Perennials of War
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Comment from giraffmang
Ah, the painting is so much more than a painting and the relationship is so much more than Shana wants to admit.
Few bits & pieces-
"That little lady, probably won't happen anytime soon." - I think another comma after that here.
Stay safe, and keep doing what you're doing and. We're going to see what we have on Kuznetsov- either make this one sentence or delete 'and'.
I won't need to say a word. You're face says it all." - Your.
, "Is this okay. I don't think we'll be bothered in here." - may need a question mark in here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Ah, the painting is so much more than a painting and the relationship is so much more than Shana wants to admit.
Few bits & pieces-
"That little lady, probably won't happen anytime soon." - I think another comma after that here.
Stay safe, and keep doing what you're doing and. We're going to see what we have on Kuznetsov- either make this one sentence or delete 'and'.
I won't need to say a word. You're face says it all." - Your.
, "Is this okay. I don't think we'll be bothered in here." - may need a question mark in here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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I wondered about a comma after that. I have added it. The others are stupid errors. I knew better. I have edited this post for months and still overlooked them, DARN!!! Thank you for the catches. I really do appreciate it.
Comment from Sasha
It seems Shana is slowly growing more comfortable with Drew. His brother needs lighten up with teasing her too. Fascinating information about the possibility of a chip being in/on the painting. Shana has good reason to worry, obviously saying she no longer wants the painting will not get the Russians to back off. Great j ob with this one, lots of important information. Good luck with starting back to school. I am sending positive thoughts in your direction... hope they help ease your concerns.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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It seems Shana is slowly growing more comfortable with Drew. His brother needs lighten up with teasing her too. Fascinating information about the possibility of a chip being in/on the painting. Shana has good reason to worry, obviously saying she no longer wants the painting will not get the Russians to back off. Great j ob with this one, lots of important information. Good luck with starting back to school. I am sending positive thoughts in your direction... hope they help ease your concerns.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the positive thoughts and kind review.
Comment from country ranch writer
Okay you left me hanging so get to writing! I need to know the answers to his question! Okay I will try to be patient keep up the good work but just hurry! Hehe
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Okay you left me hanging so get to writing! I need to know the answers to his question! Okay I will try to be patient keep up the good work but just hurry! Hehe
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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LOl I loved your review.
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smiles
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SMILES
Comment from c_lucas
Shana is beginning to show her emotions for Drew. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
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Shana is beginning to show her emotions for Drew. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Easy question. She was afraid and wanted security, which Drew provides. If there are more bedrooms, drag another bed in. Cots are not comfortable. I wonder if geckos crawled on her... yuk!!! :)
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Easy question. She was afraid and wanted security, which Drew provides. If there are more bedrooms, drag another bed in. Cots are not comfortable. I wonder if geckos crawled on her... yuk!!! :)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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LOL I don't know if geckos crawled on her or not. LOL I appreciated your review.
Comment from judiverse
Wonderful chapter. It makes sense about the painting. If there is some disc containing information the Russians want, they could very well feel they need to eliminate Shana because she might know too much. Poor Shana is usually the butt of humor from Zach. Now it's Shana's sleeping on the floor, when there might be geckos crawling about. Having the dogs there will help with security. Good move to bring them. Shana needs to lighten up, but hard to do when she's under so much pressure with threats being made. Excellent work. judi
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Wonderful chapter. It makes sense about the painting. If there is some disc containing information the Russians want, they could very well feel they need to eliminate Shana because she might know too much. Poor Shana is usually the butt of humor from Zach. Now it's Shana's sleeping on the floor, when there might be geckos crawling about. Having the dogs there will help with security. Good move to bring them. Shana needs to lighten up, but hard to do when she's under so much pressure with threats being made. Excellent work. judi
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I'll be glad to see the dogs again. judi
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I must admit, I find Shana's behaviour very unlikely to happen in the twenty-first century in the Western world. But I like the story, so I go along with it "What's wrong with (the) pretty lady? Has she seen another gecko?"
I guess that's one way to put it." Anderson grinned. "I like to think of them as we get to know each other better and drawer = draw closer to one another."
All the best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Hi Barbara, I must admit, I find Shana's behaviour very unlikely to happen in the twenty-first century in the Western world. But I like the story, so I go along with it "What's wrong with (the) pretty lady? Has she seen another gecko?"
I guess that's one way to put it." Anderson grinned. "I like to think of them as we get to know each other better and drawer = draw closer to one another."
All the best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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I will make the changes and I appreciate the catches. As a rule in today's world it things like this don't happen, but that being said, I do know, first hand, situations where it does happen. I have had students at school who were brought up extremely fundamental, whether it be Jewish, Catholic, Baptist, or even Wiccan. I think the key word here fundamental.
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I see what you mean. Fundamental is the word. :)))
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It sure is and it is scary sometimes. A year ago, I had a child from a religious background that to be honest was almost scary. We've had a lot of children from that church and each year it gets worse and worse.
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That does sound scary. Where has the tolerance gone?
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Good question. I would like to see the US go back to it. It' s getting really bad.
Comment from royowen
Poor Shana, she's both embarrassed and scared, and Zachary's not helping by the verbal shots and fun he's having at poor Shana's expense, it seems they'll have to get married now, heh heh. The over riding question is...why did she sleep on the floor next to Drew? Well done Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
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Poor Shana, she's both embarrassed and scared, and Zachary's not helping by the verbal shots and fun he's having at poor Shana's expense, it seems they'll have to get married now, heh heh. The over riding question is...why did she sleep on the floor next to Drew? Well done Barbara, great episode, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welckme Barbara,
Comment from Sankey
Giving out the SIXES again! So much emotion and new leads in this chapter.Sounding a bit like the secret "Gov" coding in the movie "Mercury Rising" picked up by the boy with Autism.
Now for the spags and or suggestions.
I(t?) must be I'm really dumb."
In the following, I know it is Drew talking to Shana but do you need to make that a little clearer..perhaps...Drew turned to Shana...then the following?
"I see you have on one of the New York outfits. Thank you." Anderson grinned.
"I still feel I need to repay you."
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Giving out the SIXES again! So much emotion and new leads in this chapter.Sounding a bit like the secret "Gov" coding in the movie "Mercury Rising" picked up by the boy with Autism.
Now for the spags and or suggestions.
I(t?) must be I'm really dumb."
In the following, I know it is Drew talking to Shana but do you need to make that a little clearer..perhaps...Drew turned to Shana...then the following?
"I see you have on one of the New York outfits. Thank you." Anderson grinned.
"I still feel I need to repay you."
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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I have made the corrections. I can't believe I made the first one. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
Really good now here we as readers reading the serious institution about the painting and the real fun part of Shana sleeping on the floor (smiles with Geckos) and Anderson sleeping comfortable in a bed next to Shana
Thank you sharing.
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Hello Barb
Really good now here we as readers reading the serious institution about the painting and the real fun part of Shana sleeping on the floor (smiles with Geckos) and Anderson sleeping comfortable in a bed next to Shana
Thank you sharing.
Gert
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are so welcome Barb
Gert
