Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a wonderful yet very sad poem outlining the pain one must go through when their beliefe has gone a very well written Haiku, with wonderful artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2018

Many thanks Kahpot

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a sad 575 poem, Jen. Your words paint a picture of despair. The actual picture is a good choice. Good job on the syllable count per line. Best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thank you so much Jan for your kind words

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem abourt the state of mind when it seems everyone are standing against us in so many ways that we feel the only thing we can do is to end our life.

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Many thanks Sandra.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

From the bridge, I stare down into the dark river. I jump ... no-one cares. ' This is so very sad and something I can strongly relate to...a wonderful entry for the competition well done love and kindest regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thank you Meia. I really value your kind words. X

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is a Haiku Poetry Contest Entree rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures were perfect.
Good luck with this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thank you so much Ricky.

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

wow this is way to sad and i hope know ones jump because they are worth something. they are precious

I sure enjoyed the effort and the work you put into this
it was a pleasure to read
I hope the best in the contest
donette1914 Aug 3, 2018

I love the artwork

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thank you so much Donette for your very kind words.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Oh dear! I think someone always cares, but we don't think they do. I guess it's important to let others know we love them. A very well written and powerful piece. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Many thanks, Marilyn for your great review.

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

I care Jen. I have been in this dilemma many times. To jump or not to jump. Ocean rock, building or cliff. I am bipolar and was allergic to the meds until they came out with new ones. I am fine now so not to worry. I suspect you have been there before as well. Nice entry for the contest. I have to say this is not a Haiku. It is a Senyru. Senryu is about the human comdition whereas Haiku centers on nature. Just FYI for future contests. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thanks Pam for your very kind words.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This haiku is spot on with the syllable count. It is a sad note to think that a person could jump from a bridge and no one would care. Patricia

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thanks a lot for your comments.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello jenintorre
I read your entry for the haiku contest it reads more like a senyru which is about human nature as where a haiku is about nature it self
Other wise what you wrote is excellent and I like it
Gert

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018

Thanks a lot for your comments.

reply by Gert sherwood on 04-Aug-2018

You are welcome jenintorre
Gert