In Light End
A new style, free verse like rap4 total reviews
Comment from irishauthorme
No six-packs left! This deserves one!
Feel this is a synopsis of your life-struggle for self-identification, but also feel that your progress is evident. There is a great, tall ladder we all must climb that disappears up into the clouds. At certain altitudes the rungs are close together and the climbing is easy, sunlight and the sweet scent of flowers and the soft music ease our tired feet and laboring lungs.
further up there is darkness and the rungs are far apart. A cold wind chills our neck and fans our clothes. Our fingers are numb-it is hard to grip the rungs but we dare not look down.
Just when we stop in despair, tired, cold and hungry, there is a light up over us.
What is at the top of the ladder?
irish
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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No six-packs left! This deserves one!
Feel this is a synopsis of your life-struggle for self-identification, but also feel that your progress is evident. There is a great, tall ladder we all must climb that disappears up into the clouds. At certain altitudes the rungs are close together and the climbing is easy, sunlight and the sweet scent of flowers and the soft music ease our tired feet and laboring lungs.
further up there is darkness and the rungs are far apart. A cold wind chills our neck and fans our clothes. Our fingers are numb-it is hard to grip the rungs but we dare not look down.
Just when we stop in despair, tired, cold and hungry, there is a light up over us.
What is at the top of the ladder?
irish
Comment Written 06-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Great analogy of the ladder and it reminds me of the ladder that I talked about in raining blessings, your Insight input and review are very detailed and help me to comprehend what my writing means and how it appears to others. I really appreciate your comments on this and I was hoping that somebody caught the pun of in light and really means enlightened
Comment from Liz O'Neill
What a great picture you have chosen. As you may know, I love to read poetry aloud. For me that is the only way to read it. So of course I had to search for the right beat and pretty quickly found it. It is quite powerful with the right beat. I hope the reader will work to get at it got get the full effect. Good work.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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What a great picture you have chosen. As you may know, I love to read poetry aloud. For me that is the only way to read it. So of course I had to search for the right beat and pretty quickly found it. It is quite powerful with the right beat. I hope the reader will work to get at it got get the full effect. Good work.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thanks so much for your comment and thank you for talking about the right beat that makes me read it out loud and discover the right beat myself. You know Mickey Hart is the drummer for The Grateful Dead and he wrote a book about the universal beat or the cosmic beat how percussion is one of the things that all people have in common. Thanks again for your warm comments.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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I just saw what I wrote. It sounded like I was trying to beat box or skat, "work to get at it got get the full effect" what was that??? Percussion we have in common. The heart beat. Drumming helps the heart bear to balance out
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I did it again. You're going to think I just like writing to you. The beat of the heart or drum or the rhythm of the heartbeat of the earth.
Comment from MissMerri
I was fascinated by the musical arrangement of rhyming words in this free-flowing poem, but more than that, I was caught up in the story of life you were telling. I want to be completely free to see the trees and the forest.... I want to fly to the sky ... I should like to go to a pleasing plateau... you are describing me. Of course I would love this. Such creativity you display Darren. Great idea here. Good to see you posting even though you have been very busy.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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I was fascinated by the musical arrangement of rhyming words in this free-flowing poem, but more than that, I was caught up in the story of life you were telling. I want to be completely free to see the trees and the forest.... I want to fly to the sky ... I should like to go to a pleasing plateau... you are describing me. Of course I would love this. Such creativity you display Darren. Great idea here. Good to see you posting even though you have been very busy.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so much Miss Mary I think I was subconsciously thinking of you when I wrote this. This is kind of an experiment, the first one that I wrote was Metamorphoses the kind of free-flowing quatrains of a rhyming words than 50 gether in a strange way. When I wrote this it kind of the very end I said but wait there's more . . . .
I can't tell you how much I appreciate your input on this and how much it meant to you that means a lot to me love and miss you !
Darren
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks your wish, you know what you want to do, see, feel, watch, view, enjoy and get, you are not interested in all that around you, you like to go to a pleasing plateau; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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This speaks your wish, you know what you want to do, see, feel, watch, view, enjoy and get, you are not interested in all that around you, you like to go to a pleasing plateau; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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I honor and treasure your input on this and appreciate the warm comments and you're particularly personal perspective. Blessings, Darren
