The Mayor's Commencement Address
Sometimes, ya gotta do whatcha gotta do7 total reviews
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
Very clever. We all contain the red and green voices - there are rarely shades in between unless you are a Buddhist or someone with slow reaction times. I race from green to red faster than Usain Bolt (but rarely with speed the other way).
A good entry, very crisp and most all dialogue which allows you to cover a lot of ground.
I wish you well in teh contest and with your further writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Hello Anon
Very clever. We all contain the red and green voices - there are rarely shades in between unless you are a Buddhist or someone with slow reaction times. I race from green to red faster than Usain Bolt (but rarely with speed the other way).
A good entry, very crisp and most all dialogue which allows you to cover a lot of ground.
I wish you well in teh contest and with your further writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Phil -- appreciate your taking time for the read! :) One of those quick writes for a contest that only had a few hours left, just needed a quick break from the real world work in which I had been wrapped up! :) :) Always fun to test one's ability to fit such a tight format, yes? :) :) Those stars are always most welcome! May you find a night-sky full of them while nature's chorus serenades you...all week and into the weekend!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, we certainly do need to listen to that voice of reason, Anonymous Author. Some of us more than others and far more often as well.
Poor Mayor.
At least your protagonist had mercy on him and gave him some water.
Good flash, well done.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Yes, we certainly do need to listen to that voice of reason, Anonymous Author. Some of us more than others and far more often as well.
Poor Mayor.
At least your protagonist had mercy on him and gave him some water.
Good flash, well done.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Dean (LOVE the sig pic, by the way -- especially since the blond actually has a somewhat reasonable opinion!!) -- appreciate your taking time for the read! :) One of those quick writes for a contest that only had a few hours left, just needed a quick break from the real world work in which I had been wrapped up! :) :) Always fun to test one's ability to fit such a tight format, yes? :) :) Those stars are always most welcome! May you find a night-sky full of them while nature's chorus serenades you...all week and into the weekend!! :) :) Yvette
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Yes, writing with a stringent deadline is always a great way to test one's mettle, Yvette.
Bravo--keep 'em comin'!
~Dean :)
Comment from LynnetteOK
Deciding which voice, or instinct, to follow can be quite difficult. I agree completely that we should all listen most intently to the 'green' one. Very well written.
Best of luck to you in the contest,
LynnetteOK
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Deciding which voice, or instinct, to follow can be quite difficult. I agree completely that we should all listen most intently to the 'green' one. Very well written.
Best of luck to you in the contest,
LynnetteOK
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Lynnette -- appreciate your taking time for the read! :) One of those quick writes for a contest that only had a few hours left, just needed a quick break from the real world work in which I had been wrapped up! :) :) Always fun to test one's ability to fit such a tight format, yes? :) :) Those stars are always most welcome! May you find a night-sky full of them while nature's chorus serenades you...all week and into the weekend!! :) :)
Comment from victor 66
A fifty word story is "a tough row to hoe". I think you made a solid effort here and I appreciate the humor that you instilled in this piece. I wish you luck in the contest and have a great week.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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A fifty word story is "a tough row to hoe". I think you made a solid effort here and I appreciate the humor that you instilled in this piece. I wish you luck in the contest and have a great week.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanx for your review, victor, and the time to read the piece -- much appreciated! Have a great week! :) :)
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You are most welcome. And have a great week yourself.
Comment from Hugh McDowell
This was a very interesting story that I really liked. Yeah, sometimes you gotta do what you gotta do. I worked for the mayor of Portland, Oregon for four years. Had a similar situation occur. My red voice screamed the loudest but in the end, my green did what was necessary. Excellent. Hugh
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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This was a very interesting story that I really liked. Yeah, sometimes you gotta do what you gotta do. I worked for the mayor of Portland, Oregon for four years. Had a similar situation occur. My red voice screamed the loudest but in the end, my green did what was necessary. Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanx for your review, Hugh, and the time to read the piece -- much appreciated! Guess you'd had enough of politics, eh? I certainly have no patience for the field....lol!!! Have a great week! :) :)
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent fifty word story and entry for the contest.
Very good feint with the green and red consciousnesses
leading one to expect something bad.
Good positive surprise ending and nice picture
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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This is an excellent fifty word story and entry for the contest.
Very good feint with the green and red consciousnesses
leading one to expect something bad.
Good positive surprise ending and nice picture
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thanx for your review, RS, and the time to read the piece -- much appreciated! Have a great week! :) :)
Comment from humpwhistle
Just an opinion, but I think this might read better if you used 'My internal red voice screamed' and 'The calm, green voice' as dialogue tags, as opposed to creating new paragraphs. Even so, I'm no sure I follow what's going on.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Just an opinion, but I think this might read better if you used 'My internal red voice screamed' and 'The calm, green voice' as dialogue tags, as opposed to creating new paragraphs. Even so, I'm no sure I follow what's going on.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much for your review, Lee. I went in and made a few alterations to address your notes here-- think they definitely help. This was just one of those spur-of-the-moment writes so, there's no spit and polish....just raw product! :) :) :)
Wanted to get it posted before the 'dinner rush/etc' began....thanx again!!! :)
