Make This World Better
One of the suggestions that made the world better.9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This sixty-word paragraph, Make This World Better, contains the necessary words, but doesn't fit the challenge of containing everything within a single sentence. Happy day.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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This sixty-word paragraph, Make This World Better, contains the necessary words, but doesn't fit the challenge of containing everything within a single sentence. Happy day.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018
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Thanks for reading it, Bill. Yes, I knew it before using the exercise for posting a piece. I liked the idea, so I paid the points knowing I didn't have a chance. You are a terrific guy, my friend.
Phillip
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This was not one of my better pieces, Bill. Thanks for reading.
Phillip
Comment from heart of Lou
You did a good job utilizing all the required words for this contest. Your comments are thoughtful, and the picture fits the sentence. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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You did a good job utilizing all the required words for this contest. Your comments are thoughtful, and the picture fits the sentence. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thanks for reading, Lou.
Phillip
Comment from apky
I can only say Amen to your words, Phillip:
>To contribute to the mission of mankind, he came up with the slogan: Make This World Better. It helped toward sacred living.<
Sorry I'm out of sixes.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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I can only say Amen to your words, Phillip:
>To contribute to the mission of mankind, he came up with the slogan: Make This World Better. It helped toward sacred living.<
Sorry I'm out of sixes.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Aki, don't worry about that. I needed something to write and that post. I paid 4.5 for the idea, not to compete in the contest. Besides, I'm trying to learn and do some personal reading on the side at this time. It's good to hear from you and thanks for reading.
Phillip
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how Humanity contributed and a suggestion helped achieving the mission successfully; but, this work has six sentences instead of one sentence required for the prompt; evidently, this has failed to maintain the writing prompt fully; DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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This speaks how Humanity contributed and a suggestion helped achieving the mission successfully; but, this work has six sentences instead of one sentence required for the prompt; evidently, this has failed to maintain the writing prompt fully; DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, did you enter this contest twice. This is more theological and gives me a sense of mankind's efforts to recover from the Fall.
Suggestion:
"endeavors calling them the worldly living" (I feel you could drop 'the' here. Up to you)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Oh, did you enter this contest twice. This is more theological and gives me a sense of mankind's efforts to recover from the Fall.
Suggestion:
"endeavors calling them the worldly living" (I feel you could drop 'the' here. Up to you)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I entered the contest for the idea. Not to win. Having a reason to create something from nothing is scarce for me at my skill level. I'm studying and reading while attempting not to fall too far behind in rating. Thanks for reading, Lyenochka.
Phillip
Comment from Mastery
Very well done, Phillip. You sent a wonderfully inspiring message in this sentence and used all of the words that the contest called for. It is done smoothly and seems to be grammatically correct. Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Very well done, Phillip. You sent a wonderfully inspiring message in this sentence and used all of the words that the contest called for. It is done smoothly and seems to be grammatically correct. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Bob. When the system told me it was coming out with a new rating, I jumped at the chance to increase my position.
Phillip
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A positive and uplifting write Phillip to encourage us all to have a good attitude to make the world better and bring smiles back to everyone's faces, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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A positive and uplifting write Phillip to encourage us all to have a good attitude to make the world better and bring smiles back to everyone's faces, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Dolly. I didn't know what to post that made sense.
Phillip
Comment from robyn corum
Phillip,
I think you've done a nice job incorporating those required words into this contest entry -- but I think the instructions call for them to all be used in ONE sentence. Maybe you can check on that to be sure? Good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Phillip,
I think you've done a nice job incorporating those required words into this contest entry -- but I think the instructions call for them to all be used in ONE sentence. Maybe you can check on that to be sure? Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Yes, I know. I didn't post to win. I posted to increase my rating. I know I will never win any contest. At least not in the near future. Thanks for reading, Robyn.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Phillip, this paragraph is really very well written, and I agree with you every single step of the way. The only thing is that the prompt says it has to be a sentence of forty words, not a paragraph. Hence there can be no full stops. What about semicolons in the right places? I really liked this short piece. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Hi Phillip, this paragraph is really very well written, and I agree with you every single step of the way. The only thing is that the prompt says it has to be a sentence of forty words, not a paragraph. Hence there can be no full stops. What about semicolons in the right places? I really liked this short piece. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I know what the contest wanted. I won't win any of these contest. I posted to help my rating. I needed to write something, anything that made halfway sense. Thanks for reading, Ulla.
Phillip
