The Autopsy of a Trash bag
Snooping through someone's trash can be revealing.6 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is well a well written short story about a person's curiosity and person's loneliness. It is a strange way of getting to know someone, but it may turn out for the best for both of them.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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This is well a well written short story about a person's curiosity and person's loneliness. It is a strange way of getting to know someone, but it may turn out for the best for both of them.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Thank you for reading and your generous support. This was fun to write.
Blessings,
Brigitte
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Brigitte,
Since I'm a bit of a recluse - I'm sure my neighbors wonder about me - I found myself wishing there would be a neighbor who would go through all this trouble and I could be brave enough to invite them in.
The story was well-told and I found myself lost in the trash bag. Thank you for sharing,
A few notes,
'TheF first thing noted...'
'Right on top+, there was an empty...'
'*She wasa heavy smoker.'
My big suggestion to folks is to read the piece out loud after your first draft. You will find this first read through will help you identify glaring errors. You will hear missing words, the incorrect form of words, and often you will see your own spelling errors.
My second suggestion is to consult a style guide. These guides will help you clean up your sentence structure, and address grammatical issues you may have problems with. My favorite books are Elements of Style 2017, Elements of Grammar, and Common Mistakes Writers Make. They are easy to read and broken down into chapters dealing with the issues of punctuation, word choice, and syntax.
I do hope you find my suggestions helpful.
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Hi, Brigitte,
Since I'm a bit of a recluse - I'm sure my neighbors wonder about me - I found myself wishing there would be a neighbor who would go through all this trouble and I could be brave enough to invite them in.
The story was well-told and I found myself lost in the trash bag. Thank you for sharing,
A few notes,
'The
'Right on top+, there was an empty...'
'*She wasa heavy smoker.'
My big suggestion to folks is to read the piece out loud after your first draft. You will find this first read through will help you identify glaring errors. You will hear missing words, the incorrect form of words, and often you will see your own spelling errors.
My second suggestion is to consult a style guide. These guides will help you clean up your sentence structure, and address grammatical issues you may have problems with. My favorite books are Elements of Style 2017, Elements of Grammar, and Common Mistakes Writers Make. They are easy to read and broken down into chapters dealing with the issues of punctuation, word choice, and syntax.
I do hope you find my suggestions helpful.
~patty~
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank Patty for your kind supportive and helpful words. I would have never pictured you to be a recluse. Your writings speak to the contrary. I appreciate your advice and help very much. Please read my post, A Gift from Beyond and tell me your thoughts on this true event.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Brigitte, that's one way to meet your neighbor. I agree. One's trash does reveal so much about a person. Good job. I liked the analogy to an autopsy. Your lines progressed well with great detail. I like the starred thoughts along the way. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Well, Brigitte, that's one way to meet your neighbor. I agree. One's trash does reveal so much about a person. Good job. I liked the analogy to an autopsy. Your lines progressed well with great detail. I like the starred thoughts along the way. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reading and obviously liking this posting. I appreciate your kind comments and review. This was a fun write and came out of nowhere but my befuddled mind.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I have never looked through a neighbors trash except for those things that blow into my yard sometimes, and it's never anything interesting. Maybe I should try it as I don't know them. The house next door is a rental and across the street so people move in and out. I do try to be friendly when I see them, which isn't often. Maybe I should make some cookies and go see them. Fun and meaningful read. Well done. Rox
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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I have never looked through a neighbors trash except for those things that blow into my yard sometimes, and it's never anything interesting. Maybe I should try it as I don't know them. The house next door is a rental and across the street so people move in and out. I do try to be friendly when I see them, which isn't often. Maybe I should make some cookies and go see them. Fun and meaningful read. Well done. Rox
Comment Written 25-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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This was fun to write. One can learn so much about people from their discarded trash. This was fiction but have always wanted to do this just like I wonder what goes on behind closed doors. Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Have a great evening.
Brigitte
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Oh, my! What a fantastic little story you've penned here. I laughed quite a bit throughout the entire story, the way you told it was wonderfully humorous.
I suppose one's trash would tell a lot about someone. Nicely done, an entertaining story. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Oh, my! What a fantastic little story you've penned here. I laughed quite a bit throughout the entire story, the way you told it was wonderfully humorous.
I suppose one's trash would tell a lot about someone. Nicely done, an entertaining story. ~Kerry
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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If a reader finds enjoyment in a story, the writer was successful Thank you for reading and the lovely comments. This was fun to write and could have been much longer but sometimes less is more.
Have a great day!
Brigitte
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And success it was. You have a wonderful day!
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The sun is shining on you, be blessed.
Brigitte
Comment from robyn corum
Brigitte,
What a fun piece! I was realllly worried about this neighbor -- just imagine if she lived next to ME! hahaha! I enjoyed the twist at the end, with the unfinished letter AND the part about confessing her small eccentricity. A lot of fun! Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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Brigitte,
What a fun piece! I was realllly worried about this neighbor -- just imagine if she lived next to ME! hahaha! I enjoyed the twist at the end, with the unfinished letter AND the part about confessing her small eccentricity. A lot of fun! Thanks!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2018
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If a reader finds enjoyment in a story, the writer was successful Thank you for reading and the lovely comments. This was fun to write and could have been much longer but sometimes less is more.
Have a great day!
Brigitte
