The Last Straw
A Trolaan Poem29 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Dactylic Tetrameter you have penned for the potlatch. You used very good words talking about days of past with the straws and things. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Great job! love, Teri
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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This is a very well written Dactylic Tetrameter you have penned for the potlatch. You used very good words talking about days of past with the straws and things. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Great job! love, Teri
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Teri. Love to you and yours.
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love to you and yours also!
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
>Not only reading this particular type of format very interesting and enjoyable but the actual concept of your context was also very entertaining and fluidly relaxing.
>I like the fact that you used that line in the last part of your poem which is "minimizing modern ways" Is really a reflection of where our society is going and And how were going back to where it was when things were more earth conscious.
> Thank you for sharing such an enjoyable and entertaining read, Damommy and take care and have a good one especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Cheers, Damommy;
>Not only reading this particular type of format very interesting and enjoyable but the actual concept of your context was also very entertaining and fluidly relaxing.
>I like the fact that you used that line in the last part of your poem which is "minimizing modern ways" Is really a reflection of where our society is going and And how were going back to where it was when things were more earth conscious.
> Thank you for sharing such an enjoyable and entertaining read, Damommy and take care and have a good one especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alx
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you so much. This is a wonderful review.
I'd like things to stay the same, but they never do. A sign of getting older. lol
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>Cheers, Damommy; yes, I think as we grow , some of us don't like to change.
>I also, rather like it to stay the same, but with a little bit of embellishing frills on the outside and sometimes even a soft bubble so if I crash land. Chuckle!
> But I'm like you, Damommy, it's more cozy, being the same And I find technology is a waste of time, even though I do use it.
>I believe it is a waste of time if you're using it for fun, but if it's used for learning and creativity, I think it's great. Maybe just a little fun. Chuckle!
> Take care and have a good one, my friend.
Alx
Comment from Pantygynt
This format is pretty much the title of your poem I reckon. Lol. It does open up the opportunities for alliteration though and you have taken advantage of that to good effect.
I am sort of back from vacation but tankaed up to the fourth of August so am easing my way back in with a few reviews. This was an amusing start to "back to work".
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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This format is pretty much the title of your poem I reckon. Lol. It does open up the opportunities for alliteration though and you have taken advantage of that to good effect.
I am sort of back from vacation but tankaed up to the fourth of August so am easing my way back in with a few reviews. This was an amusing start to "back to work".
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Jim.
I was wondering yesterday if you were back yet. I bet Paddy was glad to see you!
Shoulder still healing, but lots better. Physical therapy is great!
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P was out when I got in and I didn't see him for 24 hours then he turned up and spent last night on my bed. He will probably ignore me tonight because he has been asleep all day. I am working my way back gently. Will you be joing the class on August 10th?
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I don't know yet if I'll be in class or not. It's still hard for me to type, and I have so much going on right now, with trying to unload my mother's and my uncle's houses. Whew!
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No pressure. It is up to you. I have no firm sign-ups yet but several promises.
I hope your shoulder continues to mend.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, first I would like to say that I love your poem and it goes splendidly with the picture. Yeah, sometimes it would nice that certain things would survive from the past. But the world moves on relentlessly in the name of progress. That is one of the reasons I love to live here which is a happy marriage of new and what has always been. The poem structure sounds complicated to me, but as usual you rise to the challenge and write a wonderful poem.
I've meant to ask. How is your shoulder? Warm regards. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Hi Yvonne, first I would like to say that I love your poem and it goes splendidly with the picture. Yeah, sometimes it would nice that certain things would survive from the past. But the world moves on relentlessly in the name of progress. That is one of the reasons I love to live here which is a happy marriage of new and what has always been. The poem structure sounds complicated to me, but as usual you rise to the challenge and write a wonderful poem.
I've meant to ask. How is your shoulder? Warm regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I was thinking about your village the other day. Sounds like a place I would love.
Thank you for such a glowing review.
Shoulder still has a long way to go, but it's so much better than it was. I'm getting more and more movement every day. Physical therapy works wonders. However, they tell me it may take a couple of years to really get back to near normal. Yikes! Thanks for asking.
