The Murder
A tale of murder22 total reviews
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Your twist at the end is inspired. Two of me--are we dealing with a split personality or schizophrenia? I sense some sort of mental illness and you delve into the characters mind with great detail and horror.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Your twist at the end is inspired. Two of me--are we dealing with a split personality or schizophrenia? I sense some sort of mental illness and you delve into the characters mind with great detail and horror.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Either or. Schizophrenia is one form of split personality. Each personality is unaware of the others. So the murderer thought he was innocent until he discovered his second personality and realized he killed the guy. So the main guy really was innocent. But he shared a body with the murderer. Thank you for the great review
Comment from Pantygynt
I think it was Jack Ketch the famous British executioner who maintained that he had never hanged a guilty man as they had all claimed to be innocent. But it must be absolutely awful to be accused of a murder you really did not commit.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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I think it was Jack Ketch the famous British executioner who maintained that he had never hanged a guilty man as they had all claimed to be innocent. But it must be absolutely awful to be accused of a murder you really did not commit.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2018
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Thank you Jim. Unless another of your personalities did the killing. Thank you for the excellent review
Comment from pbomar1115
I enjoyed the story the poem told. It had me interested to the point that I had no clue how it would end. Until I see evidence why the guy was being questioned, I stayed with him. To learn that he was possibly guilty shocked me.
Phillip
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I enjoyed the story the poem told. It had me interested to the point that I had no clue how it would end. Until I see evidence why the guy was being questioned, I stayed with him. To learn that he was possibly guilty shocked me.
Phillip
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Phillip for your lovely review. Nice to see you tonight
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a really good tale of murder. It's descriptive, detailed, and very well thought out. I like the excellent rhyming and flow of this throughout. I really enjoyed this little adventure. Well done Pam!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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This is a really good tale of murder. It's descriptive, detailed, and very well thought out. I like the excellent rhyming and flow of this throughout. I really enjoyed this little adventure. Well done Pam!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Jeffrey for your awesome review
Comment from kiwijenny
Ooooo what a good ending,.what a twist...I was ready to call you innocent ...or at least to hope
Great picture...sad day
Well penned
I fin'ly see him in my mind;
the part of me who's not so kind;
Chilling
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Ooooo what a good ending,.what a twist...I was ready to call you innocent ...or at least to hope
Great picture...sad day
Well penned
I fin'ly see him in my mind;
the part of me who's not so kind;
Chilling
God bless
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you kiwi as usual for a lovely review
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Pam girl you high now this is very intriguing story and from what I'm gathering this person had a dual personality one that was good and no that was bad and then the good one do you not remember what the bet when did at the time that the murder was being done. But then after sitting in the pain for awhile it all comes back to mine that the bad guy part of him did do the murder. How's clever
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Pam girl you high now this is very intriguing story and from what I'm gathering this person had a dual personality one that was good and no that was bad and then the good one do you not remember what the bet when did at the time that the murder was being done. But then after sitting in the pain for awhile it all comes back to mine that the bad guy part of him did do the murder. How's clever
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Mary for your usual wonderful review
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Pam its because you do WONDERFUL pieces abd and its well deserving
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, this was certainly a startling write - the surprise ending was totally unexpected and therefore, compelling in conclusion. They rhyming rhythm was even and moved easily in the narration, smooth in flow and movement...
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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In my opinion, this was certainly a startling write - the surprise ending was totally unexpected and therefore, compelling in conclusion. They rhyming rhythm was even and moved easily in the narration, smooth in flow and movement...
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Eve so much for this fine review
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You are very welcome, Pam...Eve
Comment from Susanjohn
Wait, is there a spilt personality going on here??? or did an innocent man go to jail?? lots of nice ryhmes in this smooth flowing piece. I enjoyed reading :-)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Wait, is there a spilt personality going on here??? or did an innocent man go to jail?? lots of nice ryhmes in this smooth flowing piece. I enjoyed reading :-)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Susan. Well it is a mystery but I have inside information that it is about a schizophrenic. Thank you for your nice review
Comment from William Ross
Nice, I like this, great rhyming and meter on this. Sometimes I think criminals have to many rights in this country, I also believe crime and murder in this country is the highest than anywhere in the world. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Nice, I like this, great rhyming and meter on this. Sometimes I think criminals have to many rights in this country, I also believe crime and murder in this country is the highest than anywhere in the world. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Hi William. Thank you for your nice review. Actually the murder capitals of the world are those Central American countries from which asylum seekers come to our Southern borders. Their rate is far higher than ours.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Very interesting. Great flow, rhyme, rhythm. Split personalities? Well written, especially was surprised written by a woman, thought i was reading a man writer. Great job with this. Good luck and Great job!
wendy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Very interesting. Great flow, rhyme, rhythm. Split personalities? Well written, especially was surprised written by a woman, thought i was reading a man writer. Great job with this. Good luck and Great job!
wendy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Thank you Wendy. Sometimes I write from a man?s or child?s point of you. Thank you for your awesome review
