Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Tony. Very well written dribble fiction. A complete story told in so few words is quite an achievement, for sure.

I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Looks like a sure winner to me. Bob

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 Comment Written 29-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018

Many thanks for your review of this unpromoted post, Bob, and for your good luck wishes. Much appreciated. This was based on a scene that I witnessed on a lakeside beach north of New York a few weeks ago. All the best, Tony

p.s. I'm now back in Australia and when I've recovered from the jetlag, hope to find the time to read your novel in progress. I had a quick look through the most recent installment the other day and was most impressed.

reply by Mastery on 29-Jul-2018

Thanks so much, Tony. Bob

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Kids can be mischievous. And this would sure get me hopping..mad ...and hoping that I'd find the money...good thing it wasn't fistfuls of credit cards...
Very concise...like the metaphor butterflies
God bless

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 Comment Written 29-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018

Many thanks for reviewing this unpromoted post, Jenny. Yes, I guess the mother would have been pretty angry! All the best, Tony