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I'm glad it's better, but a couple of years is a long time.I just hope it gets better gradually all the time. Oh, the joy of getting older.LOL.
Comment from Bill Schott
This trolaan, The Last Straw, written in this complex attention to detail framework, captures this news item about banning these plastic straws. This opens the door for the nostalgic look at all the things that are forever existing only in our past, by virtue of some knee-jerk reaction today.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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This trolaan, The Last Straw, written in this complex attention to detail framework, captures this news item about banning these plastic straws. This opens the door for the nostalgic look at all the things that are forever existing only in our past, by virtue of some knee-jerk reaction today.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I know. I get so tired of them constantly changing things that have worked forever. Ah, progress.
Thank you for a great review. I appreciate that you notice the format. It was a bit hard to do.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Trolaan poem about the banning of plastic straws. That is the least of humans problems there are many real issues that need urgent attention to save the world.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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A very well-written Trolaan poem about the banning of plastic straws. That is the least of humans problems there are many real issues that need urgent attention to save the world.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Maybe there are things that need more attention, but this one is right at home. lol. I love my straws.
Thank you for reviewing. I'll take a look and see if you've done one.
Comment from victor 66
It's interesting, that as we get older, we remember the "good old days". I would bring up to my grandmother, how great it must have been to grow up on a farm where the only transportation was wagon and horse. She say, " What the hell do you know? The winters were colder than hell and the summers were hotter than hell, Riding in a slay in the winter was hard". Best wishes.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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It's interesting, that as we get older, we remember the "good old days". I would bring up to my grandmother, how great it must have been to grow up on a farm where the only transportation was wagon and horse. She say, " What the hell do you know? The winters were colder than hell and the summers were hotter than hell, Riding in a slay in the winter was hard". Best wishes.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Well, I have to say that life has been pretty easy for me. No horse and buggies. But I truly think the simpler life was better.
I tend to live in the past a lot these days. A sign of an old woman. lol
Thank you for taking the time to review. I appreciate it.
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We are all getting older, just some of us don't realize it yet. You are right, I have many pleasant memories of the fifty's .
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow! Definitely one of those forms of poetry that makes you really combine mechanical skill along with the thoughts and emotions you wish to express.....and the best part is that, in reading your piece, your feelings are a very well communicated that the reader is blind to the mechanical prowess until reading your author notes! :) :) In short, a wonderful write with enjoyable rhythm and well-expressed message....and thanx for the lesson through example! :) ;)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Wow! Definitely one of those forms of poetry that makes you really combine mechanical skill along with the thoughts and emotions you wish to express.....and the best part is that, in reading your piece, your feelings are a very well communicated that the reader is blind to the mechanical prowess until reading your author notes! :) :) In short, a wonderful write with enjoyable rhythm and well-expressed message....and thanx for the lesson through example! :) ;)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you for this most wonderful review. I was afraid it wouldn't make sense to anyone but me, but you've made me feel so much better.
Comment from tfawcus
I guess we'll all just have to use edible straws - maybe made out of pasta! Everything needs to be biodegradable these days, or so it seems. I know that I am! What a complicated form this is - congratulations on handling it so well!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I guess we'll all just have to use edible straws - maybe made out of pasta! Everything needs to be biodegradable these days, or so it seems. I know that I am! What a complicated form this is - congratulations on handling it so well!
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Thank you, Tony. I always feel so much better when you said it's good.
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes, what a fantastic poem, this is, Yvonne and I can relate to the straw being a passing phase even though I truly enjoy them. Your subject material definitely alludes to many pleasant memories.
And, thank you for the clear instruction in your author notes. This form looks really complicated to me, but you have done a fantastic job.
A great read and pleasure to review. Great contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Yes, what a fantastic poem, this is, Yvonne and I can relate to the straw being a passing phase even though I truly enjoy them. Your subject material definitely alludes to many pleasant memories.
And, thank you for the clear instruction in your author notes. This form looks really complicated to me, but you have done a fantastic job.
A great read and pleasure to review. Great contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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I appreciate the lovely remarks, Gloria. But you know if I can do it, you surely can. It was a little harder than usual.
