this city New York, that never sleeps... so much going on all at once -- movement everywhere... everything is up, active and reactive... I think you have captured the essence of New York very well "...Dancing thru Times Square a cacophony of Taxis honking here..." and "...
The city's first beat, a trash truck's shrill, squeaking brakes;
quickly followed by the rigs', noisy, crashing take..." It is a city that has so much activity, fervor, intensity, colors, noises, motion and locomotion... it doesn't stay still... like a moving target... this city, is the antithesis of the life I want... but it was a city that is unlike any other, and has a definite appeal... Great poem that speaks in the tongue of a city that is never silent..
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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A very vivid and descriptive poem, that I believe catches the energy and chaotic noise and movement within this city New York, that never sleeps... so much going on all at once -- movement everywhere... everything is up, active and reactive... I think you have captured the essence of New York very well "...Dancing thru Times Square a cacophony of Taxis honking here..." and "...
The city's first beat, a trash truck's shrill, squeaking brakes;
quickly followed by the rigs', noisy, crashing take..." It is a city that has so much activity, fervor, intensity, colors, noises, motion and locomotion... it doesn't stay still... like a moving target... this city, is the antithesis of the life I want... but it was a city that is unlike any other, and has a definite appeal... Great poem that speaks in the tongue of a city that is never silent..
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Your reviews are always fun, entertaining and a joy to read... I see Air Spirit stopped by and it is so fun.
like a moving target... this city, is the antithesis of the life I want... Me Too...! Although LA is lively especially
West Hollywood... Love it too.
Great poem that speaks in the tongue of a city that is never silent.. You have an amazing voice kiddo.!!